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湖南省長沙市2024-2025學年高三下學期月考（六）英語試題
47.閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
I stood in the restaurant kitchen, my eyes wide, arms hanging awkwardly, ready to work but unsure of what to do. “You will be trained first,” my manager Aaron said, “and do remember to check every detail!” With these words, he walked away.
A workmate threw me a dish brush and said, “Let’s get started.” He introduced me to the basics of washing dishes and demonstrated the process. This was the beginning of my part-time job, a new stage where I was both eager to learn and anxious about the challenges ahead.
On a Friday night, Aaron swiftly entered the kitchen. “Who has just bused (收拾) the back right table ” he shouted, his voice sharp with urgency. My hands, slippery with bubbles from the bowl I was washing, nearly let it slip through my fingers. I wanted to say I was guilty, but Aaron’s cold stare didn’t promise a happy reward for the guy who admitted. Finally, a mix of fear and my own conscience pushed the response out of my mouth.
“I did, Aaron.”
“What were you thinking Get back out here and look at what you missed!” His words forced me forward. I grabbed a rag (抹布) and followed him out to table twenty-two. As we made our way through the restaurant, he said something about rags, but I didn’t hear clearly with other conversations going on around us.
I quickly realized the true issue was the mess beneath the table. A nearly full cup of beer had tipped over, creating a small lake on the floor. It was a significant mistake on my part. “Take care of it!” Aaron tuned and stormed off to the front of the restaurant.
I dropped down to clean up the beer. That was when another problem occurred. I had brought only one rag. One already wet rag. It did nothing but increase the size of the lake. “More rags,” I thought. Immediately, I rushed into the kitchen and hurriedly grabbed five dry rags, hoping Aaron wouldn’t notice my brief absence.
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150個左右；
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way.
Paragraph 2: After cleaning up the mess, I reflected on Aaron’s words.
湖南省長沙市第一中學2024-2025學年高三下學期月考（六）英語試題
第二節 （滿分25分）
閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。
I stood in the restaurant kitchen, my eyes wide(獨立主格，描寫狀態), arms hanging awkwardly(獨立主格，描寫動作), ready to work but unsure of what to do(賓從)(adj短語做補語). “You will be trained first,” my manager Aaron said, “and do remember to check every detail!(do型強調句)” With these words, he walked away.
A workmate threw me a dish brush and said, “Let’s get started.” He introduced me to the basics of washing dishes and demonstrated the process. This was the beginning of my part-time job, a new stage(同位語) where I was both eager to learn and anxious about the challenges ahead.
On a Friday night, Aaron swiftly entered the kitchen. “Who has just bused (收拾) the back right table ” he shouted, his voice sharp with urgency(獨立主格，描寫人物). My hands, slippery with bubbles from the bowl(adj短語做補語) I was washing(定從), nearly let it slip through my fingers. I wanted to say I was guilty(賓從), but Aaron’s cold stare didn’t promise a happy reward for the guy who admitted. Finally, a mix of fear and my own conscience pushed the response out of my mouth(心理描寫).
“I did, Aaron.”
“What were you thinking Get back out here and look at what you missed(賓從)!” His words forced me forward. I grabbed a rag (抹布) and followed him out to table twenty-two. As we made our way through the restaurant(狀從), he said something about rags, but I didn’t hear clearly with other conversations going on around us(with復合結構).
I quickly realized the true issue was the mess beneath the table(賓從). A nearly full cup of beer had tipped over, creating a small lake on the floor(現在分詞做結果狀語). It was a significant mistake on my part. “Take care of it!” Aaron tuned and stormed off to the front of the restaurant.
I dropped down to clean up the beer. That was when another problem occurred(表從). I had brought only one rag. One already wet rag(補語，前面放句號表強調). It did nothing but increase the size of the lake. “More rags,” I thought. Immediately, I rushed into the kitchen and hurriedly grabbed five dry rags, hoping(現在分詞做伴隨動作) Aaron wouldn’t notice my brief absence(賓從).
注意：1. 續寫詞數應為150個左右；
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1: I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way.
Paragraph 2: After cleaning up the mess, I reflected on Aaron’s words.
1. 讀后續寫類型分析
本文屬于生活經歷類讀后續寫，講述了一個新手在餐廳打工的經歷。續寫時需要圍繞主人公的成長、情感變化以及如何解決問題展開。構思時應注重情感的遞進和問題的解決，布局上可以從主人公的內心活動、動作描寫以及環境變化入手，提煉出“犯錯—反思—成長”的框架。
2. 故事山模式分析
開端：主人公初入職場，緊張且不知所措。
發展：主人公犯錯，經理嚴厲批評，主人公感到恐懼和內疚。
高潮：主人公試圖解決問題，但遇到新的困難（濕抹布無法清理）。
結局：主人公反思并成長。
3. 續寫銜接點
情感銜接：主人公的緊張、內疚、反思。
動作銜接：清理啤酒、拿抹布、與經理的互動。
環境銜接：餐廳的忙碌氛圍、廚房與餐廳的空間轉換。
4. 伏筆與沖突點
伏筆：經理的嚴厲態度、主人公的緊張情緒。
沖突點：主人公的失誤、清理啤酒時的困難。
隱含線索：主人公的成長與責任感。
解決方案：主人公通過反思和行動解決問題。
5. 表格分析
分析角度 內容 原文反應句
人物刻畫 主人公初入職場，緊張且不知所措；經理嚴厲但注重細節。 “I stood in the restaurant kitchen, my eyes wide, arms hanging awkwardly.”
情感層次 緊張、內疚、反思、成長。 “A mix of fear and my own conscience pushed the response out of my mouth.”
關鍵情節點 主人公犯錯，經理批評，主人公試圖解決問題。 “Take care of it!” Aaron turned and stormed off.
語言特色 簡潔直接，突出緊張氛圍。 “His voice sharp with urgency.”
關鍵詞分析 緊張、內疚、反思、成長。 “fear,” “conscience,” “mistake,” “reflection.”
心理描寫 主人公的內心活動豐富，從緊張到內疚再到反思。 “I wanted to say I was guilty, but Aaron’s cold stare didn’t promise...”
動作描寫 主人公的動作描寫細致，突出緊張感。 “My hands, slippery with bubbles from the bowl I was washing...”
環境描寫 餐廳的忙碌氛圍，廚房與餐廳的空間轉換。 “As we made our way through the restaurant...”
隱含主題 成長與責任感。 “I had brought only one rag. One already wet rag.”
情感轉折 從緊張到內疚再到反思。 “A mix of fear and my own conscience pushed the response out...”
空間轉換 廚房到餐廳的空間轉換。 “I rushed into the kitchen and hurriedly grabbed five dry rags...”
時間過渡 從犯錯到解決問題的過渡。 “Immediately, I rushed into the kitchen...”
6. 續寫推薦例句
動作描寫
He swiftly grabbed the rag and rushed to the table.
She carefully wiped the spilled beer, trying not to make a bigger mess.
With trembling hands, he picked up the broken pieces.
She hurriedly fetched more rags from the kitchen.
He knelt down to clean the floor, his heart pounding.
She quickly mopped up the liquid, hoping no one noticed.
He dashed back to the kitchen, his mind racing.
She gently placed the clean dishes on the shelf.
心理描寫
A wave of guilt washed over him as he realized his mistake.
She felt a knot of anxiety tighten in her chest.
He couldn’t shake the feeling of dread as he approached the table.
She was overwhelmed with a sense of responsibility.
He struggled to calm his racing thoughts.
She felt a surge of determination to fix the situation.
He was torn between fear and the need to do the right thing.
She reflected on her actions, realizing how much she had learned.
環境描寫
The kitchen was a whirlwind of activity, with everyone focused on their tasks.
The restaurant buzzed with the sounds of clinking dishes and chatter.
The dim lighting in the dining area created a cozy yet busy atmosphere.
The smell of freshly cooked food filled the air, mingling with the scent of cleaning supplies.
The floor was slick with spilled drinks, making it difficult to walk.
The noise from the kitchen echoed through the restaurant, adding to the chaos.
The tables were neatly arranged, but the mess under table twenty-two stood out.
The cool air from the kitchen contrasted with the warmth of the dining area.
7. 高級替換詞
場景 常見詞 高級替換詞
緊張 nervous anxious, uneasy
內疚 guilty remorseful, ashamed
反思 reflect ponder, contemplate
成長 grow mature, develop
忙碌 busy hectic, bustling
8. 高中語法現象與地道搭配
語法現象
現在分詞作狀語：
原文： “My hands, (being) slippery with bubbles from the bowl I was washing, nearly let it slip through my fingers.”
分析： “slippery with bubbles” 是現在分詞短語，修飾 “hands”。
賓語從句：
原文： “He said something about rags, but I didn’t hear clearly with other conversations going on around us.”
分析： “something about rags” 是賓語從句，省略了引導詞 “that”。
地道搭配
let it slip：
詞意： 讓某物滑落。
例句： “She let the secret slip during the conversation.”
近義詞： drop, lose
反義詞： hold, grasp
storm off：
詞意： 怒氣沖沖地離開。
例句： “He stormed off after the argument.”
近義詞： march off, leave angrily
反義詞： stay, remain
take care of：
詞意： 處理，照顧。
例句： “Can you take care of this issue for me ”
近義詞： handle, manage
反義詞： neglect, ignore
rush into：
詞意： 匆忙進入。
例句： “She rushed into the room, out of breath.”
近義詞： hurry into, dash into
反義詞： stroll into, walk slowly
reflect on：
詞意： 反思。
例句： “He took a moment to reflect on his actions.”
近義詞： ponder, contemplate
反義詞： ignore, disregard
Possible Versions
Version 1
Paragraph 1: I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way.
His arms were crossed, and his expression was unreadable(人物神態描寫). My heart skipped a beat(緊張心理描寫) as I clutched the dry rags tightly(狀從), hoping(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作) he wouldn’t notice my earlier mistake(賓從). “What are you doing ” he asked, his voice low but firm(獨立主格反應狀態). I stammered, “I… I needed more rags to clean the spill.” He nodded slightly, his eyes narrowing(獨立主格做神態說明) as if assessing my response(狀從省略). “Hurry up,” he finally said, stepping aside(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作). Relieved(adj單獨使用做主語補語或狀語), I dashed back to the table, my hands trembling(獨立主格做神態說明) as I began to soak up the beer with the fresh rags(狀從). The restaurant buzzed around me(環境描寫), but all I could focus on(定從) was the task at hand.
Paragraph 2: After cleaning up the mess, I reflected on Aaron’s words.
“Check every detail,” he had said. I realized that my haste had caused the problem, and I vowed to be more careful in the future(賓從). As I stood up(狀從), wiping my hands on my apron(現在分詞做伴隨動作), I noticed Aaron watching me from a distance. This time, his expression was softer, almost approving(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作)(情緒描寫). I felt a sense of accomplishment(心理描寫), knowing(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作) I had handled the situation despite the initial panic(賓從). The rest of the shift passed smoothly, and by the end of the night, I felt more confident in my abilities(心理刻畫). This experience taught me the importance of attention to detail and the value of staying calm under pressure(主旨升華).
加分點與替換詞：
語法加分點：過去進行時（was standing）、條件句（if assessing）、動詞不定式（to clean）。
替換詞：unreadable → inscrutable, stammered → faltered, relieved → eased.
情緒描寫：heart skipped a beat, trembling, sense of accomplishment.
動作描寫：clutched tightly, dashed back, wiping hands.
Version 2
Paragraph 1: I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way. His arms were crossed(神態描寫), and his expression was unreadable(神態描寫). My heart skipped a beat(心理描寫) as I clutched the rags tightly(狀從), unsure of what to say(adj做補語+賓從). “Where do you think you’re going ” he asked, his voice low but firm. I stammered, “I—I needed more rags to clean up the mess.” He nodded slightly, his eyes narrowing(獨立主格刻畫人物神態) as if assessing my sincerity(狀從省略形式). “Good,” he said finally, stepping aside(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作). “But next time, think ahead. We don’t have time for mistakes in this kitchen.” His words stung(很好的句子), but I knew he was right(賓從). I hurried back to the table, determined to prove myself.(adj短語做主語補語)
Paragraph 2: After cleaning up the mess, I reflected on Aaron’s words.The kitchen was quieter now, the rush of the dinner service fading into a steady hum(獨立主格，環境描寫). As I wiped down the last table(狀從), I realized that this job was more than just washing dishes and cleaning spills(賓從). It was about attention to detail, about taking responsibility for my actions.(遞進句式，提煉主題) Aaron’s harshness wasn’t just about the mess; it was about teaching me to be better(遞進句式). I felt a newfound respect for him and for the work we did(定從)(心理刻畫). This wasn’t just a part-time job; it was a lesson in diligence and accountability(遞進句式). I knew I still had a lot to learn(賓從), but I was ready to face the challenges ahead.
第二節 （滿分25分）
I had just rushed out when I found Aaron standing in my way. “What’s up” he asked sharply, his eyes fixed on me(獨立主格). Feeling the weight of my mistake(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作), I stammered nervously, “I need dry rags...to...clean...” Upon hearing this(一...就...), Aaron let out a heavy sigh. “You should have checked every detail(虛擬語氣),” he remarked, a hint of disappointment in his voice(同位語做補語). “This job isn’t just about reacting; it’s also about being careful(遞進句式). Now, go clean that up!” Avoiding his gaze(動作反應心理), I dashed towards table twenty-two(對原文的銜接). With an ample supply of rags(狀語), I threw myself into the task, tirelessly mopping, scrubbing, and wiping(并列，現在分詞短語做伴隨動作).
After cleaning up the mess, I reflected on Aaron’s words. They were sharp but absolutely right. My inexperience and initial anxiety in this new job had led me to overlook crucial details, and I should have been more mindful of my work(虛擬語氣). Taking a deep breath(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作反應心理), I returned to my duties, bearing Aaron’s words in mind(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作). With very dish washed and every table cleared(狀語，過去分詞短語做后置定語), I made sure to double-check my work. Everything went well and soon I realized this carefulness would not just apply to cleaning; it would influence every aspect of my job(遞進句式升華主題), preparing me to embrace any challenge with responsibility and confidence(現在分詞短語做伴隨動作).

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