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I was backpacking and planned to climb a volcano called Volcan Baru. At 3,474m, it is the highest peak in the country and one of the only places on Earth from where you can see the Atlantic and the Pacific Oceans at the same time. It is an active volcano, but last erupted around 1550.
I set off before sunrise. It was a little cold, so I had pulled on tights under my trousers. I intended to reach the top by midday, and then return before dark to get a lift to my hotel.I’ve always felt safe travelling as a woman on my own, which I’ve done since my 20s. I love the freedom. When I got to the base of the volcano at 7 in the morning，the ranger disagreed to let me go alone, but said OK because an American couple were behind me.
The first part of the climb was beautiful. It was not dry as you might imagine a volcano might be — there were trees and flowers all around, and a dirt road for the farmers who worked around there.I walked for an hour and reached a fair height. The views were impressive, so I stopped to take a photograph.
Suddenly I heard violent barking behind me. I turned and saw two dogs running aggressively (挑釁) towards me. I expected them to stop, but they didn’t. As they got closer, I could see their teeth looked sharp, and that they looked angry. There was nowhere for me to run. I tried to keep calm, but my heart was racing. I’d never been bitten by a dog, and I couldn’t help but fear what would happen. They stopped a dozen feet from where I stood and kept barking. I knew they could move fast, so I didn’t want to try to outrun them.
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Terrified, I slowly kept walking, saying, “Come on, good dogs!”
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Just at this critical moment, a pickup appeared, driven by the ranger.
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文章大意
“我” 獨自背包旅行，計劃攀登海拔 3474 米的巴魯火山，它是該國最高峰，也是能同時看到大西洋和太平洋的少數地方之一，雖為活火山，但上一次噴發在 1550 年左右。“我” 在日出前出發，早上 7 點到達火山底部時，護林員本不同意 “我” 獨自登山，因有一對美國夫婦隨后才放行。登山初期景色很美，并非想象中火山的干燥模樣，有樹木、鮮花和供周邊農民行走的土路。“我” 登了一小時到達一定高度，停下來拍照時，突然聽到身后有狗狂吠，兩只狗氣勢洶洶地向 “我” 沖來，“我” 十分害怕，不敢逃跑，只能站在原地，試圖讓自己冷靜下來。
故事山分析
開端：“我” 獨自背包去攀登巴魯火山，到達火山底部后因有美國夫婦隨后，護林員同意 “我” 獨自登山。
發展：登山途中景色優美，“我” 在拍照時，兩只兇狗突然出現并向 “我” 逼近，“我” 陷入恐懼與危險之中。
高潮：狗一直對著 “我” 狂吠，“我” 不敢輕舉妄動，內心極度緊張，不知道如何應對，危險持續升級。
結局（待續寫）：在極度危險的時刻，出現轉機，可能是護林員或其他人幫助 “我” 擺脫危險，“我” 成功脫險，繼續完成登山之旅，或者對這次經歷有深刻感悟。
伏筆以及在續寫中的回應
護林員不同意 “我” 獨自登山，后因美國夫婦同意：在續寫中，美國夫婦可能會在關鍵時刻出現，比如他們聽到狗叫聲趕來幫忙，或者在 “我” 脫險后，與 “我” 一起完成登山，回應這個伏筆，讓故事更加完整。
“我” 獨自旅行且熱愛自由，一直感覺安全：與后面被狗攻擊形成反差，在續寫中，脫險后的 “我” 可能會對獨自旅行的安全有新的認識，或者更加珍惜這種自由但又充滿挑戰的旅行經歷，使人物形象更加豐滿。
登山途中景色描述：續寫中可能會在脫險后，“我” 對這些景色有更深的感受，比如覺得之前忽略的美景此刻格外珍貴，或者因為這次經歷，這些景色有了不一樣的意義，讓故事更具感染力。
狗突然出現并攻擊 “我”：是故事的轉折點，續寫中圍繞 “我” 如何擺脫狗的攻擊展開，如通過自己的智慧、他人的幫助等方式，推動故事發展。
提到活火山但長時間未噴發：在續寫中，可能會在 “我” 脫險后，繼續攀登火山時，遇到與火山相關的情況，比如看到火山口獨特的景象，與前文呼應，豐富故事內容。
續寫要點（兩段）
第一段：詳細描述 “我” 在狗的威脅下繼續行走時的心理狀態，如極度恐懼、時刻警惕；動作細節，如緩慢且小心翼翼地移動；還可描述狗的反應，是否繼續緊逼，“我” 嘗試用言語安撫狗的效果等。
第二段：著重描寫護林員出現后的場景，他如何趕走狗，“我” 的反應，如從緊張到放松的情緒變化；與護林員的交流，護林員對 “我” 的關心或提醒；之后 “我” 是否繼續登山，以及對這次經歷的初步感受。
情感線
起初，“我” 獨自旅行充滿自由與期待，心情輕松愉悅。當狗突然出現并攻擊 “我” 時，恐懼瞬間籠罩，心跳加速，內心極度緊張，時刻擔心被咬傷。在與狗僵持的過程中，恐懼不斷加劇，幾乎絕望。護林員出現時，“我” 的心情從極度恐懼轉為驚喜和放松，充滿感激。脫險后，可能會對這次經歷心有余悸，也可能會因這次驚險而對旅行有新的感悟，更加珍惜安全的旅行時光。
故事線
“我” 獨自背包前往巴魯火山，在護林員同意后開始登山。
登山途中景色優美，“我” 停下來拍照。
兩只兇狗突然出現并攻擊 “我”，“我” 陷入恐懼，不敢逃跑。
“我” 在狗的威脅下，緩慢行走并試圖安撫它們。
護林員駕駛皮卡車出現，趕走了狗。
“我” 與護林員交流，決定是否繼續登山，對這次經歷有所感悟。
主旨升華句
This encounter with the dogs not only tested my courage in the face of danger but also taught me that even in the most beautiful and seemingly peaceful journeys, unexpected challenges can arise, reminding me to always be prepared.（這次與狗的遭遇不僅考驗了我在危險面前的勇氣，還讓我明白，即使在最美麗、看似最平靜的旅途中，也可能會出現意想不到的挑戰，提醒我時刻做好準備。）
Through this terrifying experience, I realized that the freedom I cherish in solo traveling comes with risks, and it is the ability to stay calm and face difficulties head - on that truly defines a remarkable adventure.（通過這次可怕的經歷，我意識到我在獨自旅行中所珍視的自由伴隨著風險，而真正定義一次非凡冒險的是保持冷靜并直面困難的能力。）
The appearance of the ranger at the critical moment not only saved me from the dangerous situation but also made me feel the warmth of human kindness in a foreign land, highlighting the importance of looking out for one another during travels.（護林員在關鍵時刻的出現不僅使我脫離了危險境地，還讓我在異國他鄉感受到了人性的溫暖，凸顯了旅行中相互關照的重要性。）
This incident on the way to the volcano taught me that nature, with its beauty and unpredictability, is a powerful reminder of our vulnerability and the need to respect its every aspect, whether it's the majestic volcano or the wild animals.（在前往火山途中的這次事件讓我明白，大自然既美麗又不可預測，它有力地提醒著我們的脆弱，以及尊重它的每一個方面的必要性，無論是雄偉的火山還是野生動物。）
After this harrowing experience, I came to understand that every challenge we face during our travels is an opportunity for growth, and it is through these trials that we become more resilient and appreciative of the wonders of the world.（在這次痛苦的經歷之后，我開始明白，我們在旅行中面臨的每一個挑戰都是成長的機會，正是通過這些考驗，我們變得更加堅韌，也更加珍惜世界的奇妙之處。）
寫作示范一
Terrified, I slowly kept walking, saying, “Come on, good dogs!” My voice trembled, barely audible over their fierce barking. With each step, I prayed they wouldn't lunge at me. Their eyes were fixed on me, and I could feel their hostility. I tried to look confident, but my legs were shaking uncontrollably. I remembered reading that showing fear could make the situation worse, so I forced myself to keep moving forward, though my heart was pounding in my chest.
Just at this critical moment, a pickup appeared, driven by the ranger. He honked the horn loudly, and the dogs were startled. They turned their heads towards the vehicle, their aggression momentarily distracted. The ranger jumped out, shouting and waving his arms. The dogs, intimidated by his actions, finally backed off and ran away. I let out a long - awaited sigh of relief. The ranger came to me, asking if I was okay. I nodded, still a bit shaken. He advised me to be more careful and offered to accompany me for the rest of the climb. Gratefully, I accepted, and we continued our journey together, with my heart gradually calming down.
寫作示范二
Terrified, I slowly kept walking, saying, “Come on, good dogs!” But they didn't seem to be affected by my gentle words. Instead, they growled even louder, getting closer with each passing second. I could smell their foul breath and feel their hot stares on me. My mind was racing, thinking of any possible way to escape. I considered throwing my backpack at them as a distraction, but I was afraid it would only enrage them more. Every nerve in my body was on edge, and I was on the verge of breaking down.
Just at this critical moment, a pickup appeared, driven by the ranger. He quickly sped towards the dogs, making a sharp turn to block their path. The dogs were startled by the sudden arrival of the vehicle and stopped in their tracks. The ranger got out with a stick in his hand and chased the dogs away. I stood there, frozen in shock for a few seconds. Then, I rushed towards the ranger, tears welling up in my eyes. “Thank you so much,” I said, my voice filled with gratitude. The ranger patted me on the shoulder, saying, “It's okay now. You're safe.” After a short rest, I decided to continue my climb, more determined than ever, but also with a newfound respect for the unexpected dangers that could lurk during my travels.
【答案】參考范文
Terrified, I slowly kept walking, saying, “Come on, good dogs!” Suddenly, one dog dashed up towards me, sinking his teeth into my leg. “Oh, my God, I’m in a dog’s mouth and he’s trying to swallow me,” I thought to myself, with the pain taking my breath away as I felt his teeth in my flesh. I picked up a rock to fight him off, but was nervous that he would go for my neck or that the other one would come to attack me together. Facing these two aggressive dogs,I desperately felt at a loss. Hardly could I step out of the trouble on my own.
Just at this critical moment, a pickup appeared, driven by the ranger: Seeing the state I was in, he immediately stopped his pickup, opened the door, and signaled to me to get in. When we reached the base, he helped me bandage the leg up, earnestly reminding me that safety comes first while travelling. I felt relieved and grateful. And from then on, I travel carefully as well as cautiously. After all, nothing is more precious than life.

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