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From my memory, my father was a man of few words and we were never close to each other. Before he joined the army, he built a house with his own hands. When he was tragically killed in one battle, the house became mine. As the house aged, it became a relic of the past, and we moved away, carrying with me the echoes of his silent presence.
One day, someone called, saying that he wanted to buy that house. I said yes.
Before we reached a deal, I thought it a must to check out the old shack (小屋) first, just in case something of value had been left behind. My two young sons followed along, and we waded through the tall grass in the mead ow where the old house sat. Time had taken its toll. The front porch had collapsed in on itself, most of the windows were gone, and the siding was falling off. We entered through an open window.
I felt as though I had chanced upon a time capsule (膠囊). Here lay the things of my dad’s lives. A broken chair. Some old clothes. But the thing that drew my eye was acardboard box stuffed with papers. I dug through its contents and was instantly transported back in time. There was a tax return from 1975. Greeting cards from old relatives and friends.
I spent most of a pleasant hour going through that box. All the while, I had to answer a stream of questions from my sons about the old house. They were amazed that nine people once occupied the tiny structure. And they shivered when I told them that in those days the cook stove was the only source of heat.
There’s nothing of value had been left, I confirmed. So we came back. The house once again enjoyed the lonely solitude of our meadow.
Then the paying day came. For no reason, maybe some reason, I came to that old house to say goodbye to something.
注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卷的相應(yīng)位置作答。
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROMARMY” on it.
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I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer.
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文章大意
“我” 的父親生前親手建造了一座房子，他在戰(zhàn)爭中不幸犧牲后，房子歸 “我” 所有。隨著時(shí)間推移，房子逐漸破敗，成為過去的遺跡，“我” 一家也搬離了這里。某天，有人想買這座房子，“我” 答應(yīng)了。在交易前，“我” 帶著兩個(gè)兒子去舊屋查看，以防有貴重物品遺留。在舊屋中，“我” 發(fā)現(xiàn)了裝滿父親生活物品的紙板箱，里面有舊的納稅申報(bào)單、賀卡等，勾起了許多回憶。確認(rèn)沒有貴重物品后，我們離開，房子繼續(xù)孤獨(dú)地留在草地上。到了交易付款那天，“我” 又來到舊屋告別。
故事山分析
開端：父親犧牲后，他建造的房子歸 “我”，隨著時(shí)間流逝房子破敗，“我” 一家搬離，如今有人想買這座房子。
發(fā)展：“我” 帶兒子去舊屋查看，發(fā)現(xiàn)裝滿父親物品的紙箱，回憶往昔，確認(rèn)無貴重物品后離開。
高潮：在交易付款日，“我” 再次來到舊屋，發(fā)現(xiàn)了標(biāo)有 “FROM ARMY” 的黃色信封，信封里的內(nèi)容可能會(huì)引發(fā)重大轉(zhuǎn)折。
結(jié)局：“我” 根據(jù)信封里的內(nèi)容做出決定，可能會(huì)改變房子的交易，也可能會(huì)對(duì)父親的形象和自己的情感有新的認(rèn)知。
五處伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應(yīng)
伏筆：父親曾參軍。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫中 “FROM ARMY” 的信封可能與父親的軍旅生涯有關(guān)，信封里也許是父親在軍隊(duì)的經(jīng)歷記錄、榮譽(yù)證明等，讓 “我” 對(duì)父親有更深入的了解。
伏筆：房子承載著父親的回憶，“我” 對(duì)父親雖感情不深但也有一些回憶。回應(yīng)：在看到信封內(nèi)容后，“我” 可能會(huì)重新審視父親，對(duì)他的感情發(fā)生變化，決定不賣掉房子，讓這份回憶得以保留。
伏筆：“我” 在舊屋中看到父親的物品，回憶起過去。回應(yīng)：信封里的內(nèi)容可能會(huì)進(jìn)一步加深這種回憶，讓 “我” 想起更多與父親相關(guān)的細(xì)節(jié)，從而影響對(duì)房子的處理決定。
伏筆：“我” 在交易付款日又來到舊屋告別。回應(yīng)：這暗示了 “我” 內(nèi)心對(duì)房子有不舍之情，信封的出現(xiàn)會(huì)強(qiáng)化這種情感，促使 “我” 改變交易想法。
伏筆：兒子們對(duì)舊屋充滿好奇，詢問很多問題。回應(yīng)：“我” 可能會(huì)因?yàn)樾欧饫锏膬?nèi)容，將父親的故事講給兒子們聽，讓這份回憶傳承下去，也影響了房子的命運(yùn)。
續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)（兩段）
第一段：詳細(xì)描寫 “我” 看到黃色信封時(shí)的反應(yīng)，如內(nèi)心的驚訝、好奇，描述信封的外觀，猜測里面的內(nèi)容。打開信封后，描述看到的具體物品，以及這些物品給自己帶來的情感沖擊，比如是父親的立功證書、戰(zhàn)友的信件等。
第二段：描寫 “我” 看完信封內(nèi)容后的決定，打電話給買家的過程，以及在電話里對(duì)買家說的話，解釋自己改變主意不賣房子的原因，突出信封內(nèi)容對(duì)自己的影響以及對(duì)父親回憶的珍視。
情感線
起初 “我” 對(duì)父親感情不深，對(duì)舊屋也只是當(dāng)作一個(gè)待售的物品。在舊屋查看時(shí)，看到父親的物品，回憶起一些往事，內(nèi)心有了一些觸動(dòng)。看到 “FROM ARMY” 的信封并打開后，情感發(fā)生巨大轉(zhuǎn)變，可能是對(duì)父親的敬佩、懷念之情油然而生，對(duì)舊屋的情感也從可有可無變?yōu)闊o比珍視。最后決定不賣掉房子，情感得到升華，更加珍惜這份回憶和傳承。
故事線
父親犧牲后，他建造的房子歸 “我”，房子破敗，“我” 一家搬離，有人想買房子。
“我” 帶兒子去舊屋查看，發(fā)現(xiàn)父親的物品，回憶往昔，確認(rèn)無貴重物品后離開。
交易付款日，“我” 來到舊屋告別，發(fā)現(xiàn) “FROM ARMY” 的黃色信封。
打開信封，看到里面與父親軍旅生涯相關(guān)的物品，情感受到?jīng)_擊。
“我” 決定不賣掉房子，打電話給買家說明原因。
“我” 保留房子，傳承父親的回憶。
主旨升華句（5 句英文）
Sometimes, the most precious inheritance from our loved ones is not material wealth, but the stories and memories that connect us to our past and shape our present.
Through the discovery of a simple envelope, we can unlock a world of understanding and love for those who have left us, realizing that their influence lingers on in the most unexpected ways.
The house, once a mere structure, becomes a shrine of memories, and the envelope a key to a deeper connection with our father, teaching us the value of family heritage.
In the journey of life, we may overlook the significance of our ancestors' legacies, but a single discovery can open our eyes to the profound impact they have had on our lives.
The power of a father's unspoken stories, hidden in an old envelope, can transform our perception of him and inspire us to preserve the memories that bind our family together through the generations.
寫作示范一
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROM ARMY” on it. My heart skipped a beat. With trembling hands, I reached for it. The envelope was a bit tattered, as if it had endured the test of time. I carefully opened it. Inside were a few letters and a medal. The letters were from my father's comrades, telling stories of his bravery in battles. The medal, a symbol of his honor, shone faintly in the dim light. I was stunned, tears welling up in my eyes. I had never known this side of my father.
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer. “I'm sorry,” I said, my voice firm yet a bit choked. “I can't sell the house. I just discovered something that means the world to me. This house is not just a building; it's a part of my family's history, my father's legacy. I hope you can understand.” After a moment of silence, the buyer said he could relate. I hung up, feeling a sense of relief and a newfound connection to my father. I decided to renovate the house, to preserve the memories and pass them down to my sons.
寫作示范二
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROM ARMY” on it. Curiosity got the better of me. I ripped open the envelope impatiently. There were photos of my father in his military uniform, looking young and determined. Along with the photos were some notes about his missions. I stared at the pictures, my mind racing. All these years, I had underestimated my father's courage and sacrifice.
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer. “I've changed my mind,” I told him. “I've found something here that makes me realize the importance of this house. It holds my father's memories, his most precious moments. I want to keep it for my family.” The buyer was understanding. I put down the phone, feeling a weight lifted off my shoulders. I knew that from now on, the old house would be a place of remembrance, a place where my sons could learn about their grandfather's heroic deeds and our family's history.
【答案】Possible version:
As I stood in the house, my eye was drawn to a big yellowed envelope with two words “FROMARMY” on it. Driven by a heartstring tremor, I opened it to find a letter from my father during his military days. His familiar handwriting depicted him as talkative and homesick, which contrasted with my memory of him. Realizing he missed me as much, I silently resolved to keep it, as the house gained new significance.
I pulled out my telephone and made a call to that buyer. With guilt, I expressed my sorry for not willing to sell the house anymore and made explanations. Fortunately, he kindly understood, mentioning the house’s charm and hope for reliving the past. Gratefully, I hung up and placed back the yellow letter that changed everything. Sunlight revealed the house’s history and memories; my father’s presence warmed my heart, prompting me to bring my sons here to share family stories and assure them their grandpa lives on.

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