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A couple of months before I started high school, my parents gave me the greatest gift any teenage boy would ask for: a cell phone. I lived on that phone all summer. I always texted my friends, even at night. And I paid no attention to the people and things around myself. Being connected to the Internet was more important than being present.
So, you can imagine my displeasure when the time came for our family vacation that year. It was not the Disneyland trip or beach vacation that I had been hoping for. “This year,” my dad said, “we’ll be doing something special, something I used to do with my dad when I was a kid. We’re going camping in the forest!”
His excitement was met with a disappointed sigh, which was my communication style at that age. But he had made the decision and would not change his mind. I comforted myself by telling myself that it was still a vacation. I remained uninfluenced while they were busy preparing for the vacation.
My mind was on my phone, the texts flying back and forth. I focused on the screen in my hands so much that the first time I looked up was when we drove across a bridge on the trip to our campsite.
I looked out of the window and saw a fast-moving river. The air blowing into the car from the open windows was hot and smelled of trees. But that didn’t matter to me. The reason why I had looked up was something far more serious and annoying. My phone no longer had service. The signal was weak. During the last hour of the drive, there was no signal at all.
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When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face.
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The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun.
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文章大意
在即將上高中前，父母送了 “我” 一部手機(jī)，整個夏天 “我” 都沉迷其中，忽視周圍的人和事。那年家庭度假，父親決定去森林露營，這并非 “我” 期待的迪士尼或海灘度假，“我” 滿心失望，但父親主意已定。在去露營地的路上，“我” 一直玩手機(jī)，直到車開過一座橋時，發(fā)現(xiàn)手機(jī)信號變?nèi)酰詈笠恍r車程完全沒信號。
故事山分析
開端：父母送 “我” 手機(jī)，“我” 沉迷其中，接著父親決定家庭度假去森林露營，“我” 很失望。
發(fā)展：在去露營地的路上，“我” 一直玩手機(jī)，途中發(fā)現(xiàn)手機(jī)信號逐漸變?nèi)踔敝料А?br/>高潮（待續(xù)寫）：到達(dá)露營地后，“我” 沒有手機(jī)可玩，可能會發(fā)生一些和露營相關(guān)的有趣或有意義的事情，第二天早上醒來也會有新的情節(jié)展開。
結(jié)局（待續(xù)寫）：這次露營經(jīng)歷讓 “我” 對生活和人際關(guān)系有新的認(rèn)識，不再過度依賴手機(jī)。
伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
“我” 沉迷手機(jī)：在續(xù)寫中可回應(yīng)為 “我” 因沒手機(jī)玩而無聊，開始關(guān)注露營地周圍的事物，從而發(fā)現(xiàn)不一樣的樂趣。
父親決定露營：續(xù)寫中父親可能會帶著 “我” 進(jìn)行各種露營活動，如搭帳篷、生火做飯等，增進(jìn)親子關(guān)系。
去露營地路上看到的景色：在續(xù)寫中可成為 “我” 欣賞自然美景的鋪墊，如早上醒來看到美麗的森林景色，感受到大自然的魅力。
手機(jī)信號變?nèi)醯较В哼@是一個關(guān)鍵伏筆，后續(xù)可圍繞 “我” 沒有手機(jī)后的反應(yīng)和經(jīng)歷展開，如學(xué)會和家人交流、參與戶外活動等。
“我” 對度假的失望：在續(xù)寫中可通過露營的經(jīng)歷讓 “我” 轉(zhuǎn)變態(tài)度，從失望到喜歡這次露營。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：到達(dá)露營地后，“我” 因沒手機(jī)不開心，父親拉著 “我” 去搭帳篷，在過程中 “我” 不小心受傷，父親細(xì)心照顧，讓 “我” 感受到親情的溫暖，開始放下對手機(jī)的執(zhí)念。
第二段：第二天早上醒來，“我” 看到美麗的森林景色，和家人一起做早餐，之后去森林里徒步，感受大自然的美好，深刻認(rèn)識到生活中有比手機(jī)更重要的東西。
情感線
一開始 “我” 沉迷手機(jī)，對露營失望，到達(dá)露營地沒手機(jī)時煩躁、沮喪。在父親照顧和露營活動中，“我” 感受到親情和露營的樂趣，心情逐漸轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)殚_心、滿足。第二天醒來，欣賞自然美景，參與活動，“我” 徹底領(lǐng)悟到生活的美好，不再依賴手機(jī)，內(nèi)心變得充實(shí)而快樂。
故事線
“我” 帶著沮喪心情到達(dá)露營地，面對沒手機(jī)的情況。
父親拉 “我” 去搭帳篷，“我” 受傷，父親照顧 “我”。
晚上 “我” 躺在床上，思考白天的經(jīng)歷。
第二天早上醒來，“我” 欣賞美麗景色。
和家人一起做早餐，之后去森林徒步。
結(jié)束露營，“我” 帶著對生活新的認(rèn)識回家。
主旨升華句
This camping trip taught me that true happiness lies not in the virtual world of the phone, but in the real - life experiences and the love shared with family.（這次露營之旅讓我明白，真正的幸福不在于手機(jī)的虛擬世界，而在于現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中的經(jīng)歷以及與家人分享的愛。）
Through this adventure, I realized that disconnecting from the digital world could lead to a deeper connection with nature and the people around me.（通過這次冒險，我意識到與數(shù)字世界斷開連接能讓我與自然以及身邊的人建立更深刻的聯(lián)系。）
The camping experience opened my eyes to the beauty of the real world, reminding me that there is so much more to life than what is on the screen of a phone.（這次露營經(jīng)歷讓我看到了現(xiàn)實(shí)世界的美好，提醒我生活中有比手機(jī)屏幕上更多的東西。）
This trip was not just a vacation, but a journey of self - discovery, making me understand the importance of being present and cherishing every moment with loved ones.（這次旅行不僅僅是一次度假，更是一次自我發(fā)現(xiàn)之旅，讓我明白活在當(dāng)下以及珍惜與親人相處的每一刻的重要性。）
As I left the campsite, I carried with me a new perspective on life, one that valued real - world interactions and the wonders of nature over the constant pull of the digital realm.（當(dāng)我離開露營地時，我?guī)е鴮ι畹男驴捶ǎ粗匾暚F(xiàn)實(shí)世界的互動和大自然的奇妙，而不是數(shù)字世界的無盡誘惑。）
寫作示范一
When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. The lack of phone service felt like a punishment. Dad seemed to notice my mood but said nothing. He handed me a tent and asked me to help him set it up. Reluctantly, I started working. Suddenly, I accidentally cut my finger while handling the tent poles. I let out a cry of pain. Dad rushed to me, his eyes filled with concern. He carefully cleaned the wound and bandaged it. At that moment, I realized how much he cared about me, and my annoyance at the camping trip began to fade.
The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. The forest was filled with the sweet songs of birds. I stepped out of the tent and saw Mom making breakfast over the campfire. Dad invited me to go on a hike with him. As we walked through the forest, I was amazed by the beautiful scenery around me. The tall trees, colorful flowers, and clear streams made me forget all about my phone. I finally understood that there was a wonderful world waiting for me to explore beyond the screen.
寫作示范二
When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. I sat on a log, sulking, while my parents busied themselves with unloading the car. Dad came over and tried to get me involved in setting up the campsite. I half - heartedly helped, still longing for my phone. As we were building the fire, I lost my balance and almost fell into the fire pit. Dad quickly caught me, saving me from getting hurt. His strong arms around me made me feel safe and loved. I started to think that maybe this camping trip wasn't all bad.
The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. The fresh air filled my lungs, and I felt refreshed. We had a simple but delicious breakfast together. Then, we decided to explore the forest. Along the way, we found different kinds of plants and even saw a small deer. I was completely absorbed in the beauty of nature. By the end of the trip, I had learned that life without a phone could be just as, if not more, exciting and meaningful.
【答案】
When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. My phone showed no signal, and I felt like I was cut off from the world. Dad noticed my disappointment and said, “This is a chance to enjoy nature.” I reluctantly followed them, setting up the tent. As I walked around, I began to notice the beauty of the forest. The tall trees and the sound of birds made me feel a bit better. Maybe this trip wouldn’t be so bad after all.
The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. I opened my eyes and saw the golden light filtering through the trees. The air was fresh, and I felt a sense of peace. Dad was already up, cooking breakfast. We sat around the fire, sharing stories and laughing. I realized that without my phone, I was more connected to my family and nature. This trip taught me that sometimes, disconnecting can help us reconnect with what truly matters.

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