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A Sweet Song
“Nothing will ever be the same again,” Ally whispered. She sank slowly into her father’s favorite chair and stared at the small American flag on his desk. It was the flag which Chief Russell had given to her after the funeral last summer, when he hugged her and told her how proud the Police Department was of her dad’s work for them. His tears had warmed Ally’s cheeks; her own tears were still frozen inside her heart.
Ally looked at her father’s picture on the bookcase. Dad was sitting in the middle of a stream, wet through but grinning proudly. “I miss you, Dad,” she said softly. By this time last year she had already taken dozens of pictures. Ever since she could remember, she and Dad had been a team, searching the woods behind the house each weekend for a glimpse of the special wood warbler (林中鶯).
Ally reached for the first photo album she and Dad had put together. On the cover a tiny orange bird with blue-gray wings and sharp black eyes peered out of the photo her father had clipped from a local newspaper. Ally smiled, remembering the excited look on his face when he first showed her the pretty bird. “Ally, I bet if we search real hard, we’ll see this little guy together some day.”
They’d never spotted the warbler, but her father had an amazing way of making each outing seem special. Staying with Dad, Ally felt comfortable. “If only I could get that good feeling back,” she thought, sighing.
Staring at the bird, suddenly, she knew exactly what she had to do. Grabbing the-little flag, she placed her camera around her neck and hurried outside. Ally stuck the flag among the flowers in the garden. “Please let me see the warbler,” she murmured to herself. She gave her worried Mom a kiss and then set off into the woods.
注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Familiar smells of the earth rose up to greet her. ________________________________________________
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Determined to start out the next morning, she was about to head home when a ringing birdsong floated down to her. _______________________________________________________________________________________
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A Sweet Song故事續(xù)寫
續(xù)寫要點
第一段：著重描寫 Ally 在樹林中的感受，可回憶與父親相處的過往，如在溪邊的嬉戲、在樹林里的探索等，突出她對父親的思念以及此刻獨自尋找的復(fù)雜心情。同時描述樹林里的景色，如樹葉的沙沙聲、陽光透過樹葉的光斑等，營造氛圍。
第二段：當(dāng)聽到鳥鳴后，Ally 的反應(yīng)應(yīng)是驚喜與緊張交織。詳細(xì)描寫她看到林中鶯時的樣子，如鳥兒的姿態(tài)、羽毛的色澤等。最后以 Ally 的感悟收尾，升華主題，表達(dá)她對父親的情感以及從這次經(jīng)歷中獲得的力量。
情感線
Ally 從最初對父親離世的深深悲痛，內(nèi)心的淚水 “凍結(jié)”，到踏入樹林后對過往與父親相處美好時光的懷念，孤獨感與思念交織。在聽到鳥鳴發(fā)現(xiàn)林中鶯的那一刻，驚喜與激動涌上心頭，最終她收獲了溫暖與力量，內(nèi)心的悲傷得到了些許慰藉，情感從低沉壓抑逐漸轉(zhuǎn)向積極溫暖。
故事線
Ally 帶著小旗和相機進(jìn)入樹林，熟悉的泥土氣息撲面而來，回憶如潮水般涌來，她想起與父親在樹林里的點點滴滴。
Ally 沿著曾經(jīng)和父親走過的路前行，來到溪邊，坐在熟悉的石頭上，感受著微風(fēng)，仿佛聽到父親的笑聲。
天色漸晚，正當(dāng) Ally 準(zhǔn)備放棄，打算第二天再來時，突然聽到清脆的鳥鳴聲。
Ally 循聲望去，發(fā)現(xiàn)了夢寐以求的林中鶯，它停在樹枝上，姿態(tài)優(yōu)美。
Ally 小心翼翼地舉起相機，拍下了這珍貴的一刻，內(nèi)心充滿喜悅。
Ally 帶著照片回家，向母親分享喜悅，同時也在心中默默告訴父親，她做到了。
主旨升華句
Through this encounter with the warbler, Ally realized that her father's love was like a warm current, always flowing in her heart, giving her the courage to move forward.（通過與林中鶯的這次相遇，Ally 意識到父親的愛就像一股暖流，始終流淌在她心中，給予她前行的勇氣。）
The sight of the warbler not only fulfilled her dream but also healed her wounded heart, making her understand that love never fades away.（看到林中鶯不僅實現(xiàn)了她的夢想，還治愈了她受傷的心，讓她明白愛永不消逝。）
As Ally held the camera with the precious photo, she knew that her father's spirit was always with her, guiding her through life's journey.（當(dāng) Ally 拿著帶有珍貴照片的相機時，她知道父親的精神一直陪伴著她，引領(lǐng)她走過人生的旅程。）
This experience in the woods taught Ally that even in the face of loss, there is always hope, just like the unexpected appearance of the warbler.（這次在樹林中的經(jīng)歷讓 Ally 明白，即使面對失去，也總有希望，就像林中鶯的意外出現(xiàn)。）
The sweet song of the warbler was a gift from her father in a way, reminding Ally that life is full of beautiful surprises if we keep our hearts open.（林中鶯的甜美歌聲在某種程度上是父親給她的禮物，提醒 Ally 如果我們敞開心扉，生活充滿了美麗的驚喜。）
寫作示范一
Familiar smells of the earth rose up to greet her. Memories of her father flooded her mind as she walked deeper into the woods. The path they used to take together seemed both familiar and strange. The sunlight filtered through the leaves, creating dappled patterns on the ground. She remembered how her father would point out different plants and teach her about nature. As she reached the small clearing by the stream, she sat down on a rock, just like they used to do. The sound of the flowing water was soothing, but a sense of loneliness lingered. She kept looking around, hoping to spot the warbler, her eyes scanning every tree branch.
Determined to start out the next morning, she was about to head home when a ringing birdsong floated down to her. Her heart skipped a beat. She looked up quickly, and there, on a low - hanging branch, was the wood warbler. Its orange feathers glistened in the fading light, and its little body seemed to dance with the rhythm of its song. Ally held her breath, afraid to scare it away. With shaking hands, she slowly raised her camera and took a picture. A tear rolled down her cheek, but this time, it was a tear of joy. She knew that her father was watching over her, and this moment was a precious gift.
寫作示范二
Familiar smells of the earth rose up to greet her. The moment Ally stepped into the woods, she was surrounded by the scents of damp soil and fresh leaves. It was as if the woods were welcoming her back. She could almost feel her father's presence beside her, just like in the old days. As she walked along, she recalled the times when her father would encourage her to be brave during their hikes. The trees seemed to whisper stories of their adventures. She reached the spot where they always stopped to rest, and a wave of sadness hit her. But she was determined to find the warbler, for herself and for her father.
Determined to start out the next morning, she was about to head home when a ringing birdsong floated down to her. Her eyes widened in excitement. She searched the trees, and finally, she saw it - the wood warbler. It fluttered its blue - gray wings and chirped merrily. Ally was overjoyed. She captured the moment with her camera, and a sense of peace filled her. She realized that although her father was gone, the memories and their shared dreams would always be with her. The warbler was a symbol of hope, and she knew that her father would be proud of her.
參考答案
Paragraph 1:
Familiar smells of the earth rose up to greet her.Some things never change, Ally thought. Quickening her pace, she hurried to the rock by the stream where she and her father used to sit and eat lunch. She sat on it, with her face toward the sun. Overhead the sky was filled with birds busily diving to gather dried grass to place in their nests. Their sweet songs echoed throughout the woods. Ally felt content for the first time in a long while. She could almost hear her father’s laughter in the gentle breeze as she listened for the sweet song of the special bird. All too soon, the sun disappeared behind thick gray clouds.
Paragraph 2:
Determined to start out again the next morning, she was about to head home when a ringing birdsong floated down to her.It was prettier than any she had heard before. An excited feeling bubbled up inside Ally as she searched the sky. A flash of orange dashed down and rested on a nearby branch. For a moment Ally couldn’t believe her eyes, but it was true. The tiny wood warbler just sat there, looking around, as if it were waiting for something. Ally blinked back tears. “Thanks, Dad,” she whispered slowly lifting her camera and taking careful aim.“Things will be different without you. I’ll always miss our time together, but I feel better now.”

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