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當(dāng)柔弱女子遇見(jiàn)tough機(jī)車(chē)黨 From Fear to Respect 2025年1月八省續(xù)寫(xiě)
題目如下：
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
I was in Philadelphia for a conference when I saw an ad in the hotel. A nearby theater was showing a documentary (紀(jì)錄片) about several local animal shelters that were helping to save abandoned dogs across the country. I love animals, and I felt an urge to go to this fundraising event. However, none of my co-workers would go with me, and I was worried about walking on the street alone at night.
I resigned myself to spending the evening in my hotel room, but as soon as I got back to my room I felt restless and bored. The theater where the event was taking place was only about five blocks from the hotel, and the area around the hotel didn’t seem particularly dangerous. So, I decided to brave it. I gathered up my wallet and room key and set off.
It was already getting dark and the streets were nearly deserted. I managed to find the street the theater was on, but when I turned the corner, I stopped in shock. In front of the theater were a group of bikers – very big, tough-looking bikers.
I’ve known lots of motorcycle enthusiasts and most are nice people. However, in this case, I was a woman all alone, in a strange neighborhood, at night, and there were twenty or so very large men – all wearing insignia (徽章) that indicated they were in some sort of club – standing before me. Warning bells began to sound in my head, and my heart was pounding. Was I at the right theater Had I misread the date of the event
A sign outside the theater told me that I was in the right place on the right evening. Nevertheless, I wondered if I should rush back to my hotel instead of walking through that crowd of bikers. I finally decided that I would be safer inside the theater. Hopefully, the bikers would have gone away by the time the film was over.
注意：
（1）續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；
（2）請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Para.1 I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside.
Para.2 When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group.
文章分析（人物和事件）：
人物：關(guān)注主人公的成長(zhǎng)和愿望的滿足
主人公：從一開(kāi)始想去看紀(jì)錄片，能看出她富有愛(ài)心，熱愛(ài)動(dòng)物。盡管害怕獨(dú)自外出，但還是勇敢地前往劇院，體現(xiàn)出她的勇敢和對(duì)熱愛(ài)之事的執(zhí)著。在看到 bikers 時(shí)的緊張害怕，以及后續(xù)發(fā)現(xiàn)真相后的轉(zhuǎn)變，又展現(xiàn)出她作為普通人正常的心理反應(yīng)和能夠反思、接納的開(kāi)放心態(tài)，實(shí)現(xiàn)個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)。
bikers：作為主人公的觀察對(duì)象出現(xiàn)。從外表看，他們高大強(qiáng)壯，穿著帶有俱樂(lè)部徽章的服裝，給人一種不好接近的感覺(jué)。但實(shí)際上，他們是富有愛(ài)心、善良且慷慨的人。這引發(fā)了作者的反思 。
事件：抓住主要沖突，確定價(jià)值觀的導(dǎo)向
沖突與懸念設(shè)置：故事開(kāi)篇，作者被關(guān)于動(dòng)物救助的紀(jì)錄片吸引，卻因同事不愿同行且擔(dān)心夜間獨(dú)自外出安全而猶豫。當(dāng)她抵達(dá)劇院，看到一群看似不好惹的 bikers 時(shí)，緊張感瞬間拉滿，這一情節(jié)制造了強(qiáng)烈的沖突與懸念，讀者不禁為作者的安全擔(dān)憂。
情節(jié)反轉(zhuǎn)：作者硬著頭皮進(jìn)入劇院后，發(fā)現(xiàn)里面還有更多 bikers，內(nèi)心極度不安。但隨著電影開(kāi)始，情節(jié)發(fā)生反轉(zhuǎn)，原來(lái)這些 bikers 是動(dòng)物救援組織成員，完全顛覆了作者之前的刻板印象。
可以利用的重要線索：
1. 文章第一段“A nearby theater was showing a documentary (紀(jì)錄片) about several local animal shelters that were helping to save abandoned dogs across the country. I love animals, and I felt an urge to go to this fundraising event.”這句話告訴了我們很重要的兩個(gè)線索，“several local animal shelters”&“ this fundraising event”，我們可以推斷這個(gè)電影院的活動(dòng)是當(dāng)?shù)嘏e辦的，用來(lái)為保護(hù)動(dòng)物而募集資金的，后面續(xù)寫(xiě)可以出現(xiàn)資金募集活動(dòng)，這些bikers都是local animal shelters活動(dòng)的支持者。
2. 文章第四段“all wearing insignia (徽章) that indicated they were in some sort of club”，我們可以讓“insignia”在后文再次出現(xiàn)，用于揭示身份的鋪墊工作。
3. 續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段段首句中“When the film began, I realized that...”可以看出我是在電影開(kāi)始后才意識(shí)到他們的身份，所以電影的內(nèi)容必定與他們的身份有關(guān)。
續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分析：
Para.1 I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside.
本段描繪主人公進(jìn)入電影院后的所見(jiàn)、所聞和所感。可以
①描繪bikers聚在一起興致勃勃地聊動(dòng)物救助，主人公不經(jīng)意間聽(tīng)到后就不太害怕了，并開(kāi)始好奇這群大漢到底是來(lái)電影院干什么的；
②也可以描寫(xiě)某位大漢面帶微笑和主人公打招呼，化解我的不安；
③也可以描述我從大漢身邊經(jīng)過(guò)時(shí)看到他們的徽章是可愛(ài)的小狗，讓我心生好奇，不再害怕。
這里需要注意的是，續(xù)寫(xiě)文章中有大量語(yǔ)言描述主人公的情緒，所以本著續(xù)寫(xiě)與原文的協(xié)同性原則，本段在描述情緒上一定要花費(fèi)點(diǎn)心思。老師要提醒學(xué)生們情緒過(guò)度的自然性與合理性，從害怕轉(zhuǎn)為不太害怕+好奇（太害怕是不會(huì)有好奇情緒的）才能順利過(guò)度到下一段得知真相后的驚訝、后悔、欽佩。
Para.2 When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group.
這部分部分需要展開(kāi)寫(xiě)電影的內(nèi)容，在觀影過(guò)程中我觀察bikers的反應(yīng)，以及電影放映之后積極為動(dòng)物救助站捐款的行為，還可以設(shè)計(jì)一個(gè)給“我”送徽章的情節(jié)。收尾時(shí)除了點(diǎn)出不要以貌取人，還可以寫(xiě)這群善良的bikers送我回旅館，呼應(yīng)文章的開(kāi)頭我獨(dú)自一人出門(mén)感到害怕的情節(jié)。
范文：
I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. My unease grew as I squeezed past their leather jackets and frightening tattoos(紋身). With shaky hands, I purchased my ticket and found a seat near the back, longing to remain unnoticed. However, my nervousness began to waver(擺動(dòng);躊躇) as I overheard(無(wú)意中聽(tīng)到) words like “rescue” and “adoption” in their conversations. Confused, I glanced at their jackets again and noticed paw prints and words like “Rescue”. My previous fear slowly faded and gave way to curiosity. Though still nervous, I tried to calm my nerves as the theatre lights dimmed(變暗).
When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. Revealing before my eyes were scene after scene where these tough-looking bikers navigated(橫渡；穿過(guò)) dangerous areas to save missing animals, bringing them to shelters, and even nursed them back to health in their own homes. Gone was my initial fear, replaced by overwhelming admiration and shame. When the lights came back on, I finally got a clear look at the insignia on their jackets—a simple paw print with the words “Ride for Rescue” boldly (顯眼地) displayed underneath. Walking out of the theater, I felt a kind of awe mingled with guilt. I not only witnessed the beauty of compassion(同情憐憫) but also learned to see beyond stereotypes（刻板印象）.

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