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In the serene morning, our school campus lay bathed in a gentle glow of sunlight. The air was still, with only the occasional chatter of students and the rustle of books breaking the silence. The classrooms were abuzz with activity as students diligently worked on their assignments, their faces lit by the soft light filtering through the windows.
But suddenly, the tranquility was shattered by a violent earthquake. The ground began to shake, sending a shudder through the entire school. The seismic waves were so powerful that they sent a shiver down the spines of every student. Amidst the chaos, a girl named Alice, a fellow member of our class, panicked and fled the classroom in a flash. Her flight was a stark contrast to the complacency of the rest of us who remained seated, unmoved by the rumbling beneath our feet. Yet, as we sat unperturbed, students from other classes streamed out of their classrooms in a panic, their faces etched with fear. The corridor outside our classroom soon filled with the hustle and bustle of fleeing students, their footsteps echoing loudly in the otherwise silent morning.
Suddenly, the school's broadcast system came to life, its voice echoing through the hallways, instructing everyone to evacuate and gather in the designated area. However, it was soon revealed that this was a mistake, a miscue from the broadcast station that had sent our hearts racing even further. With the all-clear signal, we returned to our seats, trying to regain our composure. The teacher, a pillar of calm in the midst of the commotion, resumed the lesson as if nothing had happened, her voice a soothing balm to our frayed nerves.
注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;
2 .請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Para1: Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first.
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Para2: Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out.
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一、文章大意
清晨，陽光灑滿校園，學生們安靜學習，突然一場強烈地震打破寧靜。同學們反應不一，Alice 驚慌出逃，大部分人起初未動，其他班同學紛紛涌進走廊逃生。廣播錯誤指令后又發(fā)出解除警報，老師鎮(zhèn)定繼續(xù)上課。然而平靜未持續(xù)多久，更強烈的余震來襲，故事由此進入后續(xù)發(fā)展。
二、故事山分析
開場：描繪寧靜校園日常，為地震突發(fā)營造反差，吸引讀者注意力。
上升：地震發(fā)生，眾人不同反應，混亂初起，緊張氛圍攀升，廣播失誤加劇不安。
轉(zhuǎn)折：余震驟起，危險升級，剛平復的心情再度緊繃，情節(jié)急轉(zhuǎn)。
高潮：發(fā)現(xiàn) Bob 被困，同學們不顧危險折返救援，展現(xiàn)人性光輝與勇氣，情感激昂。
下降：成功救出 Bob，大家情緒緩和，危險解除，情節(jié)趨于平穩(wěn)。
結(jié)局：（續(xù)寫可補充）眾人劫后余生，彼此情誼加深，從災難中汲取成長力量，溫馨收尾。
三、伏筆及續(xù)寫回應
伏筆：Alice 初次地震驚慌出逃。
回應：余震時她站在走廊 junction 指揮大家疏散，完成從驚慌者到助人者轉(zhuǎn)變，體現(xiàn)成長，凸顯災難下人性善良一面。
伏筆：大部分同學起初對地震未重視，仍坐在座位。
回應：余震引發(fā)慌亂逃生，前后態(tài)度對比，突出地震可怕，促使人物成長，意識到生命脆弱，更加珍惜彼此。
伏筆：廣播系統(tǒng)發(fā)出錯誤指令。
回應：加劇緊張氛圍，讓大家心理防線更脆弱，為后續(xù)余震慌亂升級鋪墊，也促使老師安撫學生、凝聚班級力量。
伏筆：老師在混亂中鎮(zhèn)定自若。
回應：余震及后續(xù)救援中，老師指揮若定或給予精神支持，穩(wěn)定學生情緒，保障救援有序，展現(xiàn)教育者擔當。
伏筆：同學們在地震中有不同反應。
回應：面對 Bob 被困，不同性格同學攜手救援，將個體反應升華為集體團結(jié)力量，回應開篇反應差異，突出團隊精神。
四、續(xù)寫要點
第一段：
詳細描繪余震來襲的恐怖場景，如墻體裂縫擴大、天花板掉灰，從視覺、聽覺角度渲染恐懼。
刻畫同學們極度恐慌表現(xiàn)，尖叫、推搡，與之前反應對比，突出危險升級。
描述 Alice 指揮、老師協(xié)助疏散，展現(xiàn)關(guān)鍵人物引導作用，推動情節(jié)發(fā)展。
第二段：
敘述發(fā)現(xiàn) Bob 被困時的焦急心情，通過語言、動作描寫體現(xiàn)，如大聲呼喊、四處搜尋。
展現(xiàn)救援艱難過程，如躲避掉落雜物、艱難挪動課桌，突出勇敢無畏。
結(jié)尾體現(xiàn)救出 Bob 后大家欣慰、感動，升華團結(jié)友愛、生命至上主題。
五、情感線
開篇享受校園寧靜，愜意悠然；地震突發(fā)，部分人淡定、部分人驚慌，心情復雜；廣播失誤，焦慮加劇；余震來襲，極度恐懼；救援時焦急勇敢；救出 Bob 后欣慰感動，從平靜到慌亂再到堅毅溫暖，情感跌宕起伏。
六、故事線
校園清晨，學生安靜學習。
地震突發(fā)，眾人反應各異。
廣播誤導，情緒起伏。
余震驟起，混亂升級。
發(fā)現(xiàn) Bob 被困，冒險救援。
成功救出，情誼升華。
七、主旨升華句
In the face of disaster, it's our unity and courage that build a fortress to protect us from the wrath of nature. 面對災難，是我們的團結(jié)與勇氣筑起堡壘，抵御自然的憤怒。
The darkest moments reveal the brightest stars of humanity, shining through the chaos and fear. 最黑暗的時刻展現(xiàn)出人性最璀璨的星光，穿透混亂與恐懼。
When life shakes us to the core, it's the bond with our fellows that gives us the strength to stand up again. 當生活將我們震得搖搖欲墜，是與同伴的情誼給予我們重新站起的力量。
Disasters test not only our survival skills but also the depth of our love and care for one another. 災難不僅考驗我們的生存技能，還考驗我們對彼此關(guān)愛的深度。
Through the rubble and chaos, we find that the most precious treasure is the life and friendship we hold dear. 在廢墟與混亂中，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)最珍貴的寶藏是我們珍視的生命與友誼。
八、寫作示范
第一篇
Para1: Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first. Windows shattered, sending shards of glass flying. The blackboard crashed to the floor, splitting in two. Students huddled together, crying and praying. The once orderly corridor was now a scene of utter chaos, with people tripping over each other in their haste to escape. Alice, her eyes wide with determination, stood at the top of the stairs, shouting above the din, “Stay calm and follow me!” The teachers joined her, forming a human barricade to guide the students safely down.
Para2: Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out. Horror gripped our hearts. Without hesitation, I and two other classmates sprinted back into the crumbling building. The air was thick with dust, making it hard to breathe. We called out Bob's name, our voices choked with fear. Spotting him pinned under a fallen bookshelf, we rushed to his side. With all our strength, we lifted the heavy shelf and pulled him free. As we emerged from the building, Bob in our arms, the rest of the class cheered. In that moment, we knew that no matter what came our way, we had each other's backs.
第二篇
Para1: Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first. The floor tiles cracked open, like a spider's web spreading rapidly. The hanging lights swung wildly, threatening to come crashing down. Screams filled the air as students stampeded towards the exits. Alice, who had learned from her first panic, was now at the doorway, her hands waving frantically, directing the flow of students. “One by one, don't push!” she yelled. The teachers, though visibly shaken, also sprang into action, helping the younger students and those who had fallen.
Para2: Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out. Our hearts sank. Instantly, a group of us, led by the bravest among us, dashed back inside. The building was still trembling, and debris rained down. We searched every corner, our eyes watering from the dust. Finally, we found Bob crouched in a corner, too terrified to move. We quickly wrapped him in our arms and made our way out. Once outside, we hugged each other, tears of relief streaming down our faces. This experience had shown us the true meaning of friendship and the power of unity in the face of danger.
參考答案
Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first. Without hesitation, everyone bolted out of the classroom, our hearts pounding as we ran through the swaying hallways. Reaching the open ground, we gasped for air, relief flooding through us as we realized we were safe. Alice, who had fled earlier, was now helping to calm those around her, her face still pale but her voice steady.
Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out. Bob, a quiet classmate, was nowhere to be seen. Without hesitation, our teacher rallied us. "We need to go back!" she shouted, her eyes flashing with determination. Hearts in our mouths, we followed her back into the shaking building. The corridor was a mess, debris littering the floor, but we pressed on, calling Bob's name. Finally, we found him trapped under a fallen bookshelf. Working quickly and carefully, we lifted the shelf and freed him. Grateful and relieved, Bob stumbled out with us, and together, we escaped the wreckage, our bonds of friendship and solidarity stronger than ever.

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