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Alice and I were both top students and friends at school. We always sat at the front but on different sides. She was the smartest girl l'd ever known , who almost always got straight A's in study. As the class monitor, she shone brightly in every school event. Actually, I was second Instead, I envied her and was eager to be just like her with all my heart.
One day, Mrs. Blair, our math teacher, was lecturing on a topic I had previewed the night before when she suddenly stopped and asked a question. I raised my hand as soon as possible and answered the question quickly, but it turned out to be wrong. “Who can answer this question ” Mrs.Blair asked hopefully, but no one raised their hand. At that moment, Mrs. Blair,as was often the case, asked Alice to answer, and as expected, Alice answered correctly. It seemed that some students were whispering to each other, and I felt a mix of emotions. Why didn't she raise her hand Was she trying to embarrass me Was she letting me win on purpose The more I thought about it, the angrier I got. After school, she waited for me at the classroom door as usual , but I walked straight past , ignoring her. In the following days, I didn't talk to her, feeling empty inside.
Winter sports day was around the corner, and I saw my chance. I signed up for the high jump, an event which I was good at but Alice was weak in. It was a chance to prove to her and the other students that I was not the eternal runner-up. The thought of numerous classmates watching filled me with excitement.
The day finally came. As I gathered all my strength and leaped, my body arced through the air with the grace of a soaring eagle.RIPPP! Suddenly , I felt my pants split (撕裂)down the middle of my backside.注意:
1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
I desperately fell onto the jumping mat and the crowd burst into laughter.
I went back to the field to compete in the second round in the company of Alice.
文章大意
本文講述了 “我” 和好友 Alice 在學(xué)校的故事。Alice 是班里最聰明的學(xué)生，成績(jī)優(yōu)異，在各項(xiàng)活動(dòng)中表現(xiàn)出色，而 “我” 總是屈居第二，因此心生嫉妒。一次數(shù)學(xué)課上，“我” 回答錯(cuò)問(wèn)題，Alice 卻輕松答對(duì)，這讓 “我” 更加生氣并開(kāi)始疏遠(yuǎn)她。冬季運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)來(lái)臨，“我” 報(bào)名擅長(zhǎng)的跳高項(xiàng)目，想借此證明自己。然而在比賽時(shí)，“我” 卻在眾人面前出了洋相，褲子突然撕裂 。
故事山分析
開(kāi)端：介紹 “我” 和 Alice 在學(xué)校的情況，“我” 嫉妒 Alice 的優(yōu)秀。
發(fā)展：數(shù)學(xué)課上 “我” 答錯(cuò)問(wèn)題，Alice 答對(duì)，“我” 因此疏遠(yuǎn)她。
高潮：冬季運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)跳高比賽，“我” 跳高時(shí)褲子撕裂，陷入尷尬境地。
結(jié)局（續(xù)寫(xiě)部分）：Alice 幫助 “我” 化解尷尬，“我” 重新參賽，比賽結(jié)束后 “我” 和 Alice 重歸于好，明白了友誼的珍貴。
伏筆及在續(xù)寫(xiě)中的回應(yīng)
伏筆：Alice 在學(xué)校活動(dòng)中表現(xiàn)出色，總是幫助大家。回應(yīng)：在 “我” 褲子撕裂陷入尷尬時(shí)，Alice 毫不猶豫地幫助 “我”，用她的外套幫 “我” 遮擋。
伏筆：“我” 對(duì) Alice 產(chǎn)生嫉妒心理，故意疏遠(yuǎn)她，但內(nèi)心其實(shí)感到空虛。回應(yīng)：在 Alice 幫助 “我” 后，“我” 意識(shí)到自己之前的行為很過(guò)分，為自己的嫉妒和疏遠(yuǎn)感到后悔。
伏筆：“我” 渴望在比賽中證明自己。回應(yīng)：在 Alice 的鼓勵(lì)下，“我” 重新找回信心，成功完成第二次跳高，實(shí)現(xiàn)了自我證明。
伏筆：Alice 和 “我” 之前是好朋友，她總是在教室門(mén)口等 “我”。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫(xiě)中，Alice 的行為再次展現(xiàn)出她對(duì) “我” 的關(guān)心，兩人的友誼得以修復(fù)。
伏筆：“我” 在學(xué)校一直想超越 Alice 。回應(yīng)：最后 “我” 意識(shí)到友誼比競(jìng)爭(zhēng)更重要，不再執(zhí)著于超越她，而是珍惜彼此的友誼。
續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：描述 “我” 褲子撕裂后眾人的反應(yīng)以及 “我” 的尷尬和羞愧。重點(diǎn)描寫(xiě) Alice 如何幫助 “我” 化解尷尬，比如她的動(dòng)作、表情和言語(yǔ)。可以通過(guò)細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)展現(xiàn) Alice 的善良和對(duì) “我” 的關(guān)心。
第二段：講述在 Alice 的陪伴下 “我” 重新回到賽場(chǎng)參加第二輪比賽的情景。突出 “我” 在 Alice 的鼓勵(lì)下重拾信心，成功完成比賽。最后描寫(xiě)比賽結(jié)束后 “我” 和 Alice 的交流，表達(dá) “我” 對(duì)她的感激以及 “我” 對(duì)友誼的新認(rèn)識(shí)。
情感線
一開(kāi)始，“我” 因嫉妒 Alice 而疏遠(yuǎn)她，內(nèi)心充滿不滿和掙扎。當(dāng) “我” 在比賽中出丑時(shí)，感到無(wú)比尷尬和羞愧。Alice 的幫助讓 “我” 震驚又感動(dòng)，同時(shí)為自己之前的行為感到懊悔。在 Alice 的鼓勵(lì)下，“我” 重燃信心完成比賽。最后，“我” 對(duì) Alice 充滿感激，深刻認(rèn)識(shí)到友誼的珍貴，不再被嫉妒蒙蔽雙眼，和 Alice 重歸于好，情感從負(fù)面嫉妒轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)檎湎в颜x的溫暖。
故事線
“我” 嫉妒 Alice 的優(yōu)秀，在學(xué)習(xí)上想超越她。
數(shù)學(xué)課上 “我” 答錯(cuò)，Alice 答對(duì)，“我” 疏遠(yuǎn)她。
運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì) “我” 報(bào)名跳高，想證明自己。
比賽時(shí) “我” 褲子撕裂，陷入尷尬。
Alice 幫助 “我” 化解尷尬，陪 “我” 重新參賽。
比賽結(jié)束后 “我” 和 Alice 重歸于好，明白了友誼的價(jià)值。
主旨升華句（英文）
True friendship can overcome all the jealousy and misunderstandings, making our lives more precious.（真正的友誼能克服所有的嫉妒和誤解，讓我們的生活更加珍貴。）
In the journey of life, we should cherish the sincere friendship rather than being obsessed with competition.（在人生的旅途中，我們應(yīng)該珍惜真摯的友誼，而不是執(zhí)著于競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。）
Friendship is a light in the dark, which can dispel the haze of jealousy and bring warmth and hope.（友誼是黑暗中的一盞明燈，能驅(qū)散嫉妒的陰霾，帶來(lái)溫暖與希望。）
Only when we let go of jealousy and embrace friendship with an open heart can we truly experience the beauty of human relationships.（只有當(dāng)我們放下嫉妒，敞開(kāi)心扉擁抱友誼，我們才能真正體會(huì)到人際關(guān)系的美好。）
Through this experience, I learned that friendship is far more valuable than any achievement, and it is the most precious treasure in life.（通過(guò)這次經(jīng)歷，我明白了友誼遠(yuǎn)比任何成就都更有價(jià)值，它是生命中最珍貴的財(cái)富。）
寫(xiě)作示范一
第一段
I desperately fell onto the jumping mat and the crowd burst into laughter. My face turned beet - red, and I wished I could disappear right away. Just then, a familiar figure rushed towards me. It was Alice. Without a second thought, she took off her school uniform jacket and quickly wrapped it around my waist, covering my embarrassing torn pants. Her eyes were full of concern as she said softly, “Don't worry. Let's go to the locker room.” I was too stunned to speak, feeling a lump in my throat. All the while, I was thinking about how mean I had been to her these days.
第二段
I went back to the field to compete in the second round in the company of Alice. With her by my side, I felt a new kind of confidence. As I prepared to jump, I heard her cheering loudly for me, “You can do it!” Her words gave me the strength I needed. This time, I focused all my energy and leaped with all my might. I cleared the bar successfully, and the crowd erupted into applause. After the event, I walked up to Alice, my eyes filled with gratitude. “Thank you,” I said sincerely. She smiled and replied, “We're friends. That's what friends are for.” From that day on, I understood that true friendship is more precious than any competition, and I was lucky to have such a wonderful friend like Alice.
寫(xiě)作示范二
第一段
I desperately fell onto the jumping mat and the crowd burst into laughter. Humiliation washed over me like a tidal wave, and I was rooted to the spot in sheer embarrassment. In that moment of despair, Alice appeared in front of me like an angel. She swiftly took off her outerwear and carefully draped it around me, shielding my torn pants from view. Looking at me with a warm smile, she said, “Come on, let's get you sorted out.” Her kindness made me feel even more ashamed of my recent behavior towards her.
第二段
I went back to the field to compete in the second round in the company of Alice. Her presence beside me was a constant source of comfort. When it was my turn to jump, she gave me an encouraging pat on the back. With a deep breath, I ran towards the bar and leaped. The feeling of flying through the air was exhilarating, and I successfully cleared the bar. The cheers from the crowd were deafening. After the competition, I turned to Alice and said, “I'm so sorry for how I've treated you. You're the best friend I could ever ask for.” She hugged me tightly and said, “It's okay. Friendship is about forgiveness and support.” From that moment on, I knew that our friendship had grown stronger, and I would never let jealousy come between us again.
參考答案：
I desperately fell onto the jumping mat and the crowd burst into laughter. （1：我的尷尬和感受）Embarrassed and painful, I struggled to my feet, tears streaming down. How I wished I could find a hole and hide myself right away.（2：Alice 的出現(xiàn)和幫忙） Suddenly, Alice's hand landed on my shoulder and she quickly wrapped her coat around me, smiling kindly. Together, we left the field, ignoring the whispers from others.（3.我的道歉和感謝，我們的友誼）After quickly changing into a new pair of pants, we walked back to the field. I apologized, "Alice, I'm sorry for my jealousy. Thanks for helping," and she forgave me with a smile, instantly lifting a weight off my shoulders.
I went back to the field to compete in the second round in the company of Alice. （1.我的參賽心理變化）This time, my desire to prove myself gave way to the pure joy of doing what I loved - the high jump. As I gathered all my strength and jumped, I flew through the air like a bird. I made it! （2.Alice 和同學(xué)們的鼓勵(lì)）Alice and other students clapped their hands and cheered for me. A great sense of achievement and excitement filled me. (3.我對(duì)友誼的重新認(rèn)知）But deep in my heart, I firmly believed that true friendship lies not in competition, but in mutual admiration.
點(diǎn)評(píng)
一、整體印象
這篇高二讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)緊扣前文情節(jié)展開(kāi)，邏輯連貫、情感真摯，展現(xiàn)出高二學(xué)生應(yīng)有的英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力與思維水平，充分滿足題目要求，構(gòu)建了一個(gè)完整且富有意義的故事。
二、亮點(diǎn)分析
1. 情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)巧妙
緊密承接前文：開(kāi)篇延續(xù)主角在眾人面前出糗的情節(jié)，生動(dòng)描繪尷尬處境，自然流暢。隨后Alice暖心相助，情節(jié)發(fā)展水到渠成。
富有轉(zhuǎn)折與成長(zhǎng)：“我”從最初嫉妒Alice，到經(jīng)歷這次事件后道歉，心態(tài)發(fā)生巨大轉(zhuǎn)變。比賽第二輪不再執(zhí)著證明自己，而是享受過(guò)程，情節(jié)有起伏，體現(xiàn)人物成長(zhǎng)。
2. 人物形象鮮明
主角的成長(zhǎng)蛻變：主角一開(kāi)始因嫉妒而疏遠(yuǎn)Alice，出糗后在Alice幫助下認(rèn)識(shí)到錯(cuò)誤，實(shí)現(xiàn)從狹隘到成熟的轉(zhuǎn)變，內(nèi)心刻畫(huà)細(xì)膩。
Alice的美好形象：Alice善良、大度，在同學(xué)尷尬時(shí)毫不猶豫提供幫助，面對(duì)道歉寬容原諒，形象躍然紙上。
3. 語(yǔ)言表達(dá)出色
詞匯運(yùn)用豐富：準(zhǔn)確使用“embarrassed”“painful”等詞描述情緒，“gave way to”等短語(yǔ)增加表達(dá)豐富度。
句式靈活多樣：既有簡(jiǎn)單句，又運(yùn)用“what I loved”等賓語(yǔ)從句，以及“smiling kindly”現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)等，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，增強(qiáng)節(jié)奏感。

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