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湖北高中名校聯盟 25 屆高三第三次聯合測評讀后續寫分析
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Ally and I first met at a local riding club, where we were both eager beginners, learning the basics of horseback riding. Our friendship quickly developed as we discovered our shared passion for horses and the excitement of riding a horse across open fields. We spent countless hours together, talking about everything under the sun as we watched the horses playing happily and lively.
Ally was very passionate about riding, and it was a joy to share that enthusiasm with her. However, being someone who set high standards for myself and those I cared about, I sometimes found myself pushing her to improve her skills, even if it meant being a bit demanding.
One sunny afternoon, during a particularly challenging riding exercise, I suggested a technique that involved a tight turn and a quick jump over a low fence.
"That's too risky," Ally protested, biting her lips inconcern.“I'm not ready for that yet.”
"Come on, Ally," I urged, tapping my foot impatiently. "You've got to push yourself if you want to get better.”
Our voices rose, and soon we were locked in a heated discussion, and even our horses sensed the tension and becamne restless. Finally, we both accepted that we had different points of view and decided to leave it at that. But the leftover tension caused a slight but noticeable gap between us.
One evening after that argument, as I was helping my parents close up the store, my phone rang. It was Ally. I picked up the phone, my heart still heavy from our earlier disagreement.
“Hey,”she began, her voice full of hope. "I was thinking we could try that technique again. I feel like I'm ready now."
I shook my head even though she couldn't see me. "I don't think that's a good idea," I replied, my tone firm.
She paused, and I could almost hear her disappointment. “Okay," she said softly. "I'll see you then.”注意：
1．續寫詞數應為150左右；
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
The next afternoon, I received a call from Ally's mother.
I rushed to the hospital and found Ally with a cast（石膏）on her leg.
文章主題
文章圍繞朋友之間因騎馬技巧產生分歧展開，主題是關于友誼中的矛盾、理解與成長，強調在友誼里尊重彼此選擇以及良好溝通的重要性。
人物性格
“我”：對自己和在乎的人要求高，追求進步，有時會顯得有些強勢、急躁，比如在騎馬練習中急于讓 Ally 提升技能，態度強硬地勸說她嘗試高難度動作。但在得知 Ally 受傷后，能意識到自己的錯誤，懂得反思，內心善良且珍視友誼。
Ally：起初比較謹慎，對自己的能力有清晰認知，拒絕嘗試高難度的騎馬技巧。但后來因為爭吵又有些沖動，獨自嘗試了該技巧，導致受傷。
續寫思路
Para1：接到 Ally 母親電話得知她出事，兩人對話，重點描寫 “我” 的心理活動，像震驚、自責、悔恨等情緒，突出內心的煎熬，為后面去醫院的情節做鋪墊。
Para2：見到受傷的 Ally，兩人坦誠交流，表達歉意。著重描寫兩人的對話和神態動作，展現彼此的懊悔，最終和解并升華主題，強調友誼里相互理解和溝通的重要，讓故事有一個溫暖且積極的結局。
學生誤區
1. 第一段中Ally媽媽電話沒有提及女兒受傷，而是關于其他話題，比如問“我”為什么沒有和Ally一起去騎馬。這樣寫的同學后續都編了第二個情節來銜接下一段，比如Ally媽媽再次打電話描述Ally騎馬受傷，因為篇幅有限，所以一筆帶過了這部分最重要的內容；
2. 第一段中Ally媽媽打電話責備Ally為什么和自己的女兒爭執，導致女兒受傷，并說出很多傷人的話，這是不符合上文描述的，文章沒有鋪墊過媽媽的這種不講道理推脫責任的性格，并且，這么做也是不合適的（畢竟女兒自己嘗試危險動作而導致受傷，不能將責任都推到女兒朋友身上），這里媽媽打電話是因為知道我們是好朋友，所以告知一下情況，而非興師問罪；
3. 第二段結尾不會總結，認為文章講述的是友情的重要性，套用了很多和友情相關的句式，沒有明白文章探討的其實是如何建立健康且牢固的友誼——相互尊重與理解。
作文范文
The next afternoon, I received a call from Ally’s mother. Her voice was trembling as she told me that Ally had been in an accident while riding. “She tried that technique you mentioned,” she said quietly. “ She fell and broke her leg. ” On hearing this, I felt a wave of guilt washing over me. “ I’m so sorry to hear that,” I stammered, my voice cracking. “ I never meant for her to get hurt. ” I realized I should have been more supportive and patient, understanding that everyone has their own pace in learning. This realization weighed heavily on me, and I knew I needed to make up for it.
I rushed to the hospital and found Ally with a cast on her leg. As I sat beside her, I apologized sincerely for my behavior. “I’m so sorry, Ally,” I said, tears welling up in my eyes. “I should never have pushed you so hard. Your safety is more important than any riding achievement. ” Ally smiled weakly, forgiving me with a reassuring look. We chatted joyfully, talking about the importance of listening to each other and respecting our limits. From that moment, I promised to be a better friend, one who supports and encourages her without being overly demanding. Our friendship, though tested, became stronger through mutual understanding and forgiveness.

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