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I taught English as a Second Language (ESL) at a school. One particular sixth grader, Pablo, was struggling with fluency in reading, so after class I suggested that he get extra practice by reading aloud to his mom while she prepared dinner each evening. This was something I routinely encouraged my struggling students to do. Imagine my surprise when Pablo responded by starting to cry. He said, “My mom can’t cook dinner!” Then he cried harder. Eventually, he calmed down enough to tell me that his mom was only able to “cry in her bed” when he got home every afternoon. He said that he was caring for his six-month-old baby brother by himself from the time he got home each day. His mother, it seemed, had a bad tooth and was in extreme pain. He said that his father didn’t have enough money to get it fixed, and that there was no way for her to go to a dentist. This child’s heart was broken for his mom.
I was speechless! He was still crying when he left me that day, and I promised him I would try to help. I kept asking myself how I could help this student. How could I help his mother when we didn’t even speak the same language
The next day, I sent a note, which a friend helped me translate, to Pablo’s mother asking if she would like me to find someone to help her. The following day, Pablo brought me a note from his mom accepting my offer to help.
Meanwhile, I had been doing some networking among my friends asking if anyone knew a dentist who might do some free work for this lady. At the time, I was not able to pay for the work to be done myself. Several friends suggested a dental office that had recently opened up in the area, thinking that they might be willing to provide the services. I didn’t want to waste a lot of time going to several dentists, so I prayed that this would be the one.
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1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
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Stopping by the dental office, I went to the reception desk.
Pablo’s mother came to meet the dentist at the appointed time.
文章大意
作者是一名 ESL 教師，發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)生 Pablo 閱讀不流利，建議他回家給媽媽大聲朗讀來練習(xí)，Pablo 卻哭訴媽媽無法做飯，因?yàn)閶寢屟捞垭y忍，只能臥床哭泣，父親沒錢給媽媽治牙，他還要獨(dú)自照顧六個(gè)月大的弟弟。作者決定幫忙，先給 Pablo 媽媽寫紙條詢問是否需要幫助，得到同意后，在朋友間打聽愿意免費(fèi)治療的牙醫(yī)，最后有朋友推薦了當(dāng)?shù)匾患覄傞_業(yè)的牙科診所，作者希望這家診所能提供幫助。
故事山分析
故事圍繞著 “幫助” 展開，以 Pablo 家庭的困境為沖突點(diǎn)，作者的行動(dòng)為故事發(fā)展脈絡(luò)，呈現(xiàn)出人與人之間的關(guān)懷與溫暖。Pablo 的困境是故事的 “坑”，作者的幫助是填 “坑” 的過程，結(jié)局很可能是媽媽的牙得到治療，困境得到解決，體現(xiàn)人性的美好。
伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
作者承諾幫忙：作者向 Pablo 承諾會(huì)盡力幫助他，這是故事發(fā)展的重要推動(dòng)點(diǎn)。在續(xù)寫中，作者積極尋找牙醫(yī)，踐行承諾，努力解決問題。
朋友推薦牙科診所：朋友推薦了當(dāng)?shù)貏傞_業(yè)的牙科診所，暗示這家診所可能會(huì)成為解決問題的關(guān)鍵。續(xù)寫中，作者前往這家診所溝通，推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展。
Pablo 媽媽接受幫助：媽媽接受了作者的幫助，這為后續(xù)的治療提供了可能。在續(xù)寫中，媽媽按照約定去見牙醫(yī)，使故事得以繼續(xù)。
作者不會(huì)說同一種語言：作者和 Pablo 媽媽語言不通，這可能會(huì)在幫助過程中產(chǎn)生困難。續(xù)寫中可以通過翻譯或者其他方式解決溝通問題，體現(xiàn)克服困難的過程。
作者無力支付費(fèi)用：作者自己無法支付治療費(fèi)用，所以只能尋求免費(fèi)治療的機(jī)會(huì)。在續(xù)寫中，這會(huì)促使作者努力說服牙醫(yī)提供免費(fèi)服務(wù)，成為故事的一個(gè)小沖突。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)
第一段：作者來到牙科診所，向接待員說明來意，可能會(huì)遇到一些質(zhì)疑或者需要詳細(xì)解釋情況，最終接待員將情況告知牙醫(yī)，牙醫(yī)給出初步回應(yīng)。
第二段：Pablo 媽媽按約定時(shí)間來見牙醫(yī)，牙醫(yī)進(jìn)行檢查后確定治療方案，開始治療。治療結(jié)束后，媽媽對作者和牙醫(yī)表達(dá)感激，作者也為能幫助到他們感到欣慰。
情感線
故事起始于 Pablo 的悲傷與無助，他為媽媽的痛苦而心碎，作者聽聞后充滿同情并堅(jiān)定要幫助他。在尋找?guī)椭倪^程中，作者帶著焦急與期待。當(dāng)來到牙科診所時(shí)，作者心懷忐忑，不知能否得到幫助。Pablo 媽媽來治療時(shí)，大家都帶著希望，治療成功后，滿是喜悅與感激，作者也收獲了助人的滿足。
故事線
Pablo 向作者哭訴媽媽的困境。
作者承諾幫助 Pablo 并給其媽媽寫紙條，得到同意。
作者在朋友間打聽免費(fèi)治療的牙醫(yī)，朋友推薦一家診所。
作者前往推薦的牙科診所溝通。
Pablo 媽媽按約定時(shí)間來見牙醫(yī)。
牙醫(yī)為媽媽治療，問題得到解決。
主旨升華句
A small act of kindness can light up the darkest corner of someone's life. 一個(gè)小小的善舉可以照亮一個(gè)人生命中最黑暗的角落。
In the face of difficulties, the power of human connection and compassion can overcome all obstacles. 在困難面前，人與人之間的聯(lián)系和同情心的力量可以克服一切障礙。
Kindness is not measured by the size of the deed but by the depth of the heart. 善良不是由行為的大小來衡量，而是由內(nèi)心的深度來衡量。
When we reach out a helping hand, we not only change others' lives but also enrich our own souls. 當(dāng)我們伸出援助之手時(shí)，我們不僅改變了別人的生活，也豐富了自己的靈魂。
The true beauty of humanity lies in our willingness to help those in need, no matter how great the challenge. 人性的真正美好在于我們愿意幫助那些有需要的人，無論挑戰(zhàn)有多大。
寫作示范一
Stopping by the dental office, I went to the reception desk. I explained the whole situation to the receptionist with great earnestness. She listened attentively, her eyes filled with sympathy. After a while, she went to consult the dentist. When she came back, she told me that the dentist was willing to have a look at Pablo's mother's tooth. I was overjoyed and immediately made an appointment for her.
Pablo's mother came to meet the dentist at the appointed time. The dentist examined her tooth carefully and then said that it was a complex case but he was confident he could fix it. With the help of a translator, the dentist explained the treatment plan to her. During the treatment, Pablo's mother was a bit nervous, but the dentist's gentle manner soon put her at ease. After the treatment, she smiled brightly and expressed her sincere gratitude to the dentist and me. I was so glad that I could make a difference in their lives.
寫作示范二
Stopping by the dental office, I went to the reception desk. I poured out the story of Pablo's family, hoping to touch their hearts. The receptionist seemed hesitant at first, but when I mentioned the poor child's situation, she softened. She said she would talk to the dentist right away. After a long wait, the dentist came out and agreed to offer free treatment, saying that he was moved by the story.
Pablo's mother came to meet the dentist at the appointed time. The dentist greeted her warmly and started the examination. It turned out that the tooth problem was indeed serious. But with professional skills and patience, the dentist managed to fix it. Pablo's mother couldn't stop thanking us. Looking at her relieved face, I knew that all my efforts were worth it.
參考答案
Stopping by the dental office, I went to the reception desk. After explaining the situation and showing them Pablo’s mother’s note, I anxiously awaited their response. To my relief, they agreed to help without charging any fees. Overjoyed, I quickly contacted Pablo's mother to inform her of the good news. She was so grateful that she couldn’t stop thanking me through her tears.
Pablo’s mother came to meet the dentist at the appointed time. The dentist examined her tooth and successfully treated it, alleviating her pain. As a token of appreciation, she prepared some delicious homemade cookies for me. When I shared the good news with Pablo, he was over the moon and hugged me tightly, expressing his gratitude in his broken English. Seeing their happiness, I felt a sense of fulfillment and pride in being able to make a difference in their lives.

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