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Two Coins for the Carousel
I hold the two shiny coins in my pocket— just enough for two carousel (旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬) rides. The air is filled with the sounds of the carousel: the cheerful music, the rhythmic spinning (旋轉(zhuǎn)) , and the laughter of children. They’re all reaching for rings from the dispenser (自動(dòng)售貨機(jī)) as they spin past, each hoping to catch the gold ring. That’s the one I’m after too. Every ride, a single gold ring appears, and whoever grabs it wins a ticket for a free, giant ice-cream. Silver rings just mean another ride, but I’m set on the gold.
Spotting my friend Alice across the crowd, I pull Mom by the sleeve. “Look, Mama,” I say, pointing. “Can I go and say hello ” Mama nods, saying “Go ahead, Grace.” I take off through the crowd.
Alice is watching the carousel, her eyes fixed on the spinning horses. “Are you going to ride ” I ask. She shakes her head. “Papa doesn’t bring any coins today.”
Feeling the weight of my two coins, I know Mama won’t mind if I share. “Do you want to ride with me ” I offer, holding up the coins. Her smile is all the answer I need.
“I’m going to share my coins with Alice,” I whisper to Mama as we make our way toward the carousel. Mama’s smile tells me I made the right choice.
I hand my coin to the worker and Alice gives him my other coin. “Which one do you want to ride ” asks Alice. I think she wants me to pick first since I’m the one who paid. A blue horse with a chipped nose catches my eye. “This one,” I say proudly, climbing on and grasping the pole tightly. Alice looks around me quickly and picks the one right behind me.
As we spin, the music slows, signaling the end of the ride. I have one more chance for the gold ring. And there it is, sliding down the dispenser. I stretch out my hand, but it slips through my fingers. Maybe next time.
注意：
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Behind me, Alice starts shouting with excitement.
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“Grace! Let’s share it!” she shouts, holding up the ice-cream.
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文章大意
“我” 口袋里有兩枚硬幣，剛好夠玩兩次旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬，旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬上有自動(dòng)售貨機(jī)分發(fā)彩環(huán)，抓到金環(huán)能贏得一個(gè)免費(fèi)的巨型冰淇淋，銀環(huán)則意味著可以再玩一次，“我” 一心想要抓到金環(huán)。在人群中看到朋友愛麗絲后，得知她爸爸沒帶硬幣不能玩，“我” 決定和她分享硬幣。我們一起去玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬，“我” 選了一匹藍(lán)色鼻子有缺口的馬，愛麗絲選了我后面的那匹。第一次旋轉(zhuǎn)結(jié)束，音樂變慢，“我” 沒能抓到金環(huán)，還有一次機(jī)會(huì)抓金環(huán)。
故事山分析
開端：“我” 帶著兩枚硬幣準(zhǔn)備玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬抓金環(huán)，遇到?jīng)]帶硬幣的愛麗絲，決定和她分享。
發(fā)展：我們一起玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬，各自選好馬匹，第一次旋轉(zhuǎn)結(jié)束 “我” 沒抓到金環(huán)。
高潮：第二次旋轉(zhuǎn)時(shí)，金環(huán)出現(xiàn)，誰能抓到金環(huán)成為故事高潮，愛麗絲的反應(yīng)和 “我” 的心情將是重點(diǎn)。
結(jié)局（待續(xù)寫）：抓到金環(huán)后的后續(xù)情節(jié)，是愛麗絲抓到還是 “我” 抓到，以及如何分享喜悅，讓故事有一個(gè)溫馨的結(jié)尾。
伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
“我” 一心想要抓到金環(huán)贏得免費(fèi)冰淇淋：續(xù)寫中會(huì)圍繞金環(huán)的歸屬展開，抓到金環(huán)后如何處理，是自己享用冰淇淋還是和愛麗絲分享，回應(yīng) “我” 對(duì)金環(huán)的渴望。
愛麗絲沒帶硬幣，“我” 和她分享：體現(xiàn)了 “我” 的善良，抓到金環(huán)后兩人會(huì)因?yàn)檫@份情誼繼續(xù)分享喜悅，展現(xiàn)友誼的珍貴。
媽媽對(duì) “我” 和愛麗絲分享硬幣的認(rèn)可：暗示了分享是正確的行為，抓到金環(huán)后的分享也會(huì)得到媽媽的肯定，強(qiáng)化分享的主題。
第一次旋轉(zhuǎn) “我” 沒抓到金環(huán)，還有一次機(jī)會(huì)：這是故事的懸念，續(xù)寫中會(huì)揭曉第二次是否抓到金環(huán)，推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展。
愛麗絲選擇了 “我” 后面的馬：在抓到金環(huán)時(shí)，兩人的距離近，方便互動(dòng)，比如愛麗絲抓到金環(huán)后能第一時(shí)間和 “我” 分享。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：著重描寫愛麗絲興奮喊叫后的場(chǎng)景，她是否抓到了金環(huán)，她的動(dòng)作、表情，如激動(dòng)地?fù)]舞著手中的金環(huán)；“我” 看到她抓到金環(huán)后的反應(yīng)，是驚訝、高興還是有一絲失落；周圍人的反應(yīng)，如其他孩子的羨慕、工作人員的祝賀等。
第二段：圍繞愛麗絲喊著要和 “我” 分享冰淇淋展開，描述 “我” 的感受，如感動(dòng)、欣慰；我們一起分享冰淇淋的畫面，是坐在長椅上開心地吃著，互相說著感謝的話；媽媽看到這一幕的反應(yīng)，如微笑著點(diǎn)頭，夸贊我們的友誼。最后表達(dá)對(duì)這次經(jīng)歷的感悟，強(qiáng)調(diào)友誼和分享的美好。
情感線
起初，“我” 滿心期待抓到金環(huán)，興奮地準(zhǔn)備玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬。看到愛麗絲不能玩時(shí)，出于善良決定和她分享硬幣，心情變得溫暖。第一次沒抓到金環(huán)有點(diǎn)小失落，仍抱有期待。當(dāng)愛麗絲興奮喊叫時(shí)，“我” 好奇又緊張，得知她抓到金環(huán)，先是驚訝，隨后為她高興。聽到愛麗絲要分享冰淇淋，內(nèi)心充滿感動(dòng)，和她一起分享時(shí)，感受到友誼的珍貴和分享的快樂，這次經(jīng)歷讓 “我” 更加珍惜這份友誼。
故事線
“我” 帶著兩枚硬幣準(zhǔn)備玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬抓金環(huán)，遇到?jīng)]帶硬幣的愛麗絲，決定和她分享。
我們一起玩旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬，各自選好馬匹，第一次旋轉(zhuǎn)結(jié)束 “我” 沒抓到金環(huán)。
第二次旋轉(zhuǎn)時(shí)，金環(huán)出現(xiàn)，愛麗絲興奮喊叫，原來她抓到了金環(huán)。
愛麗絲喊著要和 “我” 分享冰淇淋，“我” 十分感動(dòng)。
我們一起分享冰淇淋，開心地交流，享受友誼的美好。
媽媽看到這一幕，肯定我們的友誼，“我” 對(duì)這次經(jīng)歷印象深刻，感悟到友誼和分享的珍貴。
主旨升華句
This experience taught me that the joy of winning is not in the prize itself, but in the company of friends and the beauty of sharing, which makes the victory even more meaningful.（這次經(jīng)歷讓我明白，勝利的喜悅不在于獎(jiǎng)品本身，而在于朋友的陪伴和分享的美好，這讓勝利更有意義。）
Through this simple yet heartwarming event, I realized that true friendship is about being there for each other, sharing both the opportunities and the rewards, and that such moments of sharing can create lasting memories.（通過這個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單卻溫馨的事件，我意識(shí)到真正的友誼在于彼此陪伴，分享機(jī)會(huì)和收獲，這樣的分享時(shí)刻能創(chuàng)造永恒的回憶。）
The act of sharing the coins at first and then the ice - cream later demonstrated the power of kindness and friendship. It showed that small acts of generosity can bring great happiness and strengthen the bonds between people.（起初分享硬幣，后來分享冰淇淋的行為展示了善良和友誼的力量。它表明小小的慷慨之舉能帶來巨大的幸福，并加強(qiáng)人與人之間的聯(lián)系。）
In this moment of sharing the ice - cream, I understood that the value of a friendship is not measured by grand gestures but by the simple, sincere acts of sharing, which can light up our lives with warmth and joy.（在分享冰淇淋的這一刻，我明白了友誼的價(jià)值不是由偉大的舉動(dòng)來衡量，而是由簡(jiǎn)單、真誠的分享行為來衡量，這些行為能讓我們的生活充滿溫暖和喜悅。）
This carousel adventure with Alice not only brought us the excitement of the game but also taught us a valuable lesson about friendship and sharing, reminding us that the most precious things in life are often the ones we share with others.（和愛麗絲的這次旋轉(zhuǎn)木馬冒險(xiǎn)不僅給我們帶來了游戲的興奮，還讓我們學(xué)到了關(guān)于友誼和分享的寶貴一課，提醒我們生活中最珍貴的東西往往是我們與他人分享的東西。）
寫作示范一
Behind me, Alice starts shouting with excitement. I turn around quickly, only to see her waving a shiny gold ring in the air. Her eyes are wide with joy, and her face is glowing with excitement. “I got it! I got the gold ring!” she screams. Other children around us look at her with envy, and the carousel worker gives her a big smile and a thumbs - up. I'm a bit surprised at first, but then a big smile spreads across my face. I'm so happy for her.
“Grace! Let’s share it!” she shouts, holding up the ice - cream. I walk over to her, feeling a warm sense of happiness in my heart. We sit down on a nearby bench, and she breaks the ice - cream into two parts. As we take the first bite, the sweet taste fills our mouths. We look at each other and burst out laughing. At that moment, I realize that sharing this ice - cream with Alice is even more delicious than having it all by myself. Mama comes over, sees us sharing, and gives us an approving smile. This simple act of sharing makes this day even more special.
寫作示范二
Behind me, Alice starts shouting with excitement. I crane my neck to see what's going on. There, in her hand, is the glittering gold ring. She's jumping up and down, her long hair flying in the wind. “Grace, I can't believe it! I caught the gold ring!” she yells, her voice filled with disbelief and joy. People around us start to clap, and the atmosphere becomes even more lively. I feel a twinge of disappointment at first, but it's quickly replaced by pure happiness for my friend.
“Grace! Let’s share it!” she shouts, holding up the ice - cream. I run towards her, my heart full of warmth. We stand there, side by side, sharing the huge ice - cream. Every bite is a blend of sweetness and friendship. We talk and laugh, sharing our excitement about this unexpected win. Mom approaches us, her eyes softening with pride. She says, “You two are wonderful. True friendship is all about sharing.” Her words make us feel even happier, and we know that this day at the carousel will be a memory we'll cherish forever.
【答案】
Behind me, Alice starts shouting with excitement. Looking back, I see her holding up the gold ring high, her face brightened up with joy. “That’s amazing, Alice!” I exclaim, with a wide grin spreading across my face, though a touch of disappointment flashes through my mind. We climb down from Carousel. I run to my mom while Alice can’t wait to get her giant ice cream. Mama sensitively perceives the little upset on my face, gently comforting me, “Maybe next time.”
“Gracie! Let’s share it!” she shouts, holding up the ice-cream. Hearing her words, I smile, my eyes twinkling with joy. I look at Mama who smiles back and nods. I run with Alice to a bench. We eat the ice cream, talking about how lucky we are. After a while, Mama reminds me it is time to go home. “Thanks for the ice cream,” I say to Alice. “Thanks for your coin,” she responds. It is at that moment that we both enjoy the happiness of sharing.

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