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課件13張PPT。 May七年級提優課程-書面表達
常見錯誤分析
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1用詞不當信息提示
????????李華平時總是忙于功課,很少做家務。母親節這一天,她想幫媽媽做飯,卻不小心切了手指,本想讓媽媽在節日期間好好休息,卻未能如愿。以“On Mother’s Day”為題寫一篇詞數為80-100的短文。要求條理清晰、意思連貫、語句通順、標點正確。
1習作? On Mother's Day
??????I'm usually busy with my studies and do few (1) housework when I come back from school. It was Mother's Day yesterday. I wanted Mum to have a good rest and I did all instead (2) her. I got up early yesterday morning and bought a lot of vegetables, fish and meat in the market. I washed them and then began to cook. I was sure I could do as well like (3) Mum. Bad luck! I cut one of my fingers and cried out. Mum and Dad rushed into (4) and Mum asked Dad to take me to the hospital. When we came back, dinner (5) ready. I felt sorry and said, “Mum had a busy Mother's Day again!”
(1)housework是不可數名詞,應用little來修飾。(2)instead是副詞,后不能接賓語,這兒應該用instead of。(3)like雖然可用作介詞,意為“像”,但這兒是as... as...結構,因此此處應改為as well as...。(4)into是介詞,其后要接賓語,但句中無賓語,所以改為副詞in。(5)ready是形容詞,不能單獨作謂語,所以其前要加was。1★ 精品范文 On Mother’s Day
I'm usually busy with my studies and do little housework when I come back from school. It was Mother's Day yesterday. I wanted Mum to have a good rest and I did all instead of her. I got up early yesterday morning and bought a lot of vegetables, fish and meat in the market. I washed them and then began to cook. I was sure I could do as well as Mum. Bad luck! I cut one of my fingers and cried out. Mum and Dad rushed in and Mum asked Dad to take me to the hospital. When we came back, dinner was ready. I felt sorry and said, “Mum had a busy Mother's Day again!”2 句型結構、固定搭配錯誤信息提示
?????? 眾所周知吸煙有害健康。請以“Smoking is harmful to health”為題寫一篇至少100詞的英語短文,來介紹一下吸煙的危害,以喚起人們戒煙。
2習作 Smoking is harmful to health
As (1) is known to all that smoking is bad for health. In China there have (2) millions of smokers. Each year millions of people die from smoking.
Smoking makes many people ill. Those who often smoke have black teeth. Lots of smokers cough day and night. Lung cancer is one of the most serious illnesses that are caused by smoking. Many people suffer from this terrible disease and lose their lives.
Smoking does harm not only to smokers themselves, but also to non-smokers, especially women and children. They may have their health harm (3) because of the smoke caused by cigarettes.
Everyone agrees that smoking is not good for health, but it is not easy for smokers to giving up smoking (4). I hope all the smokers will stop smoking for the good of their own health and also for the people around them. Let’s enjoying (5) clean and fresh air together.
(1)將As改為It?！癐t is known to all that+從句”是一個固定結構。意思是“眾所周知……”。(2)句型there is/are表示“某地有某物”，該句型強調“存在”，而have/has常用來表達“某人有某物”，強調“所有”，其主語通常是人。因此，將have改為are。(3)將harm改為harmed。“have sth. done”是一個固定結構,意思是“使 / 讓某物遭受……”。本句的意思是“吸煙產生的毒氣很可能使他們(婦女、兒童)的健康遭受到侵害”,因為health被smoke損害,因此,要用過去分詞harmed,以表示被動的含義。(4)英語中表達“某人做某事很不容易”常用句型“It is not easy for sb. to do sth.”。 應將giving up smoking改為give up smoking。(5)let’s后要跟動詞原形構成“Let’s do sth.”結構。應將enjoying改為enjoy。2★ 精品范文?? Smoking is harmful to health
???????? It is known to all that smoking is bad for health. In China there are millions of smokers. Each year millions of people die from smoking.
??????? Smoking makes many people ill. Those who often smoke have black teeth. Lots of smokers cough day and night. Lung cancer is one of the most serious illnesses that are caused by smoking. Many people suffer from this terrible disease and lose their lives.
????????Smoking does harm not only to smokers themselves, but also to non-smokers, especially women and children. They may have their health harmed because of the smoke caused by cigarettes.
????????Everyone agrees that smoking is not good for health, but it is not easy for smokers to give up smoking. I hope all the smokers will stop smoking for the good of their own health and also for the people around them. Let’s enjoy clean and fresh air together.3 文體格式錯誤
信息提示
???????? 2015年3月12日是星期一,也是植樹節。那天天氣晴朗,上午8點半,老師和同學們在校門口集合,步行去西山植樹。植樹前,老師告訴同學們樹木可以凈化空氣、防風固土、美化環境,并要求每人栽五棵小樹。同學們干得都很賣力。班長林濤不顧生病,完成自己的任務后,又幫助其他人,他是我們學習的好榜樣。請根據提示內容,寫一篇日記。
3 習作 2015.3.12? Monday (1)???????
????????????????? Sunny (2)?????????????????????????
Dear friends (3),
　　It is March 12th today. At half past eight, all the teachers and students in our school gathered in front of the school gate. Then we went on foot to the Western Hill to plant trees. Before we started working, the teacher gave us a talk on the importance of planting trees. He said that trees can help to keep the air clean, protect us from strong wind and sand and make our city more beautiful. Then he showed us how to plant trees and asked each of us to plant at least five trees.

???????(1)將日記的日期2015.3.12 Monday 改為 Monday, March 12th, 2015或March 12th, 2015, Monday。寫英文日記時應注意以下兩點:英文日記的格式與中文日記的格式相差不大。日期和星期應寫在第一行的左上角頂格位置,日期和星期的寫法應注意:年、月、日俱全時,可按月、日、年或日、月、年的次序寫。如:March 12th, 2015或12th March, 2015; 只有月、日時,其順序為月、日,月份可用縮略式。如:September 20th或Sept. 20th;如果要寫明星期幾,可將其放在日期的前面或后面。如:Friday, Oct. 20, 2015或Oct. 20, 2015, Friday。（2)寫日記時,天氣狀況應寫在日期的右邊且靠右頂格,而不是寫在日期的下面。天氣狀況一般用形容詞表示。如:Fine (晴),Sunny(晴), Rainy(雨), Snowy (雪), Windy(多風), Cloudy(多云)等。(3)本文要求寫一篇日記,而不是書信。Dear friends是用在寫信時的稱呼語,在寫日記時應去掉。1 習作
??????? After that we started working. Some strong boys dug holes, some carried water and some girls put trees in the holes. We all worked hard. Among us, Lin Tao, our monitor set a good example to us. Though he was ill, he worked harder. When he finished his task, he went on to help others. He was wet all over after work. Looking at the lines of the young trees, we smiled happily.
????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Truly yours, (4)??
????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Mary Baker (5)???
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(4)和(5)都是書信的落款格式,不能用在日記的寫作中,要去掉。在寫作文時,同學們一定要熟練掌握書信和日記的寫作格式,不能混淆。3★ 精品范文Monday,March12th, 2015?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Sunny
?????? It is March 12th today. At half past eight, all the teachers and students in our school gathered in front of the school gate. Then we went on foot to the Western Hill to plant trees.?
??????Before we started working, the teacher gave us a talk on the importance of planting trees. He said that trees can help to keep the air clean, protect us from strong wind and sand and make our city more beautiful. Then he showed us how to plant trees and asked each of us to plant at least five trees.
??????1★ 精品范文??
???????After that we started working. Some strong boys dug holes, some carried water and some girls put trees in the holes. We all worked hard. Among us, Lin Tao, our monitor set a good example to us. Though he was ill, he worked harder. When he finished his task, he went on to help others. He was wet all over after work. Looking at the lines of the young trees, we smiled happily.

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