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Josie and I wanted a dog more than anything else on the earth. We wished for one every time we threw coins in a fountain or watched the evening star drop behind the trees. However, our mother believed that we were still too thoughtless to take on the task of raising a pet. She had witnessed our forgetfulness on household chores and getting into small conflicts. In her eyes, these were signs that we lacked the necessary responsibility.
One summer night, as we sat together on the roof, Josie saw something. She pointed down toward a dark shadow, “What’s that ”
For one astonishing second, Josie and I stared at each other. Then we rushed down onto the doorway. There in our yard stood a black dog. Josie made a little kissing noise and held out her hand. The dog came to us slowly, taking a few steps forward, then a step back, not sure whether to trust us. She was so skinny that I could just feel every bone, and her coat was messy.
“We’re going to have a dog!” My inside was full of excitement, just like before Christmas or our birthday.
“What’s a good name ” said Josie.
The perfect name wrote itself in my mind, “Shadow!”
The next day, we piled together all the pocket money we had to buy all kinds of dog foods and hid it in various places because we were afraid Mom wouldn’t approve that if she knew we were feeding a homeless dog.
That night, after our parents were asleep, we silently slipped downstairs to feed Shadow. We carefully poured the dog food into the bowl, trying to make as little noise as possible. Shadow, who had been waiting eagerly by our side, wagged (搖晃) her tail. As we placed the bowl on the floor, a creaking (吱吱的) sound filled the house. Suddenly, the kitchen light was switched on, illuminating the room and revealing our shocked faces.
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It was our mother, standing there surprisingly.
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Mom decided to give us a chance to prove we could be responsible owners.
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文章大意
Josie 和 “我” 極度渴望擁有一只狗，但母親認為我們做事粗心、缺乏責任感，不允許養狗。一個夏夜，姐妹倆在院子里發現一只瘦骨嶙峋、毛發雜亂的流浪黑狗，她們興奮不已，給它取名 Shadow。第二天，兩人湊齊零花錢買狗糧，趁父母睡著后偷偷下樓喂食。然而，喂食時發出的聲響驚動了母親，母親突然開燈，發現了她們的秘密行動。
故事山分析
開端：Josie 和 “我” 渴望養狗，母親因我們的表現拒絕。
發展：姐妹倆發現流浪狗 Shadow，給它取名字，并用零花錢買狗糧。
高潮：夜晚偷偷喂食時被母親發現。
結局（待續寫）：母親的態度轉變，姐妹倆證明自己能照顧好狗。
伏筆及在續寫中的回應
母親認為我們缺乏責任感：續寫中母親決定給姐妹倆機會證明，她們通過照顧狗的行動來回應這一點，如按時喂食、帶狗散步等。
我們扔硬幣許愿和看星星許愿養狗：暗示對狗的極度渴望，在續寫中體現為努力爭取養狗的機會，不輕易放棄。
狗很瘦且毛發雜亂：續寫中姐妹倆會精心照顧它，讓它變得健康、漂亮，體現照顧的成果。
我們藏狗糧：表明害怕母親反對，續寫中母親發現后態度的轉變形成對比。
偷偷下樓喂食發出聲響：導致被母親發現，推動故事發展，續寫中圍繞母親發現后的反應展開。
續寫要點（兩段）
第一段：重點描寫母親發現后的反應，如驚訝、生氣，姐妹倆的緊張、害怕，以及母親的質問和姐妹倆的解釋。
第二段：描述母親決定給機會后，姐妹倆如何照顧狗，展示責任感，包括制定照顧計劃、學習養狗知識等，最后得到母親認可。
情感線
起初，姐妹倆對狗極度渴望，發現 Shadow 時興奮不已。藏狗糧、偷偷喂食時緊張又期待。被母親發現后驚慌失措。母親給機會后，充滿希望，努力照顧狗的過程中逐漸培養起責任感，最終得到母親認可，收獲成就感和喜悅。
故事線
姐妹渴望養狗，母親拒絕。
發現流浪狗 Shadow，取名并買糧。
夜晚偷偷喂食被母親發現。
母親質問，姐妹解釋。
母親給機會，姐妹制定照顧計劃。
姐妹努力照顧狗，得到母親認可。
主旨升華句（英文）
Responsibility is not just a word; it's the key to winning trust and achieving our dreams.
Through taking care of Shadow, we learned that with responsibility comes the joy of nurturing and the reward of love.
Our journey with Shadow taught us that every small effort towards responsibility can lead to great changes in our lives.
The love for Shadow not only made us strive for responsibility but also deepened the bond between us and our family.
In the process of proving ourselves responsible dog owners, we grew up and understood the true meaning of commitment.
寫作示范一
It was our mother, standing there surprisingly. Her eyebrows knitted together, and her voice was firm as she asked, "What are you two doing " Josie and I exchanged nervous glances, our hands shaking slightly. I stammered out an explanation, telling her how much we loved Shadow and how we just wanted to take care of her. Mom listened quietly, her expression softening a bit.
Mom decided to give us a chance to prove we could be responsible owners. We immediately made a detailed schedule. Every morning, we took turns to walk Shadow, and after school, we would groom her carefully. We also read books about dog care to learn how to keep her healthy. Slowly but surely, Shadow grew stronger and more energetic. Mom watched our efforts with a smile, and we knew that our hard work had paid off.
寫作示范二
It was our mother, standing there surprisingly. Her eyes widened in shock, and for a moment, the kitchen was filled with an awkward silence. Josie's face turned red, and I lowered my head, waiting for her scolding. But instead of getting angry, Mom asked gently why we had hidden this from her. We poured out our hearts, expressing our deep love for Shadow.
Mom decided to give us a chance to prove we could be responsible owners. We were overjoyed and determined to do well. We set up a small corner for Shadow, complete with a soft bed and toys. We started saving more money to buy better dog food and even took her to the vet for regular check - ups. As time passed, Shadow became an important part of our family, and Mom's approval made our efforts all the more worthwhile.
【答案】
It was our mother, standing there surprisingly. Her eyes widened as she saw the scene before her. For a moment, there was silence, only with the creaking sound still lingering in the air. Stammering, we tried to explain to her. We told her about how we found Shadow and our longing for a dog, hoping that somehow our mother would understand it. After a long pause, she finally spoke, “I can see how much you both care for Shadow, and maybe it’s time for us to give her a home.”
Mom decided to give us a chance to prove we could be responsible owners. From that day on, we poured our hearts into taking care of Shadow. We woke up early every morning to take her for walks and diligently cleaned up after her. Gradually, Shadow transformed before our eyes. Her coat became shiny and healthy, and she gained weight. She followed us everywhere like a second shadow. Not only had we achieved our dream of having a dog, we had also earned our mother’s trust and respect.

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