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Our group had stopped to remove our boots before a small stream crossing after a morning of exploring the seaside foothills of Canada’s Torngat Mountains National Park in Newfoundland and Labrador. I looked up and there it was, about 150 yards away, staring at us: a polar bear. Our guides had warned us about the dangers of polar bear country, but I thought I’d be lucky if I saw one in the wild.
I’ve seen plenty of black bears, but never anything this big. This guy was a bruiser. We gathered together and began shouting at the bear, but when that didn’t frighten it, our guide, Rich, shot a flare(照明彈). The bear escaped to a ledge, and we crossed the stream into camp. It stayed there as we cooked and ate our dinner. When bedtime rolled around, I glanced up. The bear hadn’t moved. I started cycling through all the worst- case scenarios that could hap- pen, but I tried to remember everything we’d prepared to keep us safe.
Our guides had put up an electric fence meant to frighten bears away from our tents. It ran off a couple of batteries like you would put in a flashlight. The outfitter said if we touched it, the shock would blow us out of our hiking boots. I crawled into my tent and tried to get some rest.
I lay awake, trembling with anxiety, but eventually, sleep got the best of me. A few hours later, I stepped out of my tent to go to the bathroom, and the bear was gone. I felt relieved.
The sounds of rain and snow made me back to sleep. Around 2:30 a. m., movement outside woke me. I had been sleeping on my back and looked up to see a shadow towering over my tent. I recognized the shape immediately; two big bear legs, Obviously, the electric fence didn’t work.
I screamed, and tried to take flight.
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Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had about off a flare.
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文章大意
作者一行人在加拿大的托爾加特山國家公園海濱山麓探險，過河前看到一只北極熊。他們呼喊、發(fā)射照明彈將其驅離，之后在營地做飯、休息，營地設有電圍欄防熊。作者入睡后，半夜起來上廁所發(fā)現熊不見了，可凌晨 2 點半，一只北極熊出現在作者帳篷外，電圍欄失效。
故事山分析
開端：作者一行在探險途中遇到北極熊，采取措施驅趕。
發(fā)展：在營地做飯、休息，依靠電圍欄防范北極熊，作者入睡。
高潮：半夜北極熊出現在作者帳篷外，電圍欄失效，作者尖叫，此時故事發(fā)展到最緊張的時刻，后續(xù)如何應對是高潮部分。
結局：作者等人成功擺脫北極熊，對這次經歷有深刻感悟，重新審視探險的意義與自身的勇氣。
五處伏筆以及在續(xù)寫中的回應
伏筆：導游警告過北極熊的危險，作者看到熊后感到幸運又緊張。回應：為后續(xù)熊的出現以及作者的恐懼反應做鋪墊，當熊出現在帳篷外，作者的恐懼達到頂點。
伏筆：用電圍欄防范北極熊，稱其能將人電出靴子。回應：電圍欄失效，北極熊靠近帳篷，形成強烈反差，增加故事緊張感，也推動情節(jié)發(fā)展，促使作者等人采取其他應對措施。
伏筆：作者看到熊后開始設想最壞的情況。回應：熊出現在帳篷外時，作者的設想似乎要成真，進一步渲染緊張氛圍，同時凸顯作者的恐懼心理。
伏筆：作者入睡后半夜起來上廁所看到熊消失。回應：熊的再次出現出乎作者意料，與之前消失形成對比，使故事更具戲劇性。
伏筆：作者入睡時帶著焦慮，輾轉反側。回應：這種焦慮情緒延續(xù)到熊出現時，加劇作者的恐懼，使其反應更強烈。
續(xù)寫要點（兩段）
第一段：詳細描述作者尖叫試圖逃跑時的情景，如身體的反應（雙腿發(fā)軟、心跳加速），心理活動（極度恐懼，后悔參加探險），帳篷內的狀況（被自己的動作弄亂），北極熊的反應（是否有進一步靠近的動作，發(fā)出的聲音）。
第二段：描寫照明彈發(fā)射后的場景，如照明彈的亮光、聲音，北極熊的反應（被驚嚇后逃竄的方向、動作），作者的感受（從極度恐懼到逐漸放松），以及之后大家的反應（是否都被驚醒，相互交流情況）。
情感線
起初作者看到北極熊緊張又興奮，之后在營地休息時焦慮，半夜發(fā)現熊消失短暫放松，熊再次出現時極度恐懼，照明彈發(fā)射后逐漸放松，最后對這次經歷心有余悸又有新的感悟。
故事線
作者一行探險途中遇到北極熊，采取措施驅趕。
在營地設電圍欄，作者入睡。
作者半夜上廁所發(fā)現熊消失。
凌晨 2 點半北極熊出現在作者帳篷外，電圍欄失效。
作者尖叫試圖逃跑。
照明彈發(fā)射，驅趕北極熊，作者等人應對。
主旨升華句（5 句英文）
This encounter with the polar bear taught us that in the face of nature's might, our courage and the presence of mind can be our greatest defenses.
The experience in the wild reminds us that even the most carefully laid plans can go awry, and it's our ability to adapt and react that determines our safety.
Through this terrifying encounter, we learned that fear can be a powerful motivator, but it's how we overcome it that defines our true strength.
The polar bear incident shows that nature is both beautiful and dangerous, and our respect for it should never waver, even in the face of unexpected challenges.
This adventure in the polar bear's territory taught us that sometimes, the most unforgettable experiences are the ones that push us to the edge of our comfort zones and force us to grow.
寫作示范一
I screamed, and tried to take flight. My heart was pounding so hard that I could hear it in my ears. My legs felt like jelly, and I stumbled over my sleeping bag in my haste to get away. The bear let out a low growl, and I could see its massive body shifting in the dim light. I was terrified, thinking that this could be the end. I cursed myself for ever coming on this trip. My tent was in chaos, with my belongings strewn everywhere as I desperately tried to find a way out.
Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had let off a flare. The bright light filled the area, momentarily blinding me. The bear, startled by the sudden light and noise, reared up on its hind legs and let out a loud roar. It then turned and bounded away into the darkness. I let out a long, shaky breath, my body still trembling. The rest of the camp woke up, and we all gathered together, sharing our relief and recounting the terrifying moment. I realized that although the experience was terrifying, it had also taught me the importance of being prepared and the power of hope in the face of danger.
寫作示范二
I screamed, and tried to take flight. Panic surged through my veins as I fumbled with the zipper of my tent. My hands were shaking so much that it seemed impossible to open it. The bear seemed to be getting closer, its heavy breathing audible. I was frozen in fear, my mind racing with thoughts of what might happen next. The tent walls felt like they were closing in on me, and I was desperate to escape. I could feel the adrenaline coursing through my body, but my fear was paralyzing me.
Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had let off a flare. The flare shot up into the sky, painting the night with a brilliant red light. The bear was startled by the sudden brightness and noise. It backed away a few steps, its eyes wide with surprise. I watched as it turned and ran away, its large body disappearing into the shadows. I slumped to the ground, exhausted and relieved. The other members of the group rushed over to check on me. We talked about what had just happened, and I realized that this experience had changed me. It had made me more aware of the power of nature and the importance of being cautious in the wild.
【答案】One possible version:
I screamed, and tried to take flight. But there was no way out and the extreme terror made me rooted to the ground. The creature crashed down on top of me and started clawing at me through the fabric. I covered my head with my hands as its massive teeth reached for my face. Next thing I knew, my head was in its jaws. The bear started running, dragging my helpless body away from our campsite. I could feel the bones cracking where the bear was biting my neck. My fear gave way to desperation.
Then, I heard a swoosh Rich had shot off a flare. The bear dropped me and withdrew about 50 yards away. I tried to get up, but I was too broken to move. And the danger wasn’t gone: the bear was inching closer. Rich shot another flare, and this time, it was scared away. My trip-mates carried me back to camp and gave me simple treatment. I could hear someone trying to call for help on a satellite phone and a helicopter was on the way. Despite the pain, relief washed over me. I was alive and that’s what mattered most. What a thrilling experience!

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