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各檔次給分范圍及要求
第五檔（21-25分）
——?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融合度高。
——使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)，但完全不影響理解。
——有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，意義連貫。
第四檔（16-20分）
——?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融合度比較高。
——使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，可能有個(gè)別小錯(cuò)，但完全不影響理解。
——比較有效地使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，意義連貫。
第三檔（11-15分）
——?jiǎng)?chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)。
——使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有一些錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，但基本不影響理解。
——基本有效地使用了語句間的銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。
第二檔（6-10分）
——內(nèi)容和邏輯上有一些重大問題，續(xù)寫不夠完整，與原文有一定程度脫節(jié)。
——所使用的詞匯有限，語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤較多且比較低級(jí)，影響理解。
——未能有效地使用語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義欠連貫。
第一檔（1~5分）
——內(nèi)容和邏輯上有較多重大問題，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，續(xù)寫不完整，與原文情境基本脫節(jié)。
——所使用的詞匯非常有限，語法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤極多，嚴(yán)重影響理解。
——幾乎沒有使用語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰，意義不連貫。
1..閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Wayne Boone is a 53-year-old truck driver for a paper- recycling company in Suffolk, Virginia. Every day, he drives the empty 18- heel truck up Interstate 64 in Chesapeake toward Virginia Beach, about 50 kilometers away, where he will pick up his first load of the day. One morning in April, the strong winds gave Wayne Boone’s truck a good whipping (鞭打).
He planned to change into the left lane of the G. A. Treakle Memorial Bridge when the storm let loose its full force. Rain hammered Boone’s windshield. Winds grew fierce. As he was turning, Boone’s front wheels met the wet surface just as a powerful wind blew the driver’s side of his truck. It felt like the wind lifted the truck clear off the surface. His truck crashed into the guardrail (護(hù)欄) on the far right edge.
He struggled to regain control, but another wind, blowing more violently, pushed it upward from below, lifting the truck cab (駕駛艙), with Boone inside, over the edge of the bridge before dropping it again. If he felt any hope of survival before, it disappeared. The truck aimed straight down toward the grey-black water. In the end, Boone’s truck was hanging over the bridge, under 21 meters of which was a deep river.
Boone was badly injured, half blinded by the blood pouring into his eyes and suffering from shock. He forced himself to focus. If he had any chance of escaping the cab and surviving, he had to get out of his seatbelt. Gathering all his strength, he pulled himself between the seats and put himself back as far as he could behind the driver’s seat. He struggled to grab his mobile phone, but it was out of his reach. After he was hung in the wind for an hour, waiting to die, Boone was almost exhausted. Was he going to get out of here alive He had never panicked. He had accepted his fate (命運(yùn)). He was ready to go if that’s what was meant to be when he heard a noise was drawing nearer.
注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右;
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
A few minutes later, Boone heard the approaching sirens(汽笛).
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When the rescuer and Boone appeared on the bridge, people shouted with joy.
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參考答案：
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了53歲的韋恩·布恩是維吉尼亞州薩福克市一家廢紙回收公司的卡車司機(jī)。某天在工作時(shí)他遇到了風(fēng)暴，他的卡車撞上了最右邊邊緣的護(hù)欄，布恩的卡車懸在橋上，橋下21米是一條很深的河。布恩受了重傷，最后被救援人員救起送到了醫(yī)院。
A few minutes later, Boone heard the approaching sirens(汽笛). To him, the noisy sound could have been angels singing. Hope finally flooded through him as a rescuer came down with a rope. He sighed in relief when the rescuer gave him step - by - step instructions for getting out of the window while attempting to stay as stable as possible in the storm. After getting a rope around Boone, the rescuer pulled him out through the window and fully into the wild weather, and then signaled to be pulled up to a safe place.
When the rescuer and Boone appeared on the bridge, people shouted with joy. Back on the bridge, Boone was delivered to safety and then rushed to the nearest hospital. People on the bridge all spoke highly of the rescuer’s bravery and selflessness. Exhausted as he was on his way to the hospital, Boone was full of gratitude. Without the rescuer’s timely help, he could have been dead! He whispered in his heart for many times, “Thank you!” And only then did he realize that accident is merciless while humans aren’t!
2.閱讀下列材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
In the serene morning, our school campus lay bathed in a gentle glow of sunlight. The air was still, with only the occasional chatter of students and the rustle of books breaking the silence. The classrooms were abuzz with activity as students diligently worked on their assignments, their faces lit by the soft light filtering through the windows.
But suddenly, the tranquility was shattered by a violent earthquake. The ground began to shake, sending a shudder through the entire school. The seismic waves were so powerful that they sent a shiver down the spines of every student. Amidst the chaos, a girl named Alice, a fellow member of our class, panicked and fled the classroom in a flash. Her flight was a stark contrast to the complacency of the rest of us who remained seated, unmoved by the rumbling beneath our feet. Yet, as we sat unperturbed, students from other classes streamed out of their classrooms in a panic, their faces etched with fear. The corridor outside our classroom soon filled with the hustle and bustle of fleeing students, their footsteps echoing loudly in the otherwise silent morning.
Suddenly, the school's broadcast system came to life, its voice echoing through the hallways, instructing everyone to evacuate and gather in the designated area. However, it was soon revealed that this was a mistake, a miscue from the broadcast station that had sent our hearts racing even further. With the all-clear signal, we returned to our seats, trying to regain our composure. The teacher, a pillar of calm in the midst of the commotion, resumed the lesson as if nothing had happened, her voice a soothing balm to our frayed nerves.
注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2 .請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Para1: Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first.
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Para2: Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out.
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Meanwhile, the ground shook violently once again, this aftershock stronger than the first. Without hesitation, everyone bolted out of the classroom, our hearts pounding as we ran through the swaying hallways. Reaching the open ground, we gasped for air, relief flooding through us as we realized we were safe. Alice, who had fled earlier, was now helping to calm those around her, her face still pale but her voice steady.
Yet, as we began to regain our composure, we realized that Bob had not made it out. Bob, a quiet classmate, was nowhere to be seen. Without hesitation, our teacher rallied us. "We need to go back!" she shouted, her eyes flashing with determination. Hearts in our mouths, we followed her back into the shaking building. The corridor was a mess, debris littering the floor, but we pressed on, calling Bob's name. Finally, we found him trapped under a fallen bookshelf. Working quickly and carefully, we lifted the shelf and freed him. Grateful and relieved, Bob stumbled out with us, and together, we escaped the wreckage, our bonds of friendship and solidarity stronger than ever.
【導(dǎo)語】本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求考生給英國朋友Chris寫封郵件，和他分享上周五你們班組織的“共讀一本書” (Reading A Book Together) 的閱讀分享活動(dòng)。
【詳解】1.詞匯積累 熱情：passion→enthusiasm引人入勝的：engaging→intriguing復(fù)雜的：complex→tanglesome
機(jī)會(huì)：chance→opportunity
3.閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Ava, a fifth-grader, longed for a cell phone like her peers but had to wait until she was thirteen. To persuade her parents, she penned an essay, demonstrating she was mature enough for a cell phone. Her parents, impressed, gave her an old phone.
“Ava,” her dad said seriously, “a cell phone isn’t just for fun and games. It’s a significant responsibility. You must keep your phone secure. You must silence it in public spaces. You must...” He listed all of the ways that she had to be responsible with her phone. But Ava, too busy with choosing the perfect wallpaper, downloading apps, and chatting with her best friend Sarah, only half-listened.
Over the weekend, Sarah’s mom took the girls to a movie. Normally Ava avoided horror films, but Sarah’s pleading words with funny memes (表情包) had somehow convinced Ava that the movie might actually be enjoyable. Before the movie started, Sarah’s mom instructed the girls to silence their phones out of respect for others. As the movie’s tension built, Ava found herself growing increasingly uncomfortable. “I need to go to the bathroom,” Ava whispered to Sarah.
After the movie, while waiting for Sarah’s mom to fetch the car, Ava felt a sinking feeling. “I can’t find my phone!” she shrieked, patting down all of her pockets. Panic-stricken, Ava searched her bag, yet her phone seemed to have vanished. Ava got into the car, her stomach in knots.
“Are you going to tell your parents ” Sarah whispered to Ava on their ride back. Ava was silent, her mind racing with the consequences. She could envision her parents’ disappointed faces and harsh words. She feared that this incident might lead to her parents taking away the privilege of having a phone altogether.
As they arrived, Ava climbed out of the car and trudged home, her heart heavy with what had happened.
注意:
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150 個(gè)左右;
2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with a smile. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【解析】
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了五年級(jí)學(xué)生Ava渴望擁有一部手機(jī)，并在十三歲時(shí)終于得到了父母的許可。然而，她在初次使用手機(jī)時(shí)并未充分聽取父親的告誡，導(dǎo)致在一次外出看電影時(shí)遺失了手機(jī)。Ava非常害怕父母會(huì)因此對(duì)她失望并收回使用手機(jī)的特權(quán)，因此她在回家的路上心情沉重。
The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with a smile. She knew she had to tell them about the lost phone, but words stuck in her throat. Recalling the trust they had put in her with the phone, Ava felt a pang of distress as she prepared to confess. “I…I’ve lost my phone.” she murmured, her voice barely above a whisper. Her father’s brow furrowed. “Did it perhaps fall from your pocket during the movie Or could it have… ” Her mother inquired anxiously. When Ava admitted that, in her panic, she had forgotten to go back and search properly or ask for help, her parents exchanged a silent glance. “Accidents happen.” Her father assured her. “We’ll figure this out together.”
Then her parents drove her back to the cinema. They went to the reception desk and asked the cinema staff for help. It turned out that someone had turned the phone in to the front desk. They took the phone back. With a voice choked by emotion, Ava apologized to her father, “I know I messed up, Dad.” Placing a hand on her shoulder, her father told Ava that maturity wasn’t just about having a phone or not, but about how she handled situations, especially when they went wrong. “It comes along with a sense of responsibility. Remember to be responsible for your phone!” Her mother added, putting the phone back into Ava’s hand. As she held the device, she felt the familiar weight, a weight more significant than before.

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