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讀后續寫
When Valentine’s Day was around the corner, Grandma came down with a terrible cold as she was travelling from Colorado to my family’s house in California. She was too weak to go out at all, which was sad and disappointing. Grandma and Grandpa had been planning to take my little sister Indi and me to the zoo for Valentine’s Day. Grandma, as an animal lover, had been especially looking forward to it.
On Valentine’s Day, Indi begged Grandma to go to the zoo with us. But Grandma jokingly explained that if she went there, she might spread her cold to other visitors, or even to the animals, making them all start sneezing.
I imagined the sight that an elephant kept sneezing. Meanwhile, I pretended my arm was a trunk and blurted out a funny trumpeting sound that ended with a gigantic sneeze. “Good one, brother,” Indi laughed. “That elephant would need a huge box of tissues.”
Grandma was amused. But she insisted that she should stay at home and rest up. She wished us a pleasant visit and reminded us to send her regards to the monkeys.
Well, we did go and we did have a great time, but I kept wishing Grandma could have been there with us. When we reached the monkey mountain, Grandpa suggested taking a picture with the monkeys and told us to hold still and say “cheese”.
“Cheese,” I said. But Indi said, “Happy Valentine’s Day, Grandma!”
“You were supposed to say cheese,” said Grandpa.
Indi shrugged, “It just came out.”
“I’m glad it did,” I said. “Because you’re just given me a fantastic idea. What if we take pictures of different animals, and then turn them into a special Valentine gift for Grandma ” Indi and Grandpa agreed and we kept taking pictures for Grandma.
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When we got home, we set about making the gift.
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Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room.
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文章大意
情人節前夕，奶奶從科羅拉多州來加州途中患重感冒，無法按計劃帶 “我” 和妹妹去動物園。情人節當天，我們還是去了動物園，玩得很開心，但 “我” 一直希望奶奶也在。在猴山拍照時，妹妹喊出 “情人節快樂，奶奶！”，這讓 “我” 想到以動物照片為奶奶制作情人節禮物。
故事山分析
開端：奶奶因感冒無法帶 “我” 和妹妹去動物園過情人節。
發展：我們去了動物園，在猴山拍照時妹妹的話啟發 “我” 制作禮物。
高潮：回家后制作禮物以及給奶奶送禮物的過程。
結局：奶奶收到禮物后的反應，體現親情的溫暖和禮物的意義。
伏筆及在續寫中的回應
伏筆：“Grandma, as an animal lover, had been especially looking forward to it.” 表明奶奶熱愛動物。
回應：續寫中以動物照片制作禮物，滿足奶奶對動物的喜愛，給她帶來驚喜。
伏筆：“I imagined the sight that an elephant kept sneezing.” 體現 “我” 豐富的想象力。
回應：在制作禮物時，可能會發揮想象力對照片進行創意加工，如添加有趣的文字描述動物打噴嚏的樣子。
伏筆：“But Indi said, ‘Happy Valentine’s Day, Grandma!’” 妹妹對奶奶的情感表達。
回應：制作的禮物圍繞情人節祝福展開，強化妹妹對奶奶的愛，也讓奶奶感受到這份溫暖。
伏筆：“‘What if we take pictures of different animals, and then turn them into a special Valentine gift for Grandma ’ Indi and Grandpa agreed.” 表明要制作禮物。
回應：續寫第一段詳細描述制作禮物的過程，如挑選照片、裝飾等。
伏筆：“Well, we did go and we did have a great time, but I kept wishing Grandma could have been there with us.” 體現對奶奶的思念。
回應：制作禮物是彌補奶奶未能同去的遺憾，奶奶收到禮物后，能感受到我們的思念，進一步加深親情。
續寫要點
第一段：詳細描述回家后制作禮物的過程。先挑選出最有趣、最有代表性的動物照片，然后用彩色筆在照片周圍畫上愛心、花朵等裝飾，還可以在每張照片下寫上有趣的文字，如動物的 “內心獨白”，表達對奶奶的祝福。
第二段：描述送禮物給奶奶的場景。我們走進奶奶房間，將禮物遞給她，奶奶打開禮物時的表情從驚訝到感動，她可能會逐張翻看照片，眼中泛著淚花，對我們的禮物贊不絕口，最后我們一起擁抱，感受親情的溫暖。
情感線
從去動物園時對奶奶的思念，到決定制作禮物時的期待，制作過程中的用心和喜悅，送禮物時的緊張與興奮，以及奶奶收到禮物后的感動，情感層層遞進，突出親情的美好。
故事線
奶奶因感冒無法陪我們去動物園。
我們在動物園游玩，妹妹的話啟發制作禮物。
回家后挑選照片，裝飾并撰寫文字制作禮物。
帶著禮物上樓，走進奶奶房間。
奶奶打開禮物，表現出驚訝與感動。
一家人擁抱，感受親情溫暖。
主旨升華句
Love is not bound by circumstances but can be expressed in creative ways, just like the gift we made for Grandma.
A simple act of kindness and thoughtfulness can bring immeasurable joy and warmth, especially to those we love.
The power of family love lies in the small gestures that show we care, like this special Valentine's gift for Grandma.
Even in the face of disappointment, love finds a way to shine through, as our gift to Grandma demonstrated.
This Valentine's Day, we learned that the most precious gifts are not bought but crafted with love and shared with family.
寫作示范
示范一
When we got home, we set about making the gift. First, we carefully selected the best pictures from our zoo visit. The one of the lion roaring was a must - include, and the photo of the cute pandas munching on bamboo was perfect too. Then, Indi and I took out our colored pens and started decorating the edges of the pictures with hearts and flowers. I wrote funny captions under each photo. For the lion, I wrote, “Roar! Wishing you a speedy recovery, Grandma!” We spent hours making the gift as special as possible.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. As we entered, Grandma looked up with a tired smile. We handed her the gift, and she opened it slowly. Her eyes widened with surprise at first, and then filled with tears of joy as she saw each photo. “Oh, my dears, this is the most wonderful Valentine's gift ever. I feel like I was right there with you at the zoo,” she said, her voice trembling with emotion. We all hugged her tightly, and the love in the room was palpable.
示范二
When we got home, we set about making the gift. I spread out all the pictures on the table and sorted them by animal type. Indi found some glitter and stickers, and we used them to make the pictures more eye - catching. We added little notes like “This giraffe is stretching its neck to send you love, Grandma” next to the picture of the giraffe. Grandpa helped us arrange the pictures neatly in a photo album.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. We knocked gently and entered. Grandma was sitting in bed, reading a book. When we presented her with the album, she was speechless for a moment. As she flipped through the pages, a big smile spread across her face. “You kids are so sweet. This gift means the world to me. It's the best Valentine's surprise I could have asked for,” she said, pulling us close for a hug. The love and warmth in that room made this Valentine's Day truly unforgettable.
【答案】One possible version:
When we got home, we set about making the gift. We printed out the photos we had taken at the zoo, each one capturing a different animal in their playful or majestic moments. Indi and I carefully selected the best shots, making sure to include the monkeys as per Grandma’s request. We then took out a beautiful photo album and lovingly arranged the pictures inside, adding little notes about each animal and the memories they brought back. It was a labor of love, and we were excited to see Grandma’s reaction.
Then we took the gift upstairs to Grandma’s room. We tiptoed in, trying not to disturb her, but her eyes lit up as soon as she saw the wrapped photo album in our hands. “What’s this ” she asked. We handed her the gift, and as she flipped through the pages, her face broke into a wide smile. “Oh, this is the best Valentine’s Day gift ever,” she exclaimed. “Thank you, my darlings. This means so much to me.” We sat with her, sharing stories about the day and watching her delight as she revisited the zoo through our pictures. It was a moment of pure happiness, and we knew that even though she wasn’t physically with us at the zoo, she was very much a part of our adventure.

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