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When my sister, Dona, and I were little kids, my parents both joined the army. They stayed far away from our town and hardly returned home. My grandpa took on the big responsibility of taking care of us. Still, without our parents by our side, Dona and I sometimes felt lonely and sad, especially one winter.
One morning in that winter when Dona and I were sitting in our bedroom, dull (沉悶的) and quiet, Grandpa said, “My dear, how about trying skating for fun ” Our faces immediately lit up and we answered together, “Great, we surely like it, Grandpa!”
He smiled and quickly set about building us a skating rink (溜冰場) in our yard. The process of building a skating rink was not easy. First, Grandpa laid out long wooden boards around the yard. Next, he made the base of the rink flat. Grandpa then began spraying (噴) the water, lightly at first, until the first layer of ice was established. He would then put some water onto the ice each night. And thus, the ice became thicker and thicker.
In the darkness of the night, from the kitchen window Dona and I watched Grandpa with great expectations. His back and shoulders rounded to protect him from the freezing wind. He stood alone, busying himself creating a perfect skating rink for us. The only light was from the moon and stars.
One night, Grandpa suddenly pressed his waist and the look on his face showed he was painful. Quite concerned, Dona and I rushed out and asked, “Grandpa! What’s wrong ” “My waist is painful. Don’t worry! I’ll be fine just after a little rest,” he smiled. Dona and I offered to help create the rink. But he said it was too cold outside at night and that building the rink needs much experience and lots of skills. Then, we gave up the idea of offering him a hand, but demanded he build the rink a few days later. Seeing we were determined, he walked into the room with us and had warm tea. Before long, Dona and I were tired and went to bed.
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150左右；2. 請按如下格式作答。
一、文章大意
作者和妹妹多娜小時候，父母參軍遠離家鄉，由爺爺照顧。一個冬天，爺爺為了讓姐妹倆開心，決定在院子里給她們建溜冰場。建溜冰場過程艱難，爺爺在寒冷的夜晚獨自勞作，姐妹倆在廚房窗邊滿懷期待地看著。一天晚上，爺爺突然腰疼，姐妹倆想幫忙被拒，最后爺爺和她們一起回屋喝茶，姐妹倆因疲憊上床睡覺。
二、故事山分析
開端：父母參軍，爺爺照顧作者和妹妹，冬天時姐妹倆感到沉悶，爺爺提議建溜冰場。
發展：爺爺開始建溜冰場，過程復雜，姐妹倆在夜晚看著爺爺忙碌。
高潮：爺爺腰疼，姐妹倆想幫忙但被拒絕，最后一起回屋喝茶，姐妹倆睡覺。
結局（預測）：第二天姐妹倆看到建好的溜冰場，開心玩耍，感受到爺爺的愛。
尾聲（預測）：姐妹倆更加珍惜和爺爺在一起的時光，理解爺爺的付出。
三、伏筆及在續寫中的回應
伏筆 1：父母不在身邊，姐妹倆感到孤獨沉悶。回應：爺爺建溜冰場就是為了讓她們開心，后續可能會強調溜冰場給姐妹倆帶來的歡樂，驅散孤獨。
伏筆 2：建溜冰場過程艱難，爺爺獨自在寒冷夜晚勞作。回應：體現爺爺的辛苦，為姐妹倆看到建好的溜冰場后的感動做鋪墊。
伏筆 3：爺爺突然腰疼。回應：可能會在后續提到爺爺的身體狀況，或者姐妹倆對爺爺健康的關心。
伏筆 4：姐妹倆想幫忙被拒。回應：突出爺爺對姐妹倆的愛護，后續可能會體現姐妹倆對爺爺這種愛護的感激。
伏筆 5：姐妹倆滿懷期待地看著爺爺建溜冰場。回應：為第二天看到建好的溜冰場后的興奮做鋪墊。
四、續寫要點
第一段：描述第二天姐妹倆醒來后看到溜冰場的場景，她們的表情、動作和語言，如興奮地尖叫、迫不及待地沖出去等，以及對溜冰場的贊美。
第二段：描寫姐妹倆在溜冰場玩耍的情景，如互相追逐、摔倒又爬起來，同時可以表達她們對爺爺的感激之情，以及爺爺看到她們玩耍時的欣慰。
五、情感線
起初姐妹倆因父母不在身邊感到孤獨沉悶，得知爺爺要建溜冰場后充滿期待，看到爺爺腰疼時十分擔心，想幫忙被拒有些失落，第二天看到建好的溜冰場時興奮激動，在玩耍過程中對爺爺的感激之情愈發深厚。
六、故事線
父母參軍，爺爺照顧姐妹倆，姐妹倆冬天感到沉悶。
爺爺提議建溜冰場，開始艱難建造。
爺爺腰疼，姐妹倆想幫忙被拒。
姐妹倆睡覺，第二天醒來看到建好的溜冰場。
姐妹倆在溜冰場開心玩耍。
姐妹倆感激爺爺，珍惜和爺爺在一起的時光。
七、主旨升華句
Love is not just a word; it is the selfless actions like Grandpa's, which can warm our hearts even in the coldest of winters.（愛不只是一個詞，它是像爺爺那樣無私的行動，即使在最寒冷的冬天也能溫暖我們的心。）
In the absence of parents, Grandpa's love, shown through the building of the skating rink, became the most precious gift, filling our lives with joy and warmth.（在父母不在身邊時，爺爺通過建溜冰場所展現的愛，成為了最珍貴的禮物，讓我們的生活充滿歡樂和溫暖。）
Sometimes, the greatest expressions of love come in the form of simple yet dedicated efforts, just like Grandpa's hard work to create a happy memory for us.（有時候，最偉大的愛的表達是以簡單而專注的努力的形式出現，就像爺爺為我們創造美好回憶所付出的努力。）
The skating rink, built with Grandpa's love and sweat, not only provided us with fun but also taught us the true meaning of family affection and sacrifice.（這個用爺爺的愛和汗水建成的溜冰場，不僅給我們帶來了樂趣，還讓我們懂得了親情和付出的真正含義。）
Through Grandpa's act of building the skating rink, we learned that love has the power to turn a dull winter into a season full of laughter and cherished memories.（通過爺爺建溜冰場的舉動，我們明白了愛有力量把沉悶的冬天變成充滿歡笑和珍貴回憶的季節。）
八、寫作示范一
第一段
The next morning, as soon as Dona and I opened our eyes, we rushed to the window. To our great surprise, a beautiful skating rink lay in the yard. The ice was so smooth that it reflected the sunlight like a mirror. “Wow! It's amazing! Grandpa really made it!” we shouted excitedly, jumping up and down. Without hesitation, we quickly put on our thick clothes and rushed out to the rink.
第二段
On the rink, we held hands and skated slowly at first. Then, we started to speed up, laughing and screaming. Sometimes, we fell down, but the soft snow on the side of the rink protected us. Looking at Grandpa standing by, watching us with a big smile, we skated towards him and gave him a big hug. “Thank you, Grandpa! This is the best gift ever!” we said gratefully. Grandpa patted our heads gently, and his eyes were filled with love and contentment.
寫作示范二
第一段
When we woke up the following day, the first thing we did was to run outside. There, in the middle of the yard, was a perfect skating rink. The ice sparkled under the sunlight, as if it was covered with diamonds. Dona and I were so excited that we couldn't wait to step on it. We put on our skates clumsily and stepped onto the ice with trembling legs.
第二段
At first, we moved carefully, afraid of falling. But soon, with the wind blowing on our faces, we became more confident and started to enjoy the feeling of gliding. We played games, chased each other, and even tried some simple tricks. Every now and then, we would look at Grandpa, who was sitting on the bench, watching us with pride. We knew that this wonderful skating rink was not just a place for fun, but a symbol of Grandpa's deep love for us.
參考答案
When we fell asleep, Grandpa quietly walked out into the yard. He busied himself working on the rink again. He hoped to finish the work early so that we could skate as soon as possible. That night, he worked for a long time outside although his waist was painful. The next morning, when Dona and I woke up, we found Grandpa had placed skating equipment before our bed. When we were just curious and confused, Grandpa called out, “Kids, put it on and come out for fun! The rink was ready.”
Amazed, we hurriedly put on the skating equipment and rushed out. Seeing the beautiful rink, we were so excited and tried putting our skate blades to the ice at once, while Grandpa stood aside, smiling. We skated in the cold for what felt like hours, laughing and creating memories that have lasted a lifetime. Grandpa always was proud of what he had accomplished and happy to see us having so much fun. Now we always remember those many winters of terrific fun in our own backyard as a very special gift, which Grandpa built with great love.

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