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In the farmers’ market, there were many other stalls (攤位) with all kinds of food for sale as well as colourful rows of frult and vegetables set out on tables. Cooked food stalls filled the air with the wonderful smells of hot tasty snacks, and the smell of fresh coffee was everywhere.
"Wow," Gus cried out, "Jam (果醬)!"
Just in front of him, there was a jam stall that sold all kinds of home-made jam. But the only kind Gus wanted was strawberry, so he bought a jar. He couldn't help but taste the jam immediately. It was OK, he frowned (皺眉) and shook his head, but never as good as Rose's, whose jam was just magic.
Rose was his neighbour, an elderly lady who lived alone but liked company now and again. Her doorbell was usually too quiet before Gus and his mom moved to the village after his father's death. Gus often rang her doorbell and asked whether she needed anything from the supermarket as he and his mother were going to town. In return, Rose would often give Gus a jar of jam. Gus was amazed how jam could be so delicious, so whenever free he would be at Rose's home watching her make the super jam.
Suddenly, an idea struck Gus. Probably he could try that to make some money and help his mum. He then bought a bag of potatoes for Rose for her kind offer of wonderful jam.
注意：
(1) 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80 左右;
(2) 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
The next morning, Gus rang Rose’s doorbell. ____________________
【解讀文本】
借助故事六要素分析文本：
- Who：主要人物是Gus 和Rose。
- When：故事發(fā)生在某一天，早上之前在農(nóng)貿(mào)市場(chǎng)，早上Gus 去了Rose 家。
- Where：主要場(chǎng)景在農(nóng)貿(mào)市場(chǎng)和Rose 的家。
- What：Gus 在農(nóng)貿(mào)市場(chǎng)買了不如Rose 做的好吃的草莓果醬，想起 Rose 的美味果醬，萌生出向她學(xué)習(xí)制作果醬賺錢幫媽媽的想法，并為Rose 買了土豆作為回報(bào)。第二天早上Gus 去了 Rose 家。
- Why：Gus 想學(xué)習(xí)制作果醬賺錢是為了幫助媽媽，也是因?yàn)?Rose 的果醬給他留下了深刻的印象。
- How：通過(guò)描述Gus 在農(nóng)貿(mào)市場(chǎng)的經(jīng)歷和他的心理活動(dòng)展現(xiàn)故事。
文章大意
故事發(fā)生在農(nóng)貿(mào)市場(chǎng)，Gus 被一個(gè)賣自制果醬的攤位吸引，買了草莓果醬嘗后覺(jué)得遠(yuǎn)不如鄰居 Rose 做的好吃。Rose 是獨(dú)居老人，Gus 一家搬來(lái)后常幫她跑腿，作為回報(bào) Rose 常送美味果醬，Gus 驚嘆其手藝并常看她制作。受此啟發(fā)，Gus 想買土豆答謝 Rose 并向她學(xué)習(xí)做果醬，希望售賣賺錢幫媽媽緩解經(jīng)濟(jì)壓力，展現(xiàn)出他的懂事與擔(dān)當(dāng)。
伏筆及續(xù)寫回應(yīng)
伏筆：市場(chǎng)上果醬攤的草莓果醬不好吃，回應(yīng)：突出 Rose 果醬手藝的獨(dú)特與高超，讓 Gus 更堅(jiān)定跟她學(xué)做果醬。
伏筆：Rose 獨(dú)居且門鈴常安靜，回應(yīng)：暗示她渴望陪伴，續(xù)寫中她熱情歡迎 Gus 并樂(lè)意傳授技藝，滿足情感需求。
伏筆：Gus 常幫 Rose 跑腿，回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫中 Rose 因這份情誼爽快答應(yīng)教他，體現(xiàn)互幫互助。
伏筆：Gus 常看 Rose 做果醬，回應(yīng)：為他學(xué)習(xí)制作提供基礎(chǔ)，使學(xué)習(xí)過(guò)程更順暢。
伏筆：Gus 想幫媽媽，回應(yīng)：后續(xù)售賣成功幫媽媽減輕負(fù)擔(dān)，達(dá)成心愿。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)
第一段情感線：Rose 熱情回應(yīng) Gus 的請(qǐng)求，Gus 滿懷期待又有些緊張，擔(dān)心學(xué)不好。故事線：Rose 耐心地從挑選草莓開始教，Gus 認(rèn)真筆記，過(guò)程中偶爾犯錯(cuò)但在 Rose 鼓勵(lì)下堅(jiān)持。
第二段情感線：經(jīng)過(guò)努力，Gus 做出成品時(shí)無(wú)比自豪，媽媽看到后感動(dòng)落淚。故事線：Gus 在市場(chǎng)售賣，憑借美味吸引顧客，賺到錢給媽媽，一家人開心擁抱。
主旨升華句：
“In helping others and learning new skills, we often find the key to our own growth.”（在幫助他人與學(xué)習(xí)新技能時(shí)，我們常找到自身成長(zhǎng)的關(guān)鍵。）
“The bond of kindness, once formed, can create miracles and bring warmth to life.”（善良的紐帶一旦形成，能創(chuàng)造奇跡，為生活帶來(lái)溫暖。）
“Hard work with a loving heart always pays off, filling our days with meaning.”（懷著愛(ài)心努力工作總會(huì)有回報(bào)，讓日子充滿意義。）
“True friendship and family love blend, lighting up the path even in toughest times.”（真正的友誼與親情交融，即便在最艱難時(shí)刻也照亮前行之路。）
“Embracing challenges and sharing love make every ordinary day extraordinary.”（迎接挑戰(zhàn)、分享愛(ài)，讓每個(gè)平凡日子變得非凡。）
【續(xù)寫建議】
Gus 會(huì)向Rose 表明來(lái)意，Rose 或許會(huì)感到驚喜和欣慰，然后欣然答應(yīng)教他制作果醬的秘訣。在教學(xué)過(guò)程中，Gus 可能會(huì)遇到一些困難，但他會(huì)憑借自己的努力和Rose 的指導(dǎo)克服。或者Rose 一開始會(huì)擔(dān)心Gus 年紀(jì)小無(wú)法勝任，但最終被Gus 的真誠(chéng)和決心打動(dòng)。
可借鑒Charlotte’s Web中的重點(diǎn)語(yǔ)塊：
“Some pig!”
“A miracle has happened!”
“Terrific”
【下水作文1】
The next morning, Gus rang Rose’s doorbell. When Rose opened the door, Gus nervously stated his purpose. Half surprised, half pleased, Rose agreed approvingly. At the beginning, She had concerns about Gus's young age, but was eventually touched by his sincerity and determination. "OK, let's do it!" she said. During the process, Gus sometimes had some troubles in learning. But with his hard work and Rose's patient guidance, he overcame them. "Terrific!" Rose exclaimed. A miracle had happened, Gus’s magic jam made a hit in the farmer’s market.
【下水作文2】
The next morning, Gus rang Rose’s doorbell. After a short while, Rose opened the door delightedly. After entering the house, Gus handed the potatoes to Rose to show thanks for the yummy jam. And he told the lady that he intended to learn to make jam with her, then he would sell the magic jam in the famer’s market, and Gus suggested that he could pay some money for her. Rose’s eyes were bright and agreed approvingly, but for free. In the following days, Rose showed the process and skills to Gus. With the help of Rose, after practicing many times, Gus produced a new jam. Undoubtedly, the magic jam made a hit. One could create a happy life with a warm heart and hard-working hands.

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