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Majestic Road Hill in the suburb of our city is so steep (陡峭的) in some places that if you stopped pedaling (踩踏板), your bike would stop immediately and start to roll backwards. The uphill path is so long that it is difficult for one to make it to the top.
The thirty of us came from the same class. We had a cross-country bicycle tour that day. Once we got to its top, there were two flat places: Dairy Queen for burgers and Becker’s for homemade donuts (a small cake). Usually we had little money to spare, but for this challenging event, we all had saved up a little. The deal was simple: The first one that got to the top would get his meal paid for by the rest of us.
Ed and I had gone ahead of the whole team. We positioned ourselves at an advantageous point to observe the other riders who fell behind to struggle on the path. We reached the shortest, but steepest part of the hill, called “Heartbreak Ridge”. It got the name because many strong young people, who want to make it without their feet leaving their pedal to that point, only fail with a broken heart as they gather up bikes.
As sixteen-year-old teenagers, Ed and I were the best at climbing hills on our bikes. I had strong legs good at climbing and Ed was so strong that he could make a football fifty yards away with a kick. The hill got the steepest for us to get to the top. Our upper body had to hang over the handle bars to keep us from falling backwards. Ed was in front of me and he eventually made it to the top. He wiped sweat from his forehead and then he looked at me, cheering. “Kev, come on!” I tried. When I was nine feet away from Ed, something happened. My legs began to cramp (抽筋). I, standing on my bike, couldn’t pedal, or move forwards. I was about to lose my balance.
注意：
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Just at the critical moment, Ed jumped down from the top and gave me a helping hand.
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Ed and I cheered for them while they were struggling to ride towards the top.
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一、文章大意
本文講述了作者和同學(xué)們參加越野自行車旅行，來(lái)到了陡峭難行的 Majestic Road Hill。他們約定第一個(gè)到達(dá)山頂?shù)娜擞善渌苏?qǐng)客吃飯，作者和 Ed 領(lǐng)先眾人，但在接近山頂最陡峭的 “Heartbreak Ridge” 處，作者腿部抽筋，無(wú)法前行。關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻，Ed 折返幫助作者，兩人最終一起到達(dá)山頂，之后他們又為后面奮力爬坡的同學(xué)們加油助威。這次經(jīng)歷不僅是一次體力的挑戰(zhàn)，更增進(jìn)了同學(xué)們之間的情誼。
二、故事山分析
開端：三十名同學(xué)參加越野自行車旅行，來(lái)到了以陡峭著稱的 Majestic Road Hill，約定第一個(gè)到達(dá)山頂者由其他人請(qǐng)客吃飯，大家都為此次挑戰(zhàn)攢了錢，作者和 Ed 領(lǐng)先眾人。
發(fā)展：作者和 Ed 來(lái)到了最陡峭的 “Heartbreak Ridge”，Ed 成功登頂，而作者在距山頂九英尺處腿部抽筋，無(wú)法前進(jìn)，面臨摔倒危險(xiǎn)。
高潮：關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻，Ed 跳下來(lái)幫助作者，兩人一起推車上山。
結(jié)局：兩人到達(dá)山頂后，為后面奮力爬坡的同學(xué)們加油，同學(xué)們陸續(xù)到達(dá)山頂，大家共同分享征服這座山的喜悅。
三、伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
伏筆：The thirty of us came from the same class. We had a cross-country bicycle tour that day.
回應(yīng)：在續(xù)寫中，同學(xué)們之間相互幫助、共同克服困難，體現(xiàn)了班級(jí)同學(xué)之間的團(tuán)結(jié)友愛，如 Ed 幫助作者，大家一起為后面的同學(xué)加油，這種團(tuán)結(jié)的氛圍正是因?yàn)樗麄儊?lái)自同一個(gè)班級(jí)，一起參加活動(dòng)所形成的。
伏筆：The uphill path is so long that it is difficult for one to make it to the top.
回應(yīng)：后文同學(xué)們奮力爬坡，有的同學(xué)氣喘吁吁但仍不放棄，呼應(yīng)了上坡路艱難這一伏筆，突出了大家克服困難的精神。
伏筆：The deal was simple: The first one that got to the top would get his meal paid for by the rest of us.
回應(yīng)：雖然沒有明確提及最終誰(shuí)獲得了請(qǐng)客吃飯的資格，但從同學(xué)們一起歡呼慶祝征服山峰來(lái)看，這個(gè)約定已經(jīng)不重要，重要的是大家共同經(jīng)歷的過(guò)程，暗示了這次活動(dòng)的意義超越了最初的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)約定。
伏筆：It got the name [Heartbreak Ridge] because many strong young people, who want to make it without their feet leaving their pedal to that point, only fail with a broken heart as they gather up bikes.
回應(yīng)：作者在 “Heartbreak Ridge” 處遇到困難，幾乎要失敗，但在 Ed 的幫助下成功克服，與這一伏筆形成對(duì)比，突出了友誼和團(tuán)隊(duì)精神的力量，即使在被認(rèn)為容易失敗的地方也能戰(zhàn)勝困難。
伏筆：Ed was in front of me and he eventually made it to the top. He wiped sweat from his forehead and then he looked at me, cheering.
回應(yīng)：Ed 成功登頂后沒有獨(dú)自享受勝利，而是立刻關(guān)注并幫助作者，進(jìn)一步深化了兩人之間的友誼，同時(shí)也為后文大家相互鼓勵(lì)、共同完成挑戰(zhàn)奠定了情感基礎(chǔ)。
四、續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：
要點(diǎn) 1：描述 Ed 幫助作者時(shí)兩人的具體動(dòng)作和對(duì)話，如 Ed 如何攙扶作者、給予安慰和鼓勵(lì)的話語(yǔ)，體現(xiàn)兩人之間的深厚友誼。
要點(diǎn) 2：寫兩人克服困難到達(dá)山頂后的狀態(tài)，包括身體的疲憊和內(nèi)心的喜悅，為下文給同學(xué)們加油做鋪墊。
第二段：
要點(diǎn) 1：詳細(xì)描寫同學(xué)們爬坡的艱難過(guò)程，如他們的表情、動(dòng)作和堅(jiān)持不懈的精神表現(xiàn)。
要點(diǎn) 2：突出大家最終成功登頂后的集體氛圍，如歡呼、擁抱等慶祝動(dòng)作，以及作者對(duì)這次經(jīng)歷的感悟，升華主題。
情感線
文章起始，同學(xué)們懷著興奮與期待開始這次越野自行車之旅，在攀登陡峭山坡時(shí)，作者和 Ed 之間展現(xiàn)出深厚的友誼與互助精神，從 Ed 毫不猶豫地折返幫助作者，到兩人共同克服困難，情感逐漸升溫。而后面對(duì)同學(xué)們爬坡的艱難，大家相互鼓勵(lì)加油，充滿了團(tuán)結(jié)友愛的情感。最終成功登頂后，喜悅、自豪與集體榮譽(yù)感交織在一起，整個(gè)情感線從個(gè)人之間的友情擴(kuò)展到班級(jí)集體的團(tuán)結(jié)之情，展現(xiàn)了這次活動(dòng)對(duì)大家情感的深刻影響。
六、故事線
同學(xué)們組隊(duì)參加越野自行車旅行，來(lái)到 Majestic Road Hill，準(zhǔn)備挑戰(zhàn)爬坡。
作者和 Ed 領(lǐng)先眾人，到達(dá)最艱難的 “Heartbreak Ridge”，Ed 成功登頂，作者卻腿部抽筋遇險(xiǎn)。
Ed 折返幫助作者，兩人一起推自行車向山頂前進(jìn)。
兩人成功到達(dá)山頂，稍作休息后，開始為后面爬坡的同學(xué)們加油助威。
同學(xué)們?cè)谂榔逻^(guò)程中奮力堅(jiān)持，盡管艱難，但都不放棄。
同學(xué)們陸續(xù)到達(dá)山頂，大家一起慶祝這次成功征服陡坡的經(jīng)歷，共同分享喜悅。
七、主旨升華句
This challenging journey on the bike not only strengthened our physical endurance but also deepened the bond of friendship and unity among us, proving that together we can overcome any obstacle.
The steep hill became a stage where our perseverance and mutual support were vividly displayed, teaching us that the power of a team is far greater than the sum of individuals.
Through this arduous bicycle tour, we realized that the most precious reward is not the destination but the journey filled with friendship, determination, and the spirit of never giving up.
The struggle on Majestic Road Hill was a testament to our growth and the value of unity. It showed us that when we face difficulties hand in hand, we can turn a seemingly impossible task into a memorable triumph.
This cross-country bicycle adventure was more than just a physical activity; it was a lesson in life. It taught us that in the face of challenges, the love and support of our companions are the strongest driving forces that lead us to success.
八、寫作示范
示范一
Just at the critical moment, Ed jumped down from the top and gave me a helping hand. He held the back of my bike with one hand and my arm with the other, steadying me. "Don't worry, Kev. We'll get there together," he said, his eyes full of determination. With his support, I managed to get off the bike and stretch my cramped legs. Slowly, we pushed our bikes up the remaining part of the hill, step by step. When we finally reached the top, we were both exhausted but filled with a sense of accomplishment. We looked at each other and grinned, knowing that this was a moment we would never forget.
Ed and I cheered for them while they were struggling to ride towards the top. We saw John's face turn red as he gritted his teeth and pedaled with all his might. Sarah was breathing heavily but kept going, her eyes fixed on the goal. As they got closer, we could hear their shouts of determination. One by one, they made it to the top, collapsing on the ground with exhaustion but with huge smiles on their faces. In that moment, I realized that this was not just about winning a meal. It was about the journey, the friendship, and the spirit of never giving up. We had conquered the hill together, and our bond as a class had grown even stronger.
示范二
Just at the critical moment, Ed jumped down from the top and gave me a helping hand. He quickly assessed the situation and said, "Lean on me, Kev. Let's do this." With his strength and my determination, we managed to move forward. As we walked, he shared some words of encouragement, reminding me of all the tough rides we had been through before. Step by step, we made our way to the top. Once there, we took a moment to catch our breath and looked back at the path we had just conquered.
Ed and I cheered for them while they were struggling to ride towards the top. The sight of our classmates pushing themselves to the limit was inspiring. Tom was sweating profusely but didn't slow down, and Lisa was shouting words of motivation to herself. We could feel their energy and their will to succeed. When the last of them reached the top, we all gathered in a circle, high-fiving and hugging each other. This experience had shown us that with friendship and teamwork, we could overcome any steep hill in our lives. It was a day filled with challenges, but more importantly, it was a day that strengthened our unity and made us cherish the bond we shared as a class.

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