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Forty-three years seems like a long time to remember the name of a mere friend. I have already forgotten the name of an old lady who was a customer on my paper route when I was a twelve-year-old boy in Marinette, Wisconsin back in 1954. Yet it seems like just yesterday that she taught me a lesson in forgiveness that I can only hope to pass on to someone else someday. On a Saturday afternoon, a friend and I were throwing rocks onto the roof of the old lady’s house from a secret spot in her backyard. The object of our play was to observe how the rocks changed to missiles as they rolled to the roof’s edge and shot out into the yard like comets（彗星）falling from the sky.
I found myself a perfectly smooth rock and sent it for a ride. The stone was too smooth, however, so it slipped from my hand as I let it go and headed straight for a small window on the old lady’s back porch. At the sound of broken glass, we took off from the old lady’s yard faster than any of our missiles flew off her roof.
I was so scared about getting caught that I was concerned about the old lady with the broken porch window all the time that night. However, a few days later, when I was sure that I hadn’t been discovered, I started to feel guilty for her bad luck. She still greeted me with a smile each day when I gave her the paper, but I was no longer able to look into her eyes.
I made up my mind that I would save my paper delivery money, and in three weeks I had the seven dollars that I thought would cover the cost of her window. I put the money in an envelope with a note explaining that I was sorry for breaking her window and hoped that the seven dollars would cover the cost for repairing it.
注意：
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
第一段：I waited until it was dark.
第二段：The next day, I handed the old lady her paper.
文章大意
1954 年，12 歲的 “我” 在送報紙途中，和朋友在一位老婦人后院朝她家屋頂扔石頭玩。“我” 扔出的一塊光滑石頭意外打破了她家后廊的窗戶，之后 “我” 一直害怕被發(fā)現(xiàn)，又因給她帶來損失而愧疚。經(jīng)過思考，“我” 決定攢送報紙的錢賠償，三周后湊夠 7 美元，將錢裝進(jìn)信封并附上道歉紙條，準(zhǔn)備彌補(bǔ)自己的過錯。
故事山分析
目標(biāo)：“我” 打破老婦人窗戶后，希望通過賠償來彌補(bǔ)過錯，獲得內(nèi)心的安寧。
阻礙：一開始害怕被發(fā)現(xiàn)，不敢面對老婦人，后來湊錢也需要時間。
努力：“我” 每天送報紙攢錢，還寫了道歉紙條。
結(jié)果：成功湊夠錢準(zhǔn)備賠償，等待故事的進(jìn)一步發(fā)展。
意外：目前還未出現(xiàn)，后續(xù)續(xù)寫可能會有新的轉(zhuǎn)折。
轉(zhuǎn)彎：“我” 從害怕逃避到勇敢面對，決定賠償，這是心態(tài)的轉(zhuǎn)變。
結(jié)局：目前未知，需要續(xù)寫完成。
伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
老婦人一直微笑著和 “我” 打招呼：伏筆表明老婦人善良溫和的性格。在續(xù)寫中，老婦人可能會因為這份善良，以寬容的態(tài)度對待 “我” 的賠償，比如在收到錢和紙條后，沒有責(zé)怪 “我”，還可能會鼓勵 “我”。
“我” 不敢看老婦人的眼睛：體現(xiàn) “我” 內(nèi)心的愧疚和不安。續(xù)寫時，當(dāng) “我” 再次面對老婦人，可能會因為之前的愧疚而更加緊張，不敢直視她，但老婦人的反應(yīng)或許會讓 “我” 逐漸放松，敢于和她對視。
“我” 攢錢準(zhǔn)備賠償：暗示 “我” 想要彌補(bǔ)過錯的決心。在續(xù)寫中，這會是故事發(fā)展的重要基礎(chǔ)，老婦人對 “我” 賠償行為的回應(yīng)，會推動故事走向不同結(jié)局，比如她可能拒收，也可能接受并表示感謝。
石頭太光滑導(dǎo)致打破窗戶：強(qiáng)調(diào)意外性。續(xù)寫中可以借此突出事情的偶然性，老婦人可能會理解這是一場意外，從而更輕易地原諒 “我”。
“我” 一直關(guān)注老婦人是否發(fā)現(xiàn)窗戶被打破：說明 “我” 心里一直有負(fù)擔(dān)。在續(xù)寫中，當(dāng) “我” 把錢給老婦人后，這個負(fù)擔(dān)可能會隨著老婦人的反應(yīng)而減輕或加重，影響故事的情感走向。
續(xù)寫要點（兩段）
第一段：“I waited until it was dark.” 重點描寫 “我” 在黑暗中前往老婦人家送賠償信封時的心理活動，如緊張、忐忑，擔(dān)心被發(fā)現(xiàn)又希望快點解決問題。描述送信封的過程，是偷偷放在門口還是鼓起勇氣敲門遞給她。
第二段：“The next day, I handed the old lady her paper.” 著重描寫 “我” 和老婦人見面時的場景，她的表情、動作和言語，“我” 的反應(yīng)，以及這件事對 “我” 產(chǎn)生的深遠(yuǎn)影響，比如 “我” 從她的寬容中學(xué)會了原諒他人的重要性。
情感線
起初，“我” 打破窗戶后極度害怕被發(fā)現(xiàn)，內(nèi)心充滿恐懼。隨著時間推移，確定未被發(fā)現(xiàn)后，“我” 開始為老婦人的損失感到愧疚，這一情感逐漸加深。在攢錢準(zhǔn)備賠償?shù)倪^程中，“我” 的內(nèi)心充滿決心，想要彌補(bǔ)過錯。送賠償信封時，緊張和不安達(dá)到頂點。當(dāng)?shù)诙烀鎸蠇D人時，“我” 滿心期待又害怕她的反應(yīng)，直到她做出回應(yīng)，“我” 的情感才會有新的變化，可能是如釋重負(fù)，也可能是更加感動。
故事線
“我” 和朋友扔石頭打破老婦人窗戶。
“我” 害怕被發(fā)現(xiàn)，內(nèi)心恐懼。
“我” 因愧疚決定攢錢賠償。
“我” 攢夠錢準(zhǔn)備送賠償信封。
“我” 在黑暗中送賠償信封的過程。
第二天 “我” 和老婦人見面，她對賠償?shù)姆磻?yīng)以及對 “我” 的影響。
主旨升華句
This experience taught me that forgiveness has the power to heal not only the one who is forgiven but also the one who forgives, creating a cycle of kindness and understanding.
The old lady's act of forgiveness showed me that even in the face of unexpected mistakes, a heart full of compassion can turn a moment of guilt into a valuable lesson in life.
Through this incident, I learned that admitting our wrongs and taking responsibility is the first step towards redemption, and forgiveness is the bridge that mends broken relationships.
The story of the broken window and the old lady's forgiveness serves as a reminder that a simple act of kindness can have a profound impact on someone's life, teaching them the true meaning of humanity.
In the journey of life, we all make mistakes, but it is the forgiveness we receive and the forgiveness we offer that shape our character and make our world a better place.
寫作示范
示范一
第一段：I waited until it was dark. With the envelope in my trembling hand, I quietly made my way to the old lady's house. My heart was pounding so hard that I was afraid she could hear it from inside. As I approached the front door, I hesitated for a moment, looking around to make sure no one was watching. Then, I took a deep breath and placed the envelope gently on the doorstep. Just as I was about to turn and leave, the door creaked open slightly. I froze, my eyes wide with fear.
第二段：The next day, I handed the old lady her paper. My hands were shaking, and I couldn't bring myself to meet her eyes. To my surprise, she smiled at me as usual and said, "Thank you for the money, dear. It was very kind of you." I looked up in astonishment, and she added, "Accidents happen. I'm just glad you're an honest boy." Her words made me feel a huge weight lifted off my shoulders. From that day on, I learned the power of forgiveness and the importance of being responsible for my actions.
示范二
第一段：I waited until it was dark. The night seemed to be filled with my anxiety as I walked towards the old lady's house. The streetlights cast long shadows, making me even more nervous. When I reached her house, I crouched down by the door, carefully slipping the envelope under it. As I did so, I heard a noise from inside, and my heart skipped a beat. I quickly stood up and hid behind a bush, waiting to see if anyone would come out. After a few tense moments, I decided it was safe to leave.
第二段：The next day, I handed the old lady her paper. I was expecting a scolding or a cold look, but instead, she gave me a warm hug. "Your honesty is more valuable than any window," she said softly. Her words touched my heart deeply. I realized that forgiveness was not just about letting go of anger but also about showing kindness and understanding. This experience changed me forever, and I promised myself to always be honest and to forgive others as the old lady had forgiven me.
【參考范文】
I waited until it was dark. Silently and secretly, I slipped into the yard of the old lady. I looked around and there was nothing but silence. Holding my breath, I got the envelope I didn’t sign jammed in her door. As I made my way out, the stone which had hung in my heart for three weeks was eventually gone. I sat on the ground in relief, staring at the sparkling stars smiling to me. I even looked forward to tomorrow’s arrival.
The next day, I handed the old lady her paper. Once again, I could have the freedom of looking straight into the old lady’s kind eyes. She greeted me warmly as usual. She thanked me for the paper and gave me a bag of cookies she had made herself. Reaching for the cookies, I felt an envelope and pulled it out of the bag. When I opened the envelope, I was surprised. Inside were the seven dollars and a short note saying, “I’m proud of you! ” I got to know it was the grace of forgiveness.

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