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Part 6　Writing
非正式的電子郵件(提供建議)
寫作題目
　　假如你是李華,你的朋友肖東給你寫了一封郵件,說他進入高中以來,感覺學習壓力很大,不適應新的生活和學習環境。現請你用英語給他回一封電子郵件,給他一些建議。
注意:
1.寫作詞數不少于80個;
2.開頭已給出,不計入總詞數;
3.可適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。
Dear Xiao Dong,
I feel sorry to hear that you are suffering from the great stress.


Yours,
Li Hua
思路點撥
遣詞造句
Ⅰ.用本單元所學單詞或短語填空
1.　　　　 n.自信
2.　　　　 adj.自信的
3.　　　　 adv.在前面,向前
4.　　　　　　處理,對付,應付
5.　　　　　　……以及……;除……之外(還)
6.　　　　　　　適應
7.　　　　　　　期待,盼望
答案　1.confidence　2.confident　3.ahead 4.deal with　5.as well as　6.adapt to 7.look forward to
Ⅱ.本單元語塊、語法運用
1.完成句子
第一部分:得知對方遭受巨大壓力,要給對方提些建議幫助他
(1)This situation is not so difficult 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(應付) if you take my advice.
(2)Here are some tips 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(幫助你).
第二部分:適應新環境、緩解壓力的具體建議
(3)Taking more exercise can rest your brain 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(以及增強你的體質).
(4)It’s a good way 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(對自己有信心).
(5)You should always think that you’re 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(一點一點地取得進步).
(6)That way, you will be more confident, and it is 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(使你的學習進步的關鍵).
第三部分:希望對方采納建議,盡快適應
(7)I 　　　　 　　　　(真的希望) you will find these ideas of great use.
答案　(1)to deal with　(2)to help you
(3)as well as build up your body　(4)to have confidence in yourself　(5)making progress little by little　(6)the key to getting your study improved　(7)do hope
2.句式升級
(8)把句(6)改寫成一個含有非限制性定語從句的句子


答案　(8)That way, you will be more confident, which is the key to getting your study improved.
連句成篇
Dear Xiao Dong,
I feel sorry to hear that you are suffering from the great stress. However, this situation is not so difficult to deal with if you take my advice. Here are some tips to help you.
First, why not turn to your teachers and classmates If you do this, I’m sure you will soon get used to the new school life. Second, as far as I’m concerned, taking more exercise can rest your brain as well as build up your body. Last but not least, it’s a good way to have confidence in yourself and you should always think that you’re making progress little by little. That way, you will be more confident, which is the key to getting your study improved.
I do hope you will find these ideas of great use. And I do believe that, with your effort, you can adapt to the school life and get ahead.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
寫作積累
關于建議信的增分佳句
1.開頭:表達安慰,給予幫助
①I’m sorry to learn/know/hear that you are now having trouble/difficulty communicating with others and that you often feel lonely.得知/知道/聽說現在你與他人交流有困難,并且你經常感到孤獨,我很難過。
②You have asked for my advice on...and I will try to make some suggestions.你已經向我征求關于……的建議,我會盡力提出一些建議。
③Here are some tips/suggestions to help you.這里有一些對你有幫助的建議。
2.主體:分析現狀,提出建議
①To begin with, tell them you will do voluntary work in your spare time, which won’t affect your study.首先,告訴他們你將在業余時間做志愿工作,這不會影響你的學習。
②Besides, it’s a good chance to communicate with more people, thus helping you accumulate social experience.此外,這是一個與更多的人交流的好機會,從而幫助你積累社會經驗。
③Therefore, I suggest that we hold an English forum after watching movies, where students can express their feelings and opinions freely about the plots, or the characters from the movie.因此,我建議我們在看完電影后舉行一個英語討論會,在那里學生可以自由地表達他們對電影情節或電影中的角色的感受和觀點。
3.結尾:表達希望采納建議
①Please take my advice into consideration and make a final decision.請考慮我的建議,并作出最后的決定。
②Hopefully, my advice can be taken into consideration and the club members can have a better time.希望我的建議能被考慮,俱樂部成員能過得更愉快。
③I hope you will find these proposals/suggestions practical/useful/helpful.我希望你會發現這些建議很實用/有用/有幫助。
實戰演練1
假設你是晨光中學高三學生李津。你校英文報收到一封署名為Chris的高一新生的來信,在信中Chris表示自己不能適應高中生活,急需一些建議,為了幫助他,請用英語給他寫一封回信。內容包括:
1.表示理解并給予安慰;
2.多與老師和同學們溝通、交流;
3.合理分配時間(如學習、鍛煉和休息的時間等);
4.積極參加學校活動。
注意:
1.寫作詞數應為80個左右;
2.可適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。
Dear Chris,




Yours,
Li Jin
讀后續寫
寫作題目
　　閱讀下面材料,根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。
Jack and his wife Tonya were sailing around Africa with their friends Max and Sasha. One day they saw a big fishing boat. It was moving fast. “Hello!” they shouted. The men on the boat looked at them angrily. Max looked carefully at the boat.
“Something’s wrong with their fishing net,”he said. They got nearer to the net. “What’s that ” said Tonya. “There is something in the net. It’s alive.” Very slowly, they moved nearer.
“I can see it now,” said Tonya. “It’s a killer whale—it’s hurt. There’s blood in the water. How can we help it ” “I can see it too. It’s a baby but we must be careful,” said Max.
Jack jumped into the water. “I can get the net off its fin,” he said.
Jack got the net off the baby killer whale. There was a big cut on its fin. It swam away. Suddenly there were other killer whales near the boat.
“Jack!Get in quickly,” shouted Tonya.
Jack swam to the boat as fast as he could. “I’m going to call that baby killer whale Lucky,” he said.
As they moved away, a storm broke.
Jack said, “We must get away from the wind. I can see a town over there. Let’s go.”
The town got nearer but the waves got bigger. Suddenly a very big wave hit the boat.
“Is everyone OK ” shouted Jack. “Tonya ... She’s not in the boat,” said Sasha. “She’s in the water.”
They looked into the cold, dark water for hours. “Tonya! Say something, Tonya. Where are you ” shouted Max.
The wind got stronger and the boat was full of water. Another big wave hit the boat. “Jack, do you want us all to die ” said Max. “We can’t stay here any more. Tonya is wearing a life jacket and she can swim very well. Let’s sail to the town.”
Moments later the boat hit a beach. They went out. Max and Sasha lay on the beach. Jack sat near the water, looking at the sea and thinking of Tonya.
注意:續寫詞數應為150個左右。
At that time, Tonya was five hundred meters away in the sea.




　　Jack was walking along the beach when suddenly he saw someone waving to him.




文本分析
初識文本
重點詞匯
1.alive adj.活著的
2.get away from(得以)離開,脫身
3.wave n.波浪 v.揮手
4.be full of...充滿……
5.(be)thinking of惦記,牽掛
障礙詞匯
1.sail v.(人)乘船航行
2.net n.網
3.fin n.(魚的)鰭
4.cut n.傷口
5.life jacket 救生衣
6.hit v.到達(某地)
故事要素
深研文本
預測情節發展
第一段:那時,Tonya在五百米外的海里→Tonya一個人,十分恐懼,拼命求救→Tonya被“Lucky”所在的虎鯨群救了→Tonya被虎鯨群帶到近岸處。
第二段:Jack正沿著海灘走著,突然他看到有人向他揮手→Jack發現向他揮手的人是Tonya→Tonya上岸后向Jack說明是“Lucky”救了自己→Jack向“Lucky”表示感謝→“Lucky”和其他虎鯨游回大海。
遣詞造句
1.用單詞或短語填空
(1)　　　　 vt.包圍
(2)　　　　 adj.害怕的
(3)　　　　　　 啟程;出發
(4)　　　　　　 踏上
答案　(1)surround　(2)frightened (3)set off/out　(4)set foot on
2.完成句子
(5)Tonya 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(被冰冷的海水包圍著), and she was so frightened and just shouted crazily for help.
(6)Tonya found herself 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(正在從海里升起來).
(7)　　　　(令人驚訝的是), she was on the back of a big killer whale and there were some killer whales around her.
(8)Tonya set foot on the beach, and then Jack ran towards her and 　　　　 　　　　 　　　　(緊緊地抱住她).
(9)Jack walked towards Lucky and stroked its fin, 　　　　 　　　　(真誠地說), “Thank you, Lucky!”
答案　(5)was surrounded by the cold seawater
(6)rising out of the sea　(7)Surprisingly　(8)hugged her tightly　(9)saying sincerely
3.句式升級
(10)用非謂語動詞作狀語改寫句(5)

(11)用with的復合結構改寫句(7)

(12)用the moment引導的時間狀語從句改寫句(8)

答案　(10)Surrounded by the cold seawater, she was so frightened and just shouted crazily for help.
(11)Surprisingly, she was on the back of a big killer whale with some killer whales around her.
(12)The moment Tonya set foot on the beach, Jack ran towards her and hugged her tightly.
連句成篇
　　At that time,Tonya was five hundred meters away in the sea. Surrounded by the cold seawater, she was so frightened and just shouted crazily for help. Suddenly, Tonya found herself rising out of the sea. Surprisingly, she was on the back of a big killer whale with some killer whales around her. Among them, Tonya saw a small one, who was saved by Jack a few hours ago—Lucky. They set off to catch up with the boat.
Jack was walking along the beach when suddenly he saw someone waving to him. Later, he found that it was Tonya! The moment Tonya set foot on the beach, Jack ran towards her and hugged her tightly. Tonya smiled, “Don’t worry. I’m fine. I think we should thank the killer whales who saved my life. Look, the small one is Lucky!” Jack walked towards Lucky and stroked its fin, saying sincerely, “Thank you, Lucky!” Lucky shook its fin and then these killer whales swam away into the vast sea.
寫作積累
心理描寫—樂觀情緒
一、詞匯
1.happy/glad/cheerful/delighted/pleased/joyful adj.高興的,快樂的
2.content/satisfied adj.滿足的,滿意的
3.optimistic adj.樂觀的
4.positive adj.積極的
5.thrilled adj.非常興奮的
6.pleasure/joy/delight n.愉快,快樂
7.be in a good mood 心情好
8.be over the moon 非常高興
9.cheer up 使振作起來,使高興起來
二、句子
1.He brightened up and broke into a wide smile.他高興起來,綻開燦爛的笑容。
2.All the people present were enveloped in an atmosphere of joy.在場的所有人都沉浸在歡樂的氣氛中。
3.The sight filled her with childlike excitement.這種情景令她像孩子般興奮起來。
4.He was so excited that he could hardly contain himself.他十分激動,幾乎控制不住自己。
5.He rushed into the room, laughing madly and clapping his hands with delight.他沖進房間,狂笑著,高興地拍著手。
實戰演練2
　　閱讀下面材料,根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。
Robert and Henry were friends in the same class.They always played together and went home together. One day, Robert and Henry were going home from school. On turning a corner, Robert cried out,“A fight! Let’s go and see!”
“No,” said Henry,“let’s go home quietly and not meddle with(干涉) this quarrel. We have nothing to do with it and may get into trouble. Also, our parents are expecting to have dinner with us and I don’t want them to worry about me.”
“You are a coward(懦夫), and afraid to go,” said Robert, and he ran off. Henry went straight home, and in the afternoon he went to school as usual.
But Robert had told other boys that Henry was a coward, and they laughed at him a great deal. From then on, they looked down upon Henry and didn’t want to play with him.
Henry was sad but he wasn’t angry with Robert for his rude behaviour, because he knew that they misunderstood him, and that he ought to be afraid of nothing but doing wrong.Thus, he just ignored the other boys’ laughter and continued to go to school and study as usual. However, Robert didn’t invite Henry to go home together anymore.Instead, he had some other boys who also thought Henry was a coward. Every day after school, they didn’t go home directly but went to the river or somewhere to play games and had a lot of fun.
A few days later, Robert was bathing with his new friends in a river, and got out of his depth. He struggled and cried for help, but he failed. The boys who had called Henry a coward got out of the water as fast as they could, and did nothing to help him.
注意:續寫詞數應為150個左右。
　　It seemed as if Robert would be dying.



　　Thus,Robert’s life was saved.



答案與分層梯度式解析
Part 6　Writing
實戰演練1
One possible version:
Dear Chris,
Hearing from you and learning that you couldn’t adapt to your senior high school life, I feel so sorry and really understand you. Here is my advice.
First of all, communicating with your teachers and classmates is really of great importance. It will be beneficial for you to adapt to the new environment and life. Besides, you should allocate your time reasonably. For example, do some exercise and have a rest regularly. In addition, you should take part in some school activities actively through which you can make more friends in senior high.
The above I mentioned are my suggestions. Hope they will be helpful.
Yours,
Li Jin
實戰演練2
寫作指導
故事要素 Time one day, a few days later
Place at a corner, in a river
Character Robert, Henry, the boys
Reason Robert misunderstood Henry, thinkingthat Henry was a coward.
Conflict Robert was drowning in the river. He cried for help but the boys got out of the water and did nothing to help him.
前文故事情節 Robert和Henry是同班的朋友。他們總是一起玩、一起回家。一天,他們在回家路上看到有人打架,Robert想去看看但Henry拒絕了,于是Robert就認定Henry是懦夫并告訴了其他的男孩。Henry并不生氣,但Robert卻選擇和其他人一起玩而不和Henry玩。幾天后,Robert在河里溺水,其他男孩趕緊從水里出來而不去救他。
續寫方向 Paragraph 1: It seemed as if Robert would be dying. ①根據已給出的續寫首句“It seemed as if Robert would be dying.”可知,本段主要講述Robert落水后的情景。 ②Robert是否會得救 誰救的Robert (根據續寫第二段首句“Thus, Robert’s life was saved.”可以猜想,第一段中應該出現Henry救Robert的過程及其表現出的勇敢。)
Paragraph 2: Thus, Robert’s life was saved. 根據續寫第二段首句“Thus, Robert’s life was saved.”可知,Robert得救了。因此本段應講述Robert得救后的故事。Robert最終明白自己誤會了Henry,知道了什么才是真正的勇敢,兩人重歸于好。
整理思路 續寫第一段:Robert快要淹死了→Henry恰巧路過→Henry毫不猶豫地下水救Robert。 續寫第二段:Robert得救了→Robert明白了什么是真正的勇敢,兩人誤會解開→Robert得出的感悟。
One possible version:
　　It seemed as if Robert would be dying. Just at that moment, Henry happened to be passing by. Hearing the screams, Henry ran to the riverside, threw off his clothes and jumped into the water without hesitation. He grabbed Robert just before he was sinking. In spite of much danger and with great effort, he brought Robert to the riverbank.
Thus, Robert’s life was saved. Robert and his new friends were ashamed of having called Henry a coward.They realized that Henry had true courage. They said sorry to Henry for their rude behaviour and asked for his forgiveness. Henry forgave them happily. He and Robert were friends again and they went home together as usual.From this, Robert learned what true courage was—never be afraid to do good, but always fear to do evil.
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