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閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
Our family outing to the all-you-can-eat buffet turned into an evening to remember. The atmosphere was lively and busy, with the noise of plates and the sound of conversations creating a warm and inviting setting. The smell of freshly cooked food floated through the air, inviting everyone to try a little bit of everything. The buffet was a feast for the senses, with steaming trays of dishes from all over the world. The kids were particularly thrilled at the sight of the dessert section, which they had been eagerly longing for all week. Their eyes widening at the array of cakes, ice creams, and pastries, they quickly made plans to sample everything.
As we sat down to enjoy our meals, chatting cheerfully about the various food options, my husband’s attention was drawn to an elderly man standing by the chocolate milk dispenser （分液器）. The man seemed determined, but his hands were shaking, making it difficult for him to fill two glasses. My husband watched him for a moment, a concerned look on his face. “Now, how on earth is he going to carry that milk back to his table ” he wondered aloud, his eyes narrowing in thought. He noticed the man’s expression of concentration and effort, and a wave of sympathy made him restless. The kids, absorbed in their plates, hadn’t noticed, but my husband’ couldn’t look away.
I glanced at my husband and raised my eyebrows（眉毛） with a knowing smile. He immediately understood my silent message. The next moment, without a word, he got up from his seat and approached the elderly gentleman. I watched as he gently placed a hand on the man’s shoulder; offering a kind smile. I felt a warm wave of pride and admiration for my husband. His kind-hearted nature always managed to shine through in moments like these, making me realize how lucky I was to have him by my side.
注意：
1．續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；
2．續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。
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“May I help you with that ” my husband asked kindly. ___________________________________________
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As he sat down, he gave me a small nod, and we continued our meal. ________________________________
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文章大意：一家人去自助餐廳用餐，氛圍熱鬧，美食琳瑯滿目，孩子們對甜品區滿懷期待。用餐時，丈夫注意到一位老人在巧克力牛奶分液器前手抖難以倒牛奶，面露關切，“我” 心領神會，丈夫起身走向老人，準備幫忙，“我” 為丈夫的善良暖心之舉感到驕傲。
故事山分析：
開場：描繪自助餐廳熱鬧歡快、美食誘人的場景，一家人開啟用餐，營造輕松愉悅開端，吸引讀者融入情境。
上升：聚焦老人倒牛奶困境，丈夫留意且內心糾結，緊張氛圍漸起，吊起讀者好奇心，想知后續發展。
轉折：“我” 與丈夫無聲交流，丈夫起身相助，打破前文老人的窘迫局面，情節轉折，凸顯人性溫暖。
下降：無明顯下降情節，故事走向溫馨收尾。
結局：丈夫助人后回座，一家人繼續用餐，給人意猶未盡之感，留下溫暖余韻。
伏筆及續寫中的回應：
伏筆：開篇渲染自助餐的熱鬧忙碌，“The atmosphere was lively and busy...” 。回應：后續老人的出現融入這熱鬧場景，卻又因手抖與周圍格格不入，形成反差，更突出老人需要幫助，為丈夫行動鋪墊。
伏筆：提到孩子們對甜品區的熱切渴望，“The kids were particularly thrilled at the sight of the dessert section...” 。回應：與成人關注點對比，孩子關注美食，成人留意他人困難，豐富故事層次，且后文可借孩子反應側面烘托氛圍。
伏筆：丈夫對老人倒牛奶時 “a concerned look on his face” 及內心獨白。回應：直接促使他起身幫忙，是行動的導火索，續寫中可深化其助人后的內心感觸。
伏筆：“我” 與丈夫的眼神交流，“I glanced at my husband and raised my eyebrows with a knowing smile.” 。回應：體現夫妻默契，為丈夫行動助力，續寫可展現這種默契如何延續影響后續互動。
伏筆：強調丈夫善良本性，“His kind-hearted nature always managed to shine through...” 。回應：在助人情節中充分展現，續寫可通過他人反饋強化這一印象，如老人感激、旁人贊許。
續寫要點：
第一段：續寫老人對丈夫幫助的反應，或驚訝感激，或感慨萬千，可描述老人顫抖著道謝，提及自己因身體原因獨自出門不易，引發丈夫更多關懷，兩人簡單交流，展現溫情。
第二段：描繪一家人用餐后續，孩子詢問經過，丈夫簡單講述，大家受觸動，氛圍更溫馨，還可寫周圍人目睹后投來贊許目光，升華友善氛圍，傳遞正能量。
情感線：開場一家人沉浸美食的喜悅，接著丈夫因老人困境揪心，“我” 對丈夫有欣賞驕傲，老人受助后有感激，最后一家人因善舉感染，情感從個人享樂轉為共享溫暖，在互助友善中升溫，讓讀者感受人性美好。
故事線：
一家人前往自助餐廳，被熱鬧氛圍感染。
孩子們期待甜品，大人們準備用餐。
丈夫發現老人倒牛奶困難，面露擔憂。
“我” 與丈夫默契交流，丈夫起身幫忙。
丈夫幫助老人，老人有所回應。
一家人繼續用餐，受善舉影響氛圍溫馨。
主旨升華句：
A small act of kindness in a bustling world can be like a beam of light, illuminating the darkest corners of someone's day.（在喧囂世界里，一個小小的善舉如同一束光，照亮他人一天中最黑暗的角落。）
Kindness is not measured by its grandeur, but by the warmth it spreads and the hearts it touches.（善良不以其宏大來衡量，而以它所傳遞的溫暖和觸動的心靈來評判。）
In the simplest of moments, our humanity shines brightest when we choose to reach out and help.（在最平凡的時刻，當我們選擇伸出援手去幫助他人時，人性最為閃耀。）
True kindness is contagious, spreading from one heart to another, and making the world a better place, one act at a time.（真正的善良具有感染力，從一顆心傳遞到另一顆心，一次一個善舉，讓世界變得更美好。）
Sometimes, the most meaningful encounters occur when we least expect them, reminding us of the power of kindness and connection.（有時，最有意義的邂逅發生在我們最不經意的時候，提醒我們善良和聯系的力量。）
寫作示范兩篇：
第一篇：
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“May I help you with that ” my husband asked kindly. The elderly man looked up, surprise and gratitude in his eyes. His hands, still trembling slightly, relaxed a bit as he said, “Oh, thank you so much, young man. I've been having some trouble with my arthritis lately, and it's been a struggle to do even the simplest things.” My husband gently took the glasses and filled them with the chocolate milk, his movements slow and careful to avoid spilling. He then accompanied the man back to his table, making small talk about the delicious food and the pleasant atmosphere. The old man's face lit up as he shared a few stories from his youth, and my husband listened attentively, a smile on his face.
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As he sat down, he gave me a small nod, and we continued our meal. The kids, who had finally noticed the exchange, were full of questions. “Dad, what were you and that grandpa talking about ” my youngest asked. My husband simply replied, “Just helping a friend in need.” The atmosphere around our table seemed even more warm and inviting than before. A few nearby diners had also witnessed the act and gave us approving looks. It was as if that one small act of kindness had spread a wave of good feeling throughout the restaurant. We all felt a sense of contentment as we finished our meal, knowing that kindness truly has the power to make a difference.
第二篇：
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“May I help you with that ” my husband asked kindly. The old man was visibly startled at first, then his eyes softened with relief. “Thank you, son. I don't get out much these days, and with my shaky hands, it's been really hard.” My husband smiled reassuringly and proceeded to fill the glasses, chatting amicably with the man. “This buffet is quite a treat, isn't it There's so much to choose from.” The man nodded, adding, “Yes, but it's even better with kind people like you around.” As they walked back to the man's table, my husband helped him with his chair, ensuring he was comfortable. The man's gratitude was palpable, and it warmed my heart to see.
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As he sat down, he gave me a small nod, and we continued our meal. We could still feel the afterglow of the kind act. The children, sensing the mood, were unusually quiet and well-behaved. I leaned over to my husband and whispered, “You did a great thing.” He shrugged modestly. Soon, the conversation picked up again, but this time it was laced with a newfound sense of community. People around us seemed more friendly, and we all basked in the warm glow of kindness. It was a simple moment, but one that would stay with us for a long time, a reminder of the beauty of human connection.
續寫參考范文:
“'May I help you with that " my husband asked kindly,. The elderly man looked up, his eyebrows raised in mild shock but then relief washed over his face as he sighed softly. He nodded appreciatively, his eyes conveying his gratitude. "Thank you, young man," he said, his voice trembling slightly. My husband and the elderly man walked side by side, their steps harmonizing, creating a heartwarming scene of mutual respect and kindness. When they reached the table, the elderly man grasped my husband's in a firm, heartfelt handshake. With a warm smile, he said, “"You're a good man, thank you once
again." My husband stayed for a few minutes, engaging in polite conversation before returning to our table.As he sat down, he gave me a small nod, and we continued our meal. The mood around our table was even more cheerful, and the kids, who had observed the interaction, were full of questions and comments about how nice it was to help someone in need. “That was so nice, Dad!" one of them exclaimed, eyes wide with admiration. Our dinner that night was not just about the food but about the small act of kindness that can make a big difference in someone's day. It reminded us that in the midst of our busy lives, taking a moment to help others is a simple yet profound way to connect and spread a little joy.

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