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讀后續(xù)寫：Kevin的成長，傳遞勇敢行動的正能量 講義
讀后續(xù)寫
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Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things.Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (嘆息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.
Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly. Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window. “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.
The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回響) in the air. The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out. Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth ” he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.
注意：（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；（2）請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Paragraph 1: When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them.
Paragraph 2: Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station.
解題思路與步驟
1.理清情節(jié)
Kevin目睹不速之客闖入鄰居家，并勇敢地采取行動。
然而，當(dāng)嫌疑人解釋自己是原房主的孩子并且擁有父親的手表時，Kevin感到困惑，不確定自己是否做了對的事。
故事的轉(zhuǎn)折是Kevin在與鄰居交談后，找到的手表對事件的進(jìn)一步驗證。
2.情感轉(zhuǎn)折
第一段： 通過Kevin的內(nèi)心斗爭表現(xiàn)出他的懷疑，并通過與Mr.和Mrs. Green的互動解決疑慮。
第二段： Kevin帶著找到的手表與Mr. Green一起去警察局，最終通過警察的認(rèn)可，Kevin意識到他做了對的事。
具體寫作
第一段： 通過情感描寫、細(xì)節(jié)描寫、動作鏈推進(jìn)等展現(xiàn)Kevin的內(nèi)心掙扎與人物互動。
第二段： 通過情節(jié)升華和主題點睛展現(xiàn)事件的解決和Kevin的成長。
第一段：Kevin的自我懷疑和內(nèi)心轉(zhuǎn)折
1. 情感描寫（開篇點題）
句式： A sense of doubt washed over Kevin, making him feel uncertain about the choice he had made.
解釋： 開篇通過Kevin的內(nèi)心情感波動展現(xiàn)他對自己行為的懷疑。
2. 細(xì)節(jié)描寫（補(bǔ)充情感）
句式： His hands trembled slightly as he explained the situation to Mr. and Mrs. Green.
解釋： 描述Kevin的身體語言，表現(xiàn)他因懷疑而產(chǎn)生的不安。
3. 動作鏈推進(jìn)（承接情節(jié)）
句式： Upon hearing Kevin’s explanation, Mr. Green nodded and led him to the living room.
解釋： 通過動作推進(jìn)，展現(xiàn)Kevin與Green夫妻的互動，使情節(jié)自然流動。
4. 沖突鋪墊（引出矛盾）
句式： Kevin hesitated for a moment, unsure whether he had made the right decision.
解釋： 內(nèi)心沖突加劇，Kevin產(chǎn)生了內(nèi)心的疑慮，情節(jié)發(fā)展進(jìn)入緊張期。
5. 情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折（高潮）
句式： No sooner had Kevin voiced his concerns than Mr. Green reassured him with a calm voice.
解釋： 用“no sooner...than...”推動情節(jié)的轉(zhuǎn)折，Mr. Green的安慰緩解了Kevin的疑慮。
第二段：事件的解決與Kevin的成長
6. 情節(jié)升華（總結(jié)收尾）
句式： With the watch in hand, Kevin felt a wave of relief, realizing that he had made the right choice.
解釋： 在手表交給警察后，Kevin感覺釋然，情感升華。
7. 細(xì)節(jié)描寫（補(bǔ)充情感）
句式： As the officer examined the watch, Kevin’s heart slowed, realizing that things were falling into place.
解釋： 通過警察的動作，表現(xiàn)Kevin心情的逐漸放松。
8. 動作與情感結(jié)合（推動故事）
句式： With a deep breath, Kevin smiled slightly, feeling a sense of accomplishment as he stood by the police desk.
解釋： 通過情感與動作的結(jié)合展現(xiàn)Kevin從懷疑到釋然的內(nèi)心轉(zhuǎn)變。
9. 他人反應(yīng)或?qū)υ挘ㄔ鰪?qiáng)層次感）
句式： “Good job, kid,” the officer said, giving Kevin a reassuring pat on the shoulder.
解釋： 通過警察的反應(yīng)和言語進(jìn)一步推動Kevin的情感轉(zhuǎn)變，增強(qiáng)故事互動。
10. 主題點睛（畫龍點睛）
句式： This experience taught Kevin that sometimes, doing the right thing isn’t about certainty, but about having the courage to act.
解釋： 用總結(jié)性句子點明主題，展現(xiàn)Kevin的成長，傳遞勇敢行動的正能量。
范文
第一段：
When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. A sense of doubt washed over Kevin, making him feel uncertain about the choice he had made. His hands trembled slightly as he explained the situation to Mr. and Mrs. Green. Upon hearing Kevin’s explanation, Mr. Green nodded and led him to the living room. Kevin hesitated for a moment, unsure whether he had made the right decision. No sooner had Kevin voiced his concerns than Mr. Green reassured him with a calm voice, “It’s okay, Kevin. You did what you thought was right.”
第二段：
Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. With the watch in hand, Kevin felt a wave of relief, realizing that he had made the right choice. As the officer examined the watch, Kevin’s heart slowed, realizing that things were falling into place. With a deep breath, Kevin smiled slightly, feeling a sense of accomplishment as he stood by the police desk. “Good job, kid,” the officer said, giving Kevin a reassuring pat on the shoulder. This experience taught Kevin that sometimes, doing the right thing isn’t about certainty, but about having the courage to act.

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