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For the past ten years,my dad and I have attended the same school--he as an administrator and I as a student.Our relationship,in and out of school,has been a wild,unpredictable ride.
When I was younger,all that my dad said was doctrine(信條)and anything did I,naturally,copied.I was his little shadow,imitating his every move.We played games together,and stayed up late reading bedtime stories.They were some of the best times.I could count on my dad taking me to school,running into him regularly during the day and riding home with him every afternoon.
As the years ticked by,I hit my pre-teen years.Things started to shift .Suddenly,my dad wasn't the cool guy I once thought he was.He wore his socks too high,listened to horrible country music and laughed too loudly in front of my friends.How horrible it was!He became the source of all my teenage embarrassment.However,the disasters that occurred in school were even worse.The worst one happened in seventh grade.Our class was having a New Year party,and there he was,dressed up as Donald Duck.With a guitar in hand,he sang the most ridiculous song.Just kill me!I just wanted the ground to open up and swallow me whole.So I ran away as fast as my legs could carry me.
This struggle continued well into high school.But then,something unexpected happened.It was around the time of my 10th -grade physics project.The assignment was to construct a wooden bridge that had the best strength-to-weight ratio(比率).All the students and physics teachers participated.And guess what My dad,the only administrator,decided to join in.Instantly,that familiar feeling of embarrassment washed over me,and as usual,I fled the scene.
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第一段：But hours later my friends ran up to me,their eyes shining with excitement.That evening.
第二段：I gathered all my courage and walked to dad.
文章大意
過去十年，父親作為學(xué)校管理人員，“我” 作為學(xué)生，同在一所學(xué)校。小時候，“我” 視父親為榜樣，模仿他的一舉一動，那時相處十分美好。但到了青春期，父親的言行讓 “我” 覺得尷尬，他的穿著、愛好以及在學(xué)校的表現(xiàn)都成為 “我” 青春期尷尬的來源，比如在七年級新年派對上扮成唐老鴨唱歌。這種尷尬感一直延續(xù)到高中，在十年級物理項(xiàng)目時，父親作為唯一的管理人員參與，“我” 一如既往地逃離了現(xiàn)場。
故事山分析
開端：小時候 “我” 和父親關(guān)系親密，父親是 “我” 的偶像。
發(fā)展：青春期時，父親的種種行為讓 “我” 感到尷尬，在學(xué)校的一些舉動更是讓 “我” 難堪，這種尷尬感持續(xù)到高中。
高潮（待續(xù)寫）：父親參加物理項(xiàng)目，“我” 逃離后，朋友帶來關(guān)于父親的意外消息，引發(fā) “我” 的心理變化，之后 “我” 鼓起勇氣面對父親。
結(jié)局（待續(xù)寫）：“我” 與父親解開矛盾，關(guān)系得到改善，對父親有了新的認(rèn)識。
伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
小時候與父親關(guān)系親密：可在續(xù)寫中回應(yīng)為 “我” 內(nèi)心深處對父親仍有感情，在經(jīng)歷一些事情后，能更容易化解與父親的矛盾，重拾親密關(guān)系。
青春期對父親的嫌棄：續(xù)寫中可體現(xiàn) “我” 在了解父親參與物理項(xiàng)目的表現(xiàn)后，意識到自己對父親的誤解，從而改變態(tài)度。
父親在學(xué)校的尷尬行為：與父親在物理項(xiàng)目中的出色表現(xiàn)形成對比，讓 “我” 對父親的看法發(fā)生反轉(zhuǎn)。
物理項(xiàng)目父親參與：成為故事轉(zhuǎn)折的關(guān)鍵，后續(xù)圍繞父親在項(xiàng)目中的表現(xiàn)展開，如取得好成績或有獨(dú)特創(chuàng)意，讓 “我” 對他刮目相看。
“我” 逃離現(xiàn)場：引出后續(xù)朋友帶來消息，以及 “我” 內(nèi)心的掙扎和最終鼓起勇氣面對父親的情節(jié)。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：朋友興奮地告訴 “我” 父親在物理項(xiàng)目中的出色表現(xiàn)，比如他設(shè)計的木橋不僅強(qiáng)度高、重量輕，還在展示中有獨(dú)特創(chuàng)意，獲得了大家的稱贊。“我” 聽后十分震驚，內(nèi)心開始反思自己對父親的態(tài)度。
第二段：“我” 鼓起勇氣走向父親，向他道歉，表達(dá)自己之前對他的誤解和不尊重。父親微笑著原諒了 “我”，他和 “我” 分享了參與項(xiàng)目的初衷，是為了更了解 “我” 的學(xué)習(xí)生活。通過這次交流，“我” 和父親的關(guān)系得到了極大的改善。
情感線
起初，“我” 因青春期的叛逆和對父親的不理解，對父親充滿嫌棄和尷尬。當(dāng)朋友告知父親在物理項(xiàng)目的出色表現(xiàn)時，“我” 感到震驚和愧疚。在鼓起勇氣向父親道歉并交流后，“我” 對父親的態(tài)度轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)槔斫夂妥鹬?，父女關(guān)系從緊張變得親密，“我” 也收獲了成長。
故事線
“我” 逃離物理項(xiàng)目現(xiàn)場后，朋友帶來父親在項(xiàng)目中的消息。
朋友講述父親在物理項(xiàng)目中的出色表現(xiàn)，“我” 內(nèi)心震驚、反思。
“我” 在內(nèi)心掙扎后，決定鼓起勇氣面對父親。
“我” 向父親道歉，表達(dá)自己的感受。
父親原諒 “我”，并分享參與項(xiàng)目的初衷。
“我” 和父親關(guān)系改善，“我” 對父親有了新的認(rèn)識。
主旨升華句
This experience taught me that true understanding of our parents often comes after we set aside our preconceived notions and take the time to see their efforts and love.（這次經(jīng)歷讓我明白，真正理解父母往往是在我們放下先入為主的觀念，花時間去看到他們的努力和愛之后。）
Through this incident, I realized that the bond between parents and children may be tested by the misunderstandings of youth, but it can be strengthened by honest communication and mutual respect.（通過這件事，我意識到父母和孩子之間的紐帶可能會受到青春誤解的考驗(yàn)，但可以通過坦誠的溝通和相互尊重來加強(qiáng)。）
It wasn't until I witnessed my dad's remarkable performance and had that heartfelt conversation with him that I truly understood the depth of his love and the value of his presence in my life.（直到我目睹父親的出色表現(xiàn)并與他進(jìn)行了那次真誠的交談，我才真正理解他愛的深度以及他在我生活中的重要性。）
This encounter served as a turning point in my relationship with my dad, making me see that behind the embarrassing moments lies a father's unwavering dedication to being part of my world.（這次相遇成為我和父親關(guān)系的轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)，讓我看到在那些尷尬時刻背后，是父親對融入我的世界的堅(jiān)定執(zhí)著。）
As I looked back on this experience, I learned that growing up means not only physically maturing but also learning to appreciate and cherish the people who have always been there for us, even when we don't notice.（當(dāng)我回顧這段經(jīng)歷時，我明白了成長不僅意味著身體的成熟，還意味著學(xué)會欣賞和珍惜那些一直在我們身邊的人，即使我們不曾注意到。）
寫作示范一
But hours later my friends ran up to me,their eyes shining with excitement. "Your dad is amazing!" they exclaimed. "His wooden bridge was not only the sturdiest but also the most creative. He even added some small lights to it, making it look like a magical bridge!" I was stunned. I had never expected my dad to be so brilliant. All the while, I had been so focused on my own embarrassment that I had failed to see his talent. That evening, I couldn't stop thinking about what my friends had told me. I realized how wrong I had been.
I gathered all my courage and walked to dad. With my head down, I said, "Dad, I'm so sorry for always being embarrassed by you and running away. I didn't know you were so talented." Dad smiled gently and said, "It's okay, honey. I just wanted to be a part of your school life. " At that moment, all the misunderstandings between us melted away. From then on, I saw my dad in a whole new light.
寫作示范二
But hours later my friends ran up to me,their eyes shining with excitement. "You have to see what your dad did!" they shouted. They dragged me to the exhibition area where the physics projects were on display. There, I saw my dad's wooden bridge. It was a masterpiece, with a unique structure that no one else had thought of. It won the first prize! I stood there, dumbfounded. I felt a wave of shame wash over me for all the times I had made fun of him. That evening, I tossed and turned in bed, unable to sleep.
I gathered all my courage and walked to dad. I took a deep breath and said, "Dad, I was wrong. I've been so unfair to you. I should have been proud of you instead of being embarrassed. " Dad put his arm around me and said, "I know you were just going through a tough time. I'm glad you understand now. " From that day forward, our relationship was no longer strained. I finally learned to appreciate my dad for who he truly was.
One possible version:
But hours Later,my friends ran up to me,their eyes shining with excitement.They couldn't wait to tell me how my dad's bridge was the talk of the school.So unique was his design that it had everyone amazed.It not only withstood the weight test effortlessly but also looked incredibly elegant.I was dumbfounded,my initial shock gradually turning into a sense of pride that I couldn't contain.The image of my embarrassing dad started to fade,replaced by one of a creative and capable man.
That evening,I gathered all my courage and walked to dad.Standing before him,I said sincerely,"Dad,I heard about your amazing achievement in the physics project.I'm truly proud of you."His eyes widened in surprise,and then a warm smile spread across his face.He pulled me into a hug,saying,"Son,your words mean everything to me."At that moment,I felt a strong bond rekindling between us.From then on,I began to see my dad in a new light,appreciating his uniqueness and loving him more deeply than ever.

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